1、读后续写读后续写 评分原则：评分原则： 1）内容：内容的丰富性、故事发展的合理性，续写 的完整性 2）词汇语法：使用语言的多样性、准确性和恰当性； （语言为交际服务，不可一味使用所谓“高级”语 言，要与原文语言特点保持一致。） 3）篇章结构：上下文的衔接（包括续写段落之间的 衔接）连贯性； 4）写作规范： 词数少于130的，扣2分； 拼写和标点符号错误多将分数降低一个档次； 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个 档次； 写作步骤：写作步骤： “四步答题法”。 阅读拟稿润色成稿。 Step1 阅读，理清故事情节，找出5W+1How。 画出关键词，预测后续故事 1. make sense of
2、 the main plots of the passange. 2. Analyze the two given sentences as well as ; also; too, or; eitheror; because (of) ;owing to; due to ; thanks to so ; therefore ; thus ; as a result on the contrary ; compared to , but ; yet; however ; besides ; moreover ; in addition for example; such as ; that i
3、s ; ;take for example check whether the verb forms and words spelling is correct. step4 Present (成稿） Produce the final work. 读后续写讲评读后续写讲评 读后续写（满分25分） 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成 一个完整的故事。 Jenny was the only child in her home. She had a quarrel (争吵) with her mother that afternoon and ran out of the house a
4、ngrily. She couldnt help crying when she thought of the scolding(责骂) from her mother. Getting around aimlessly in the street for hours，she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat. She stood beside a stand(货摊) for a while, watching the middle-aged man busy doing his business. However, wi
5、th no money in hand, she had to leave. The man behind the stand noticed Jenny and asked, “Hey, do you want to have the noodles？” “Oh, yes, but I dont have money.” she replied. “Ill treat you today,” said the man. He brought her a bowl of noodles, the smell so attractive. As she was eating, Jenny cri
6、ed silently. “What is it?” asked the man kindly. “Actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears. “Even a stranger will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother drove me out of the house.” Hearing the words, the man smiled, “I only gave you a bowl of noodles. But
7、it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby. Can you number the times she cooked for you? Have you expressed your thankfulness to her？” Jenny sat there, speechless；she remembered her mothers familiar face. “A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel grateful(感激的). Why havent I tha
8、nked my mum for what she has done for me?” On the way home, Jenny made up her mind to make an apology(道歉) to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home. Paragraph 1： Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath._ _ Paragraph 2： A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. _ How
9、 did she feel?what did she do? What did Jenny do before her mother came back? What would she do? 第一步，迅速获取故事情节（第一步，迅速获取故事情节（5W+1H) 1.who: Jenny, mother,stranger 2.when: one afternoon 3. where: 3. What: quarrel with her mother,a stranger gave her a bowl of noodels when she was hungry. 4.Why:the strang
10、ers word reminded jenny of what her mother had done. 5.How: Jenny felt regretful and decided to make an apology. 第二步，理清人物情感变化。 第二步，理清人物情感变化 Storyline how did Jenny feel about her mother? Beginning: quarrelled, ran out(para1) angry Development: a stranger, a bowl of noodles(para2 mean and cruel clima
11、x :Strangers words,mothers love(para3 he unlocked the door and opened it. Outside stood a tall man wearing a black raincoat and black rubber boots. He said he was a salesman and asked politely if our mother or father was at home Without thinking, my brother said:“No.” He asked if we would like to bu
12、y some comic books which he was selling. I quickly explained that we were not supposed to buy anything without our parents permission. Then, as I was about to close the door,he forced his way into our house.He took out a knife and forced me to tie up my brothers hands with some rope which he took ou
13、t from his pocket. I tied up his hands but tied them in a special way so my brother could untie himself.The man then tied my hands up and locked both of us in the kitchen. Soon, he went upstairs to search the bedroom for valuables. I managed to teach my brother to untie the rope on his hands.He then
14、 untied me. I rushed to the telephone to call the police, but the line was dead. One possible version: The doors were all locked from the outside and what was worse, I did not have the keys. But luckily, the man forgot to lock the kitchen window. Both my brother and I managed to get out of the house
15、 through the window and we ran to the nearby police station and asked them for help. The police arrived at our house as soon as possible. And as a result, the man was caught. Just at the same time our parents came back home. The police asked my family to go to the police station. It was at there tha
16、t the police told us the man was a wanted robber pretending to sell comic books and that they had been looking for him for a long time. The police praised my brother and me for our brave behaviour. After we went back home, I told my parents the whole story about the robbery. They were thankful that we were not hurt but they scolded me for not stopping my brother from opening the door to strangers. I learned a lesson on safety and responsibility.
