1、WhenWhereWhoWhatWhyHow on a bright, warm July afternoonfrom home to AlaskaMac, his two friends, Paul and BeckyMac was chased by a wolf when cycling alonePoint of viewTensethe third personpast tenseMac was cycling from home to Alaska with his friendsMac pedaled along alone, enjoying the breath-taking
2、 sceneryMarc sensed he was chased by a wolfMac fought against the wolf twice but of little helpMac tried to escape, only to meet a steep uphill climbPaul and Becky drove by and witnessed Macs desperate situationMac heard a large vehicle behind him and he pulled in front of it.PlotKey words:人物：环境：动作：
3、事物：地点：MacfriendsbicyclepedaledhomewolfjumpedcarsclimbPaulPara.1The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Questions to generate(产生) ideas:Did Paul and Becky offer help?What did Paul and Becky do to help Mac out?What was the wolfs reaction?How did Mac feel?What was the result? Was Mac rescued?Para.2A f
4、ew minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.Questions to generate(产生) ideas:After Macs friends arrival, whats their response?Were they grateful to the life-savors?How did they express gratitude?Were they to continue the bike trip to Alaska? On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primar
5、y school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home.
6、He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, thats a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasnt dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him. Macs heart jumped. He found out his can of
7、bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Macs relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Macs bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a
8、second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase. Mac was pedaling hard now. he waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be teari
9、ng into his flesh. At this moment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they
10、 got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.考场习作1 The car abruptly stopped in front of him. But there was still a long distance. Mac realized so long as he predals to
11、the car, he would be saved. Unfortunately, he couldnt even breath with running out of the energy. The wolf was going to catch him. Paul shouted in order to remind him, but he couldnt recognized what he said. When his heart couldnt jamped, his mind turned up his home with his wife and daughter. Insta
12、ntly, he stuck to pedaled. The car was near and near, and the wolf was also near and near. He found the car is in the face, andgave up his bicycle, ran to the car. He made it! He escaped from the wolf. A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They astonished what happened on their friend
13、, and nothing could express their apology for leaving Mac alone. He was tired but still gave a smile to them, which let them knew he had forgiven them. It also let Mac knew life was so lucky that he should take use of every seconds.(165)语言错误太多，二档作文（6-10）考场习作2 The car abruptly stopped in front of him
14、. Paul shouted to Mac. “Come on!” Without hesitation, Mac jumped into the car leaving his bicycle. The wolf looked angry. The wolf hit his bicycle without mercy. Wandering for a while, the wolf left. After a long time to calm down, Mac began to said in a weak voice, “I just thought I would never see
15、 my wife and my lovely daughters again. It is your kindness that saved my life!” A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They were shocked at what they have seen, a broken Bicycle and Mac was worn-out. They asked,”Hey brother! Whats wrong with you?”Mac explained what happened to him and
16、 introduced his new friends to them. Mac said, “without their help, I wont survive. And what happened to me revealed that we should give others a hand when they are in need. “ what a dangerous pedaling! (140)语句结构富有变化，但错误较多，三档作文（11-15）考场习作3 At that moment, Mac jumped to the top of the car. Fortunatel
17、y, he succeeded. Then, realizing what is happening, Paul drove the car away quickly. After a few minutes, the car stopped again. Mac jumped down and thanked Paul and Becky. “it seemed that you had an exciting experience!”Paul said, laughing. “Oh, yes! It was really exciting and I would be caught by
18、the wolf without your help.”Mac replied, “I must wait for my friends! Thank you again.” Noticing that Mac was standing alone without his bicycle, they asked Mac what had happened. Mac told them the wolf, the help of Paul and Beckys. “Wow, it was amazing!”they shouted. “but you will never know what I
19、 felt at that time. My heart jumped widely.” Mac said, “Dont worry, I think it must be an unforgettable pedaling experience for you. You should value it. “one of Macs friends tired to comfort him.”But now, how can I go home without my bicycle?”(164)四档作文（16-20）考场习作4 The car abruptly stopped in front
20、of him. “Man， come in quickly！” shouted Paul. Hearing the voice， Mac got off the bicycle and jumped into the car without hesitation. Before Mac could say a word，the car rushed at an incredibly high speed. Looking back through the window，he found the wolf gradually disappeared in the dark night. Afte
21、r arriving at a safe place，Mac explained what had just happened and thanked Paul and Becky. Then he made a call to inform his friends of his location. A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived. When told about Macs frightening experience，the two were astonished with their mouths widely open
22、， for they didnt meet any animal on their way. Worried about coming across the wolf again，Paul offered to drive them to Alaska wholeheartedly. With two bicycles placed in the back of the car，they set off in the bright sunrise. Staring at the breath-taking scenery along the way， Mac said to himself， “But I never want to show my family to this place！” 情节合理，与短文融洽度高，描写生动 五档作文（21-25）高颜值的卷面，丰富的内涵
