1、例谈例谈段首句的准确性段首句的准确性对书面表达的对书面表达的归档归档影响影响2022.4.20-4.212022.4.20-4.21湖北省部分湖北省部分重点中学重点中学“四校联考四校联考”( (恩施高中、郧阳中学、沙市中学、随州二中恩施高中、郧阳中学、沙市中学、随州二中) )作文点评作文点评要点回顾：要点回顾：How do you find /feel / like ?Better than nothing;There is a sign reading “No Admittance”. struggled into my jacket; in a row; stormed out; roun
2、ded the corner; stand tall高二高二5 5班班黄静怡黄静怡读后续写读后续写2323分！分！高二高二5 5班班余咏宸、殷培杰、胡洁、王余咏宸、殷培杰、胡洁、王依琪依琪应用文应用文1313分！分！ 高二高二1010班班彭宝仪彭宝仪应用文应用文1313分！分！高二高二1010班班 彭宝仪彭宝仪 16.516.5建议：建议：It was too late It was too late beforebefore I I realised I should run away.realised I should run away.高二高二1010班班 李福康李福康 18.518.5
3、 建议：建议： I observed / watched carefully, surprisedly finding that it was my husband.高二高二1010班班 雷琪源雷琪源 续写续写 1515 建议：建议： I didnt know what happened to the truck, wondering why its lights were constantly flashing.高二高二1010班班 张芯语张芯语 应用文应用文 9 9 建议：建议： Currently， with the number of students feeling stressed
4、 out increasing, we decided to organize an event aimed to relieve their study pressure.高二高二5 5班班 李森安李森安 应用文应用文 8.5 8.5 建议：建议： In order to reduce studentspressure and anxiety, a sports festival will be held next month.高二高二5 5班班 陈旭豪陈旭豪空白太多；空白太多；with符合结构的准确性；符合结构的准确性；sitted低低级错误级错误高二高二1010班班 李悦童李悦童 空白太
5、多；书写凌乱；错误太多！空白太多；书写凌乱；错误太多！启发启发1:1:好作文好作文特质：特质：accuracy; accuracy; stick or hold to the stick or hold to the topic/point; topic/point; unity; unity; completeness or adequateness; completeness or adequateness; fluency;fluency; coherencecoherence启发启发2:2:如果依据中国人（阅卷人）如果依据中国人（阅卷人）“字如字如其人、见字如面其人、见字如面”的文化传统，把的文化传统，把书写比喻为人的脸面的话，那么，书写比喻为人的脸面的话，那么，段首句的准确性就是：段首句的准确性就是：脸面的脸面！脸面的脸面！Bye
