1、广州市培英中学广州市培英中学 王会玲王会玲 How many examples are given to describe the awful day of Li Hua?然后记然后记叙事件的发生、发展以及结果。叙述时要注叙事件的发生、发展以及结果。叙述时要注意使用表示时间先后顺序的连接词（如：意使用表示时间先后顺序的连接词（如：at first，then，a few minutes later等）使等）使文章的过渡自然、连贯。最后结尾的部分通文章的过渡自然、连贯。最后结尾的部分通常记叙事件的结局，也可以表达与所述内容常记叙事件的结局，也可以表达与所述内容有关的感想或愿望。有关的感想或愿望。写
2、作时要特别注意保持时态和人称的一致性。写作时要特别注意保持时态和人称的一致性。如果单纯叙述过去的人和事，应用一般过去时；如果单纯叙述过去的人和事，应用一般过去时；如果叙述的内容既涉及现在也涉及过去，那么对如果叙述的内容既涉及现在也涉及过去，那么对现在的人和事可用一般现在时；而对过去的人和现在的人和事可用一般现在时；而对过去的人和事多采用一般过去时。此外，要根据题目的要求事多采用一般过去时。此外，要根据题目的要求选用适当的人称，在记叙文中用第一人称，可增选用适当的人称，在记叙文中用第一人称，可增强文章的真实感。但要注意不论是人称还是时态，强文章的真实感。但要注意不论是人称还是时态，都要从实际出发
3、，灵活选用。都要从实际出发，灵活选用。4、写作时还要注意详略得当。主要情节要详写，、写作时还要注意详略得当。主要情节要详写，次要情节则可以一笔带过。一般以事件发生的时次要情节则可以一笔带过。一般以事件发生的时间为线索，有时也可以采用倒叙的方法。间为线索，有时也可以采用倒叙的方法。The task for this class:How to write about an event vividly?Rules of writing about events in our life vividly:1.How to attract the readers attention:Use some ex
4、pressions which can draw readers attention and make them interested in what continues.Some possible expressions:1)live in my mind forever2)But the trouble was only just beginning.3).my troubles were not over.4)was a day that I would never forget,because I experienced something unexpected that day.5)
5、I had an experience that I will never forget in my life.6)Everyone has an unforgettable memory and cannot remove it.7)and I still remember the whole process vividly.8)It was a sunny day and things were awfully/very (形容词形容词)9)Whenever I look back on what happened that day,I think it is(形容词）形容词）2.How
6、to show the order of events:Use some transitional words and phrases to make the order clearly.起：起：One day;First of all;At the beginning of;承：承：and then;later;after doing/that/a few days/a while;by this time(此时）；此时）；at that time;at the same time;during;As I;When I;转：转：Normallybut;anyway;even though;o
7、therwise;fortunately;luckily;unfortunately;after all;however;on the contrary;whats worse;no doubt合：合：above all;as a result;accordingly 于是;by doing so 如此;eventually 最后;at last;3.How to share feelings with the readers:use suitable adjectives and adverbs to make your writing more interesting.For exampl
8、e,“boiling hot”instead of“very hot”to describe the weather.4.How to make the writing more interesting by using vivid language.Use different phrases,sentence patterns and use details to paint a more interesting picture for your readers.For example,Draft C includes the English teachers direct speech,w
9、hich is more interesting and lively than reported speech.An unforgettable day Last Friday,after I had got away from my friends birthday party,I went to the bus station.When the bus came,I didnt notice it was a wrong bus.Because I was very tired,I fell asleep quickly.When I woke up,I realized that I
10、was in a unknown place.I wandered at the station and felt frightened.A taxi driver helped me and gave me a ride to my home.One possible version:An unforgettable day Last Friday was a day that I would never forget,because I experienced something unexpected that day.After I had got away from my friend
11、s birthday party,I was happy on my way to the bus station.Then came a bus and I got on immediately without noticing it was a wrong bus.I got so tired that I fell asleep quickly.Hardly had I woken up when I realized that I was in a completely unknown place.As it was getting dark,the fear in my heart
12、grew while I was wandering at the station.Suddenly,I heard a gentle voice,“Can I help you?”It was a taxi driver.After telling him about my trouble,he offered to give me a ride to my home.How grateful I was!It was a special day,which would live in my mind forever.Some tips:Some tips:【写作要领】【写作要领】1.1.抓
13、住内容要点抓住内容要点 2.2.正确使用时态正确使用时态 3.3.恰当选用过渡词语恰当选用过渡词语 4.4.变化表达方式变化表达方式Answer the questions to assess your writing:Answer the questions to assess your writing:1.Have you tried to attract the attention 1.Have you tried to attract the attention of the readers?How?of the readers?How?2.Have you shown the seq
14、uence of the 2.Have you shown the sequence of the events?How?events?How?3.Have you shared your feelings directly?3.Have you shared your feelings directly?Give an example.Give an example.4.Have you used vivid language to make the 4.Have you used vivid language to make the writing more interesting?Giv
15、e an writing more interesting?Give an example.example.5.Did you remember to check your writing 5.Did you remember to check your writing for mistakes?for mistakes?1.The day started to go wrong the instant I left home.(Page 12)那一天,我一离开家就开始不走运。the instant是名词词组在句中用作连词,引导时间状语从句,译为“一就”。The instant Tom saw his teacher,he ran away.汤姆一看见他的老师就跑开了。I recognized her the instant I saw her.我一眼就认出了她。引导时间状语从句的特殊连词引导时间状语从句的特殊连词every/each time每次每次next time下次下次the first time第一次第一次
