1、短文写作评讲短文写作评讲（一）家庭成员介绍篇（一）家庭成员介绍篇单词拼写错误：单词拼写错误：grandfa present bueatiful grandprentswormgrandfathergrandpaparentsbeautifulgrandparentswarm 短语表达错误短语表达错误1.my family photo【大部分同学】2.I am middle of my grandparents.【齐嘉宁】3.she is about 87-years-old.【齐嘉宁】I am five old years.【杨铭】4.He likes drink tea and draw p
2、ictures.He very likes science.【张晋祥】5.She is a hand teacher.【张晋祥】6.He sometimes comes to home.【张雅雯】a photo of my familyin the middle of.87 years old87-year-old+n.like doing sth.headteacher 句型表达错误句型表达错误1.My mother is sit beside my father.2.Im stay near the two old people.3.My grandma is left for me.4.
3、This is my family it warm and happy.5.I love my family,love my father and mother,love my familys everything,too.6.My grandmother is no work.7.They are like playing chess very much.刘畅、王序瑶刘畅、王序瑶1.There is my father,my mother,my grandmother,my grandfatherand I.2.My grandmother is on my left,she is very
4、 old,she is about87 years old.3.The young woman is my mother,she is very beautiful.4.The top of two people are my parents.表达有误表达有误齐嘉宁齐嘉宁 周意周意 标点符号大问题标点符号大问题1.He often with my to playing.2.He very hardly.3.My grandmother very funny.4.And be front of me is my father and mother.5.Near me is my old pres
5、ent.张家燃张家燃 孔令通孔令通 朱雨悦朱雨悦这样的表达，老师也是醉了这样的表达，老师也是醉了.主谓一致问题主谓一致问题 1.He often go to the other country.【张雅雯】【张雅雯】2.I am is student.【张雅雯】【张雅雯】3.The two old people is my grandmother and grand father.【张一萌、张家燃】【张一萌、张家燃】4.She often cook a lot of food for me.【张家燃】【张家燃】5.I am a students.【张晋祥】【张晋祥】短文写作评讲短文写作评讲（二）
6、好友介绍篇（二）好友介绍篇单词拼写错误：单词拼写错误：listeing【张家燃】favourit【张雅雯】quite【刘畅】kindly【周意】hes hobby【齐嘉宁】diffcult【周意】listeningfavo(u)ritequietkindhis hobbydifficult 主格、宾格、形代傻傻分不清主格、宾格、形代傻傻分不清.1.I like she very much.【张一萌】2.He best hobby is play football.【张家燃】3.He name is Pater.【杨铭】4.Her looks very nice.Her likes runnin
7、g,swimming.【张雅雯】4.She is taller than I.She favourite subject is maths.【朱雨悦】herHis favorite hobby is playing.Hissheme Her 单三，又是单三单三，又是单三.总是记不住！总是记不住！1.She feel the math are very difficult.She always draw pictures with me.【周意】3.My best friends is Jim.【齐嘉宁、张晋祥】4.He play basketball everyday.【张晋祥】5.He wa
8、nt to be a teacher.He always go to school by bike.【刘畅】1.She is hate music class.【朱雨悦】2.He is study very hard.【齐嘉宁】3.But he is study well than me.【齐嘉宁】4.Someting she reading books with me.【张一萌】5.We often playing football at the school.【张家燃】6.On weekend,we usually reading and writing get together.【王序瑶
9、】那些雷死老师的句子.1He likes sayPaure is ture.【张晋祥】2.He very thin,but he very tall.【孔令通】3.He is very kinds.【张晋祥】4.Her name is one.【周意】那些雷死老师的句子.短文写作评讲短文写作评讲（三）人物介绍（三）人物介绍张晋祥张晋祥1.He is forty-year-old.2.and always help us English.3.He doesnt make smoke.4.Students are like his classes.5.We like he very much.王序
10、瑶王序瑶1.He is good at talk with students.2.After class he usually helps us learnEnglish.3.We love him very much.朱雨悦朱雨悦1.His class is very interesting.2.And the class in the end he usually teachesus English.3.He likes playing chess.刘畅：改错的范文刘畅：改错的范文!1.He well with us.be good with get on well with sb.2.H
11、is class is very interesting.3.After class,he usually helps us with ourlearn English.4.He likes sports and playing chess.5.The students love him very much.张家然张家然1.He is better to students than other teacher.He is good with students.2.We likes him very much and want him to teach us English every day.
12、3.Do you like a teacher like him,too?张雅雯张雅雯1.I study in a very good school.2.Some students like him very much.3.His class is very interesting.4.He often helps us with our English.5.He likes sports.And he often plays the chess.6.My classmates like him.孔令通孔令通1.All the Students like him.2.After class h
13、e often helps us learn English.齐嘉宁齐嘉宁1.After class,he always helps us with English.2.He never smokes.3.He is kind.4.What about your English?短文写作评讲短文写作评讲（四）叙事篇（四）叙事篇张雅雯张雅雯1.We look some science it nice.We visited some robotsin the science museum.They were great.朱雨悦朱雨悦1.We went to Beijing.2.kinds of f
14、lowers and we ate so much food.3.In the end we left Beijing.We went home.刘畅：写作再创新高！刘畅：写作再创新高！On May Day,My parents took me to the Hainan.Hai Nan was very beautiful.There were many treesand beautiful beach.We could swim in the sea,and playedon the beach,and slept on the chair.There were much fruit fo
15、r example(such as)the Mangoes,strawberries,and watermelons.The sea was blue and big.The sky was blue.We went home in May.It was a very interesting trip.1st 2nd 3rd 4th 5th.张家然张家然1.The May day was coming.It was May Day last week.2.We got to the grandparents house at ten oclock.3.We went to see a film
16、.4.The film was very interesting.arrive in/atreachget to齐嘉宁齐嘉宁1.There were many people in the cinema.2.It was about a funny cat and a clever mouse.3.When I slept at night,I dreamt of the cat and the mouse.the cat and the mouse came into my dream.王序瑶王序瑶1.On May Day I had a happy and tried day.2.I wan
17、ted to clean my room.3.I made a barrel of water.try tried tried enjoy oneself have a good time have funtired周意周意1.I took a trip.2.After a while,we came back to hotel.3.In the end,we went shopping and go home.张一萌张一萌1.Then we went to the Summer Palace on Wednesday.2.There are some people in Yiheyuan.孔令通孔令通1.We could play for a long time.2.He was good at playing football.3.But I wasnt good at play football.4.This is an interesting thing!
