1、 作文评讲作文评讲 -应届高三英语组应届高三英语组 假定你是李华，本周六你校将组织学生前往城郊的红星村参观学习一天。请给你校的学生朋友David写一封电子邮件邀请他一同前往。信件内容包括：1.活动主题：新农村、新变化；2.集合时间、地点：上午8点前、校门口；3.交通方式、返回时间：校车、当天下午5点。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。书写圆、直书写圆、直Evaluation书写饱满书写饱满Evaluation修改同改错的删除修改同改错的删除Evaluation段落：首行缩进两个字母段落：首行缩进两个字母 34 34段段Evaluation字数：字数：120120左右
2、左右Evaluation空一至两排空一至两排EvaluationEvaluationBrainstorm:what mistakes do we usually make when writing a composition?ReflectionEvaluation_,Evaluation标点organize_villageEvaluation拼写_have taken place in recent years_时态_Evaluation_The environment improves a lot,so do the various cultures._We will gather and
3、 set off at 8 and come back_taking the语法正确_Evaluation_Evaluation体裁：决定首尾段体裁：决定首尾段要点：充实、显眼要点：充实、显眼_Evaluation连接词连接词(活动词活动词)_Dear David,How is everything going?Our school will organize students to visit Hongxing village.I am writing to invite you.Out topic is“the new village,new changes”.It is universa
4、lly acknowledged that great changes have taken place in recent years.The environment improves a lot,so do the various cultures.It is worth visiting.Some details are as follows.We will gather and set off at 8 a.m.in front of the school gate and come back at 5 p.m.Do pay special attention to the time.
5、It is essential to observe rules when taking the school bus.I do believe it will be an unforgettable trip.We will be more than delighted if you could come.Looking forward to your reply.yours,Li HuaConclude:How to grade a composition?Reflection写段子写段子(作文作文)，才才(裁裁)人是人是(时时)要拼点活法的！要拼点活法的！Quiz:Who can gra
6、de best?ReflectionProcedure:1.Correct and improve your classmates composition in groups of four,using the rule:写段子写段子(作文作文)，才，才(裁裁)人是人是(时时)要拼点活法的！要拼点活法的！2.Grade it and sign your name;3.Choose one classmate in your group to present his work.Yes,I Can!Creation修改作文的时候，我最看重的是什么？修改作文的时候，我最看重的是什么？a.书写美观 b
7、.体裁正确 c.语言正确流畅 d.要点充实显眼 Discuss:How to write such a good composition?Creation写作步骤：写作步骤：写段子，才(裁)人是(时)要拼点活法 A.A.审题：审题：a.a.体裁体裁(首尾段首尾段)、人称、人称、时态、时态、b.b.要点、段落要点、段落(以要点和体以要点和体裁定段裁定段)B.B.落实：落实：要点的确立和拓展：要点的确立和拓展：1+1/21+1/2 C.C.连接：连词和美化连接：连词和美化 Creation(Homework:2015年全国卷二年全国卷二)假如你是李华，计划和同学去敬老院（nursing home）
8、陪老人们过重阳节（the Double Ninth Festival）。请给外教露西写封邮件，邀她一同前往，内容包括：1.出发及返回时间；2.活动：包饺子、表演节目等。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.结语已为你写好。Creation外在外在：A.A.体体裁裁(开头结尾开头结尾););B.B.书书写写(圆、直和圆、直和饱满；修改斜划饱满；修改斜划)；C.C.段段落落(首行缩进首行缩进两个字母两个字母;34;34段段)D.D.字字数数(120(120左右左右,只能留空一至两排只能留空一至两排););写段子，才写段子，才(裁裁)人是人是(时时)要拼点活法要拼点活法修
9、改要求：修改要求：内在内在：A.A.体体裁裁 B.B.人人称；称；C.C.时时态；态；D.D.要要点点(显眼、充实显眼、充实)；E.E.拼拼写写 F.F.标标点点 G.G.连接词连接词(活活动词动词)H.H.语语法法(正确第一，高级正确第一，高级第二第二)相互批改作文的流程：1.修改：外在和内在；2.赏析：好的/不好的及提升的地方；3.打分/签名；4.评讲：每组选择一篇具有典型错误的文章来讲解修改作文的时候，我最看重的是什么？修改作文的时候，我最看重的是什么？a.书写美观 b.体裁正确 c.语言正确流畅 d.要点充实显眼 2018年绵阳一诊考试年绵阳一诊考试 假定你是李华，本周六你校将组织学生
10、前往成交的红星村参观学习一天。请给你校的学生朋友David写一封电子邮件邀请他一同前往。信件内容包括：1.活动主题：新农村、新变化；2.集合时间、地点：上午8点前、校门口；3.交通方式、返回时间：校车、当天下午5点。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear David,How is everything going?Im writing to invite you to join us in our field study project this weekend.(This Saturday,the students of our school will mak
11、e a oneday field trip to Hongxing Village,which lies in the suburb of this town).The purpose of this project is to see with our own eyes whats going on out there and how the villagers are doing with their lives.(I know you are curious about the development of our country,and I am sure you dont want
12、to miss it).We are going to meet at the school gate before 8 a.m.and then take our school bus to go to the village,which will take us back at 5 pm.I do hope you will go with us.Yours,Li Hua修改作文的时候，我最看重的是什么？修改作文的时候，我最看重的是什么？a.书写美观 b.体裁正确 c.语言正确流畅 d.要点充实显眼 怎样写出这样一篇作文？怎样写出这样一篇作文？2019年绵阳一诊考试年绵阳一诊考试 假定你是
13、李华，本周六你校将组织学生前往成交的红星村参观学习一天。请给你校的学生朋友David写一封电子邮件邀请他一同前往。信件内容包括：1.活动主题：新农村、新变化；2.集合时间、地点：上午8点前、校门口；3.交通方式、返回时间：校车、当天下午5点。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear David,How is everything going?Im writing to invite you to join us in our field study project this weekend.This Saturday,the students of our sch
14、ool will make a oneday field trip to Hongxing Village,which lies in the suburb of this town.The purpose of this project is to see with our own eyes whats going on out there and how the villagers are doing with their lives.I know you are curious about the development of our country,and I am sure you
15、dont want to miss it.We are going to meet at the school gate before 8 a.m.and then take our school bus to go to the village,which will take us back at 5 pm.I do hope you will go with us.Yours,Li HuaDear Lucy,Id like to invite you to join us for a visit to the nearby nursing home next Saturday for th
16、e Double Ninth Festival.It is the day for the elderly in our culture.Well go and make dumplings with the elderly people there.Well also spend some fun time together singing,dancing and playing games,which we hope will make them happy.We should be back around 4 oclock in the afternoon.If you are able
17、 to come with us,please let us know and well wait for you at the gate at 9 in the morning.Looking forward to your reply.Yours Li Hua内在内在：A.A.人人称；称；B.B.时时态；态；C.C.要要点点(显眼、充实显眼、充实)；D.D.拼拼写写 E.E.标标点点 F.F.连接词连接词(活活动词动词)G.G.语语法法(正确第一，高级第二正确第一，高级第二)外在外在：A.A.体体裁裁(开头结尾开头结尾););B.B.书书写写(圆、直和圆、直和饱满；修改斜划饱满；修改斜划)
18、；C.C.段段落落(首行缩进首行缩进两个字母两个字母;34;34段段)D.D.字字数数(120(120左右左右,只能留空一至两排只能留空一至两排););才才(裁裁)写段子，人是写段子，人是(时时)要拼点活法要拼点活法写作要求：写作要求：外在外在：A.A.书写书写(圆、直和饱满；修改斜划圆、直和饱满；修改斜划)；B.B.段落段落(首行缩进两个字母首行缩进两个字母;34;34段段)C.C.字数字数(120(120左右左右,只能留空一至两排只能留空一至两排););外在外在：A.A.书书写写(圆、直和饱满；修改斜划圆、直和饱满；修改斜划)；B.B.段段落落(首行缩进两个字母首行缩进两个字母;34;34
19、段段)C.C.字字数数(120(120左右左右,只能留空一至两排只能留空一至两排););书写圆、直书写圆、直书写饱满书写饱满修改同改错的删除修改同改错的删除字数：字数：120120左右左右空一至两排空一至两排段落：首行缩进两个字母段落：首行缩进两个字母 34 34段段内在：内在：A.A.体裁体裁 B.B.人称；人称；C.C.时态；时态；D.D.要点要点(显眼、充实显眼、充实)；E.E.拼写拼写 F.F.标点标点 G.G.连接词连接词(活动词活动词)H.H.语法语法(正确第一，高级第二正确第一，高级第二)内在内在：A.A.体体裁裁 B.B.人人称；称；C.C.时时态；态；D.D.要要点点(显眼、
20、充实显眼、充实)；E.E.拼拼写写 F.F.标标点点 G.G.连接词连接词(活活动词动词)H.H.语语法法(正确第一，高级第二正确第一，高级第二)organize_have taken place in recent years_The environment improves a lot,so do the various cultures._,_We will gather and set off at 8 and come back_taking the标点拼写语法正确时态_体裁：确定首尾段_过渡：连接词organize_have taken place in recent years_The environment improves a lot,so do the various cultures._,_We will gather and set off at 8 and come back_taking the_villageEvaluation_
