1、Unit 3 ConservationWriting Workshop Period 2ReviewPair Work.Take turns to ask and answer the following questions.1 What is the main topic of the essay weve learnt last time?2 What are the main arguments and supporting details used“for”and“against”factory farming?3 What is the writers opinion about f
2、actory farming?4 How does the author present“for”and“against”factory farming?5 What topic do you decide to write?6 What have you outlined about your writing topic?ReviewWriting Tasks.You are going to write a“for”and“against”essay on one of the statements.Statements“For”“Against”Your opinion1 We shou
3、ld sacrifice our health to achieve success(like Huang Danian，U2 Reading Club 1,P.43).2 Having three or four outstanding years of winning stuff outweighs having ten years of being average.3 We should only have organic farming.4 We should not use animal products for food or clothing.ReviewWhat can be
4、included in your outline?Outline StructureTake Statement 1 for exampleIntroduction to the topicIntroduce the topic“Health or Success?”.Give some basic information about the situation.Conclusion(your opinion)Arguments for the topicArguments against the topicSacrificing health can shorten the time nee
5、ded to achieve success.Sacrificing health is not worthwhile.Restate the main idea and express your own personal opinion.Review Outline related words/phrases/sentence patternsIntroduction to the topicthe development of human society,an opportunity to chase dreams,on the path to success,sacrifice thei
6、r health Arguments for the topicshorten the time to achieve success,for instance,instead of going to see a doctor,without his sacrifice,for the same reason,sleep fewer hours to get more time to studyReviewConclusion(your opinion)Arguments against the topicnot worthwhile,no matter how outstanding you
7、 are,make sense,for example,deserve the Nobel Prize,pay attention to,die at a young age,not make more contributionsin conclusion/to conclude/in a nutshell,achieve success faster,not be recommended,in my opinion/from my viewpoint,if there must be something sacrificed,reduce your entertaining time,be
8、more efficientFriendly Reminder1 段首顶格，段与段之间要空行；While writing,pay attention to the following points.2 避免议论不充分/深刻，仅停留在表层；3 论点应该放在段首，下面的议论（所给论据）都应该围绕论点展开；4 结尾观点总结句一定要紧扣前面的观点和议论；5 一定按要求的形式（结构总分总、框架、连接词）行文；6 第一段介绍部分开门见山，直入主题；最后一段不再举例子展开议论；Friendly Reminder7 7 论点与论据一定要匹配；例如：论点与论据一定要匹配；例如：It is clear that
9、we need to sacrifice our free time for being outstanding.So shortening our free time means reducing our rest time and strengthening our tiredness.A research in Health and Security shows that feeling tired may be a vital negative signal for our body.In addition,to get on in life means we must lose so
10、mething important.We have to pay the price for our success.A recent investigation shows that more than 70%white-collar workers have some health problems both mentally and physically.Moreover,it is extremely difficult to balance work and daily life.So we may obsess over to work and ignore our health.
11、（论点与论据不匹配论点与论据不匹配。It is clear that we need to sacrifice our free time for being outstanding.预测这句话后面应该说如何牺牲预测这句话后面应该说如何牺牲free time获得获得outstanding，即正即正方观点没有说清楚。且句子之间缺少连接表达，逻辑混乱）。方观点没有说清楚。且句子之间缺少连接表达，逻辑混乱）。Friendly Reminder8 8 取标题很关键。取标题很关键。标题建议是疑问句或选择性疑问句，尽量不用陈述句。标题建议是疑问句或选择性疑问句，尽量不用陈述句。较好的标题如下：较好的标题如
12、下：Three Years Winning Stuff or Ten Years Being Average?Should we sacrifice our health Like Huang Danian?Which is More Important?Health or Success?Should We Stop Using Animal Products？Compose Your WritingIts important to:Have a clear argument;Include“for”and“against”opinions;Support your own opinion
13、with examples and other details;Sum up your argument in the final paragraph.Writing a“For”and“Against”EssayCompose Your Writing1 IntroductionThe introduction moves from general to specific.This is where you:open with a short orientation(introduce the topic area(s)with a general,broad opening sentenc
14、e(or two);answer the question with a thesis statement;provide a summary or“road map”of your essay(keep it brief,but mention all the main ideas).DraftingCompose Your Writing2 BodyThe body of your essay consists of paragraphs.Each is a building blockin the construction of your argument.The body is whe
15、re you:answer the questions by developing a discussion.show your knowledge and grasp the material you have read.offer exposition and evidence to develop your argument.use relevant examples and authoritative quotes.DraftingCompose Your Writing3 ConclusionThe conclusion moves from specific to general.
16、It should:restate your answer to the question;re-summarise the main points and;include a final,broad statement(about possible implications,future directions for research,to qualify the conclusion etc.)DraftingHowever,NEVER introduce new information or ideas in the conclusionits purpose is to round o
17、ff your essay by summing up.Compose Your WritingEdit your essay(argumentation)in pairs.Everyone needs an editor,even the most successful authors,journalists,and scholars.Likewise,peer editing is an essential part of the process for student writers who want to improve and succeed.Try this three-step
18、approach.EditingCompose Your Writing1 Read First.Judge Later.The first step is to read the essay all the way through without making any marks or comments.It may be difficult,but this is an important step in understanding how to structure your feedback.An initial full reading will help you get famili
19、ar with the writers style and understand the points the essay is making before you draw any conclusions with your feedback.During this first reading,focus on what the writer is trying to say,and make sure the points he or she is making are clear.Then,once youve gotten to the end,think on a broad lev
20、el about whether the overall arguments fit together.Questions to ask yourself at this point include:Editing Does the essay meet the criteria for the assignment?Is there a clear thesis statement?Does the essay support that thesis with clear topic sentences in the paragraphs that follow?Are there port
21、ions that drift off topic or undeveloped conclusions in the closing section?Compose Your Writing2 Read Again and Edit.Editing Go through the essay again from the beginning,with your pen ready this time.Highlight sections where you want to record comments or questions.You can alsouse this second read
22、ing to mark any grammatical errors or awkward wording you spot.Look at the writing more closely for common stylistic issues,such as run-on sentences,illogical shifts from past to present tense,or redundancy.Remember to make note of not only what parts may need improvement,but also parts you think ar
23、e especially strong!An important element of the peer-editing process is to make sure youre emphasizing the positives as well as the negatives.If you note some strengths alongside your suggestions for changes,it will not only make the writer feel more confident,it will also make him or her more recep
24、tive to constructive criticism.Compose Your Writing3 Finish with a ChecklistEditingComplete a peer-editing checklist to put your thoughts in order for the writer.This will help you figure out whether any key elements are missing and make sure youve addressed all the main components of the essay.Its
25、a good idea to save filling out the checklist for last to save yourself from having to start over after youve fully processed your thoughts.Dont be nervous.Just remember that no ones asking you as the peer editor to be an expert on writing or anything else.Youre simply another set of eyes to look fo
26、r potential issues,and that makes you a valuable resource for your classmatesand hopefully they will return the favor next time you need a critical eye too!Compose Your Writing The Name of the Editor Unit 3 A“For”and“Against”Essay Does the writer give a clear statement“for”or“against”the issue?Does
27、the structure follow well(statement,main argument with supporting details,other arguments and conclusion)?Does the writer use a variety of linking expressions?Do you feel that the writer has a strong belief in the argument he/she is presenting?Mark any spelling,punctuation or grammar errors.Mark any
28、 unclear expressions.Give suggestions if you can.Underline the expressions you like.Your comments:Compose Your WritingReview,modify,and reorganize your work with the goal of making it the best it can be.Keep these considerations in mind:Has the information been clearly and effectively communicated t
29、o the reader?Is the sentence structure varied?Is the word choice precise?Do the transitions between sentences and paragraphs help the readers understanding?Does the concluding paragraph communicate the value and meaning of the thesis and key supporting ideas?Polishing/RevisingAssignmentAfter polishing your essay,upload it online(Yammer,Teams,etc.)before next lesson.If it is a paper writing,just take a picture of it and upload it online.E-version is welcomed.Goodbye!
