1、Learning ObjectivesLearning Objectives一篇好的续写=内容构思+语言表达+篇章结构内容构思不准确是分数无法提高的重要原因之一存在问题：存在问题：1.读中：缺少阅读发现，阅读时不知道如何挖掘原文中的材料 为续写所用。2.写中：缺少衔接与连贯，续写与原文疏离。Tips:Tips:（与原文情境的融合很重要）（与原文情境的融合很重要）3.根源：原文没读通透，从而抓不住本质。Tips:Tips:（续写要完整）（续写要完整）阅读下面材料，捕捉关键信息 When I was 12 years old,I started my first job of delivering
2、 newspapers.I worked for my hometown paper called Times-News.Each afternoon,the newspaper company dumped(丢下)a pile of papers on my driveway(车道).I had to roll them up,fit a band around each one,and pile them into my shoulder bag.Then I would jump on my Schwinn ten-speed bike and ride a couple of bloc
3、ks(街区)to deliver them to neighbors.That was the easy part for my job.However,the hard part was collecting money each month.It was in the early 1980s before online payments,so l had to go door-to-door.One of my customers was an elderly woman who lived by herself.The first time I met her,she was quite
4、 angry.She complained about where I threw her paper each afternoon.She didnt want it on the driveway and she wanted it on her doorway.I had never had a dissatisfied customer before,so I stood there speechless with my mouth hanging open.As a final insult(侮辱),she waved a finger in my face and refused
5、to pay.I rode my bike back home discouraged(泄气的)and upset.When I talked to my parents about what happened that night,they gave me advice that sounded incredible.But it helped solve the problem almost immediately.Its the wisdom Ive carried with me for the last forty years.What did they tell me?Brian,
6、be kind to her,and she may turn out to be your best customer.To the ears of a 12-year-old,that sounded ridiculous(荒谬的),like I could jump on my bike to the moon.There was absolutely no possibility that this lady could be nice.I was convinced about that.1.But to appease(安抚)my parents,I gave it a try._
7、2.This time,she greeted me differently._结合原文构思连贯的情节；创造结合原文构思连贯的情节；创造2-32-3条条动作链。动作链。接纳建议-提供周到的服务（what）态度转变-对我特别好（how）服务周到的描写服务周到的描写服务周到的描写服务周到的描写服务周到服务周到续写完整续写完整 情境融合情境融合参考范文:Buttoappease(安抚)myparents/gave it atryEach afternoon,whenI arrived at her house,I jumped off my bike and delivered her paper
8、to her doorway just as she had requested before.She was theonlycustomer who gotthattype ofspecialdeliveryIdid this for a full month,never seeing her.And then the time for payment daycame again.I was worried about it.I could rememberl was extremely nervous when walking to her door and ringing the doo
9、rbell.This timeshe greeted me differently.Gone was the complaining and angry elderly woman.Now she presented me with kindness in hereyes.“Thank you for delivering my paper to the doorway,young man.she said with a smile.I have trouble in walking and now it makes it much easier for me.She gave me a ch
10、eckwhich surprised me with a big tip.For the rest of mv time as a newspaper carrier she wave to me each day,offered me cookies,and tipped me extra money which made my job meaningful.But toappease(安抚)myparents I gave it a try.Each afternoon,when I arrived at her house,I jumped off my bike and deliver
11、ed her paper to her doorway just as she had requested before(动作链）.She was the only customer who got this type of special delivery.I did this for a full month,never seeing her.And then the time for payment day came again.（原文伏笔）I was worried about it.I could remember l was extremely nervous（原文信息）（+情绪）
12、when walking to her door and ringing the doorbell（动作链）.This time she greeted me differently.Gone was the complaining and angry elderly woman.（原文信息）Now she presented me with kindness in her eyes.（呼应首句）“Thank you for delivering my paper to the doorway,young man,”（运用伏笔）she said with a smile.“I have tro
13、uble in walking and now it makes it much easier for me.She gave me a check which surprised me with a big tip.（+结果）For the rest of my time as a newspaper carrier she waved to me each day,offered me cookies,and tipped me extra money(动作链）which made my job meaningful.（有意义的结局）I rode my bike back home dis
14、couraged(泄气的)and upset.When I talked to my parents about what happened that night,they gave me advice that sounded incredible.But it helped solve the problem almost immediately.Its the wisdom Ive carried with me for the last forty years.What did they tell me?Brian,be kind to her,and she may turn out
15、 to be your best customer.To the ears of a 12-year-old,that sounded ridiculous(荒谬的),like I could jump on my bike to the moon.There was absolutely no possibility that this lady could be nice.I was convinced about that.1.What an incredible and helpful lesson/experience!2.After these years,I still admi
16、re my parents wisdom and it makes me achieve a lot during my rest of life.3.I realized that only if you treat others kindly will you be treated in the same way.（1）Para 2.Each afternoon,the newspaper company dumped(丢下)a pile of papers on my driveway(车道).I had to roll them up,fit a band around each on
17、e,and pile them into my shoulder bag.(动作链）动作链）（2）Para 4.I had never had a dissatisfied customer before,so I stood there speechless with my mouth hanging open.(with的复合结构）As a final insult(侮辱),she waved a finger in my face and refused to pay.(3)Para 6.To the ears of a 12-year-old,that sounded ridiculous(荒谬的),like I could jump on my bike to the moon.（比喻）
