1、主题训练15-托物思景【名师点拨】对于一个中学生来讲,从小应该具有爱国主义精神。 在这个主题训练中,学生们可以通过今昔对比,抒发对故乡、对祖国的美好情怀,从而树立起报效祖国的坚定信念。 这样既训练了学生的写作能力,又具有爱国主义教育意义。 另外,这个主题中也涉及了人们之间互赠礼物的行为,其实一方面是对某人或某一节日的美好祝愿,另一方面,也正是体现了当今社会人与人之间的和谐气氛。【主题词汇】个人成长: birthplace,be brought up,be educated in家乡面貌:take on a new look, change a lot modern buildings, dev
2、elop rapidly, more and more,better and better风土人情:beautiful views, natural resources( 然 ),local customs, special local product个人感受: be proud of,be rooted in( 報在)【常用句型】1. Great changes have taken place here.2. No matter where I am, Im forever rooted here.3.With the help of the government,my hometown
3、will become mo re and more beautiful.4.My hometown has changed so much that I could hardly believe my eyes.I hope itll change for the better in the future.【模拟试题】Changes in my hometowna.What changes have taken place in your hometown?b. What do you think of these changes?【要点分价】1.要写出家乡的今昔变化,可用对比手法.2.家乡
4、的变化中有人和物的变化。3.变化的原因可以从两个角度来写:政府的措施和人为的力量,最后要落实到自己的行动。【思路写作】上海的地理位置及景点介绍1. Shanghai lies in the east of China.2.In Shanghai there are many scenic spots such as.3.Its special charm attracts a lot of tourists all over the world every year.4. You can see plenty of landmarks which are familiar to foreign
5、ers in Shanghai，such as.5. Shanghai is a modern and international city which is famous for its beautiful views and buildings of different styles.6.It is full of Chinese traditional culture.7.Its famous for its shopping centres and night views.8. Peoples Square is known as the centre of Shanghai.9. O
6、f all the landmarks,the Oriental Pearl TV Tower is one of the most attractive destinations.10. No matter where you go , you will be caught by the views.11. That is why many tourists come to Shanghai for a visit every year.12. Therefore,its not surprising that many tourists come to visit Shanghai eve
7、ry year to shop.上海的变化1. Shanghai is playing a m ore and more important part in the world.2. More and more high-rise s will be built soon.3. The narrow streets have been widened so the traffic becomes better.4. A large number of old ho uses have been pulled down. Instead,more and more new high-rises
8、have been built. They look high and magnificent.5.Many trees have been planted on both sides of the road. They make our city more beautiful and cleaner than it used to be.6.Public transport has improved,with the network of undergrounds,light rails and several elevated highways.7.Shopping malls and s
9、upermarkets have made shopping more convenient.8. In recent years, Shanghai has developed a lot and great changes have taken place.希望和祝愿1.No doubt, Shanghai will be more beautiful than before.2. Welcome to China!Welcome to Shanghai!3.I think no one will miss the chance to visit the beautiful city-Sh
10、anghai.【范文评讲】原文稿Great changes have taken place in my hometown. When I was a young child,there are few high-rises in Shanghai. And only a few people went shopping in huge shops. Nowadays, there are more and more tall buildings in Shanghai, Many foreigners visit Shanghai. They always visit the landmar
11、ks in Shanghai, such as YuGarden and the Bund. There are more trees beside the streets which make our city clean.All in all, Shanghai changes a lot- It will play a more and more important role in the world. Why not visit Shanghai?【点评与评分】文章中心明确,结构合理。句型使用正确,内容符合要求。按中考作文20分计算,属于第二档的文章,可得15分左右。需改进之处:1.W
12、hen I was a young child,there are few high-rises in Shanghai.讲述过去的状态用一般过去时.2.上海的今日变化要具体阐述,可分为三个部分来写:建筑、环境和交通。修改稿Great changes have taken place in my hometown.When I was a young child,there were few high-rises in Shanghai. And only a few people went shopping in huge shops. Nowadays, Shanghai has deve
13、loped a lot. More and more new high-rises have been built. They look high and magnificent.Besides, many trees on both sides of the roads make our city more beautiful and cleaner than it used to be.Furthermore,public transport has improved,with the building of undergrounds ,light rails and several el
14、evated highways. Many foreigners visit the landmarks in Shanghai,such as Yu Garden and the Bund.All in all. Shanghai changes a lot. It will play a more and m ore important role in the world. Why not visit Shanghai? 【范文选登】1. Shanghai is a beautiful city.It is in the east of China. There are many tall
15、 buildings and interesting places in Shanghai such as Yu Garden,Peoples Square and so on. It is famous for night views and shopping malls. Now great changes have taken place. More and more high-rises have been built. People plant more trees to make the city clean. The traffic becomes better and bett
16、er. The 2010 World Expo was successfully held in Shanghai. Everyone is trying to be a lovely Shanghainese. We believe “better city, better life.2. Its a long time since I left my hometown. After I made a cal I to a friend living there, he was ready to show me some pictures through an e-mail.From the
17、 photos,I found that great changes have taken place there, For example, the streets have become wider, and the house is higher. Besides,the people there are dressed in modern clothes. Many modern buildings are being built.My hometown has changed so much that I could hardly believe my eyes.I hope itl
18、l change for the better in the future.【范文链接】1My hometowna. I live in a small town. I like it very much. It has lots of tall trees and the air is fresher than that in cities. My hometown has changed for the better. Peoples living conditions are getting better and better.People in my hometown are very
19、 kind and friendly. Most people here are farmers.They plant crops with the help of machines. Children can get good education. And people can enjoy leisure activities in their spare time.With the help of the government,my hometown will become more and more beautiful.b. My hometown is a very beautiful
20、 place. The environment there is excellent.There are small rivers,beautiful trees and flowers. People here are all kind-hearted.If you come here for a visit, you will feel very comfortable,just like staying at home. Peoples main activities are planting crops.They can also enjoy many sorts of leisure
21、 activities, such as fishing, swimming, planting trees an d so on.Thanks to the government, now my hometown has developed rapidly. All the people are working hard to make our village more beautiful. I hope my hometown can become better and better in the near future.2.ShanghaiNowadays, Shanghai is pl
22、aying a more and more important part in the world.Many changes have taken place in my hometown.So far,the n arrow streets have been widened so that the traffic is improved.A large number of old houses have been pulled down.Instead,more and more new high-rises have been built. With its beautiful gard
23、ens, cultural places such as museums and temples, Shanghai attracts thousands of visitors both at home and abroad every year.Besides,Shanghai is the biggest economic and financial center in China. With the rapid development of science and technology, Shanghai now be comes one of the largest economic
24、 and financial hubs in the world. You can go there by all means of transport: ship, highway and railroad transport, air flight,etc.I think Shanghai will be more beautiful and powerful than before because of the great changes. Welcome to visit Shanghai.3._is callinga.Paris is callingParis is the capi
25、tal of France. It is one of the most popular tourist destinations in the world. With its world-famous landmarks such as the Eiffel Tower, the Arc de Triomphe, and its wide tree-lined streets,Paris is one of the most beautiful cities in the world. Besides, French restaurants are also very famous, and
26、 y ou can enjoy tasty local food there-Paris is calling! Were looking for ward to visiting Paris.b.Shanghai is callingShanghai is a city full of energy. Therefore,it is a wonderful place to go for a holiday. The traffic system in Shanghai is so modern that it enables people to go to different places
27、 more easily. You can take an underground to Huaihai Road to do some shopping.If you are hungry after shopping, you can try some local food in some restaurants. The meals will not cost you very much. Besides, dont miss the Peoples Square.It is relaxing to take a walk with your friends there. Since t
28、he summer holidays are coring, why not spread your wings and visit Shanghai?4.My birthday giftI still keep a precious present that my father gave me.It is a watch.Its black and looks very beautiful. My father bought it while he was in America. When he came back, he gave re the watch as a birth day p
29、resent. He told me not to waste any time, but make full use of my time. I like the watch very much because it keeps good time and it shows a fathers love to me, Whenever l look at my watch,Ill think of what my father has said. Then I will work harder. Thank you,my father.5.My valuable presentMy valu
30、able present is a lovely toy rabbit. Every night when l go to bed,I always put it beside me. When I was eight years old, toy rabbits were very popular. In our city these toys were soon sold out.My grandfather learned l couldnt get a lovely toy rabbit in Shanghai.He bought it for me from Suzhou.Two years ago,my grandfather died. It always reminds me of my dear grandfather.【相关主题】1.My home town2. Great changes in my hometown3. My favourite city4._is calling5._is my best gift
