1、2019中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析课件学生作文分析：学生作文分析：好段落的三个标准：好段落的三个标准：段落的统一性：围绕一个中心段落的统一性：围绕一个中心段落的完整性：有主题句，有发展段落的完整性：有主题句，有发展句。发展句均要围绕着主体展开。句。发展句均要围绕着主体展开。写出的文章才会显得内容丰富。写出的文章才会显得内容丰富。段落的连贯性：形连，使用过渡词段落的连贯性：形连，使用过渡词过渡句；意连，内容上的连贯。过渡句；意连，内容上的连贯。优秀作文赏析作文题目：目前所有的学校都在开展作文题目：目前所有的学校都在开展各种各样的体育活动。你们每天是如各种各样的体育活动。你们每天是如何开展体育活
2、动的？通过参与这样的何开展体育活动的？通过参与这样的活动你有何感受或变化？又有何想法？活动你有何感受或变化？又有何想法？提示词语：提示词语：all the schools,have all kinds of,sport activities,take exercise,play football,go running,become healthier提示：本文写作应分为三层：提示：本文写作应分为三层：1.开篇点题，引入话题；开篇点题，引入话题；2.重点应放在重点应放在“你们每天是如何开展你们每天是如何开展体育活动的体育活动的”3.谈谈自己谈谈自己建议：本文采用三段式比较好。即：建议：本文采用三
3、段式比较好。即：开头段，中间段，结尾段。采用一开头段，中间段，结尾段。采用一段式容易写偏题。段式容易写偏题。Example-1 As we all know,many schools are carrying out the plan for students to do more exercise.And now,all the schools have all kinds of sport activities for students.As for our school,things are even better.We have various kinds of sports acti
4、vities after school every day,such as basketball,football,running and so on.Hundreds of students come to the field,some enjoy going running,and others love playing football.And basketball lovers crowded the basketball field.Sometimes there are so many students that you see nothing but students exerc
5、ising on the playground!Besides,the teachers are busy,too.They are not far away from the field to ensure that there are no accidents,you know,safety first!As for me,Im a sports fan and I think its necessary for students to do some exercise every day.In this way,we can not only pass the P.E.exams,but
6、 also keep healthy!Thanks to the sports activities,I have become healthier than before.All in all,theres nothing better than doing sports every day!中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件Example-2 Do you have enough time for sports activities every day?Now,its not a big problem,for all the schools enco
7、urage students to take exercise at school.中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件 Talking about sport activities every day,its really colorful.Every morning,we have to go running in order to get better grades in P.E.At first,it seems difficult for most of us.But now we are used to running for such a lo
8、ng time,and sometimes we enjoy it.And when we have P.E classes,running is also an important part of it.After running,the teacher sometimes asks us to play basketball,which is interesting.Besides,some of my friends often play tennis together in the afternoon.In their opinion,its a good way to help th
9、em keep fit and become healthier;its really worth the time.As the saying goes,“All work and no play make Jack a dull boy.”中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件 From my point of view,our life is filled with learning now.So why not do something different?Playing sports surely makes you a new person,and
10、 helps you to build up a strong body as well.So what are you waiting for?Just join us and take exercise every day!中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件以上两篇作文的特点：以上两篇作文的特点：1.审题准确、到位，内容要点齐全。审题准确、到位，内容要点齐全。2.中心明确且层次清楚，语言流畅，通中心明确且层次清楚，语言流畅，通顺。句式多样。顺。句式多样。3.内容丰富，详略得当。整篇文章写的内容丰富，详略得当。整篇文章写的收放自如，无多余废话。收放自如，
11、无多余废话。4.更值得一提的是，文章用词丰富，灵更值得一提的是，文章用词丰富，灵活而简练，都是常用词，更显出作者活而简练，都是常用词，更显出作者的语言功底。的语言功底。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件其它作文分析：其它作文分析：中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件In fact,all the schools are starting all kinds of sports activities.In our school,teachers ask us to take exercise every day.We ha
12、ve to go running together after school,but some like playing basketball,others like reading books in the classroom.The PE teacher is strict with us because some hate running and they usually stay.But mostly of us can finish running because we know teachers want us to become healthier and pass the ex
13、ams,too.When the class is over,I am very happy so that I can do my best.与主题无关与主题无关没有从正面反映出学生没有从正面反映出学生们如何开展体育活动们如何开展体育活动没有扣住谈没有扣住谈“你的变化你的变化或感受，又有何想法或感受，又有何想法”无用词语无用词语审题不清，思维混乱审题不清，思维混乱中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件Do sports are very important in our life so all the schools do sport then before
14、.We always do some sports in the morning every day and after that we have PE so we can do many storps every day.I think sport can make me strong and keep my health so I fell more strong then before.I want to do more sport then now.if you want to do sports way dont enjoy us.基本能看出作者想表达的基本能看出作者想表达的意思，有
15、基本层次。意思，有基本层次。语言功底过于薄弱，语法语言功底过于薄弱，语法错误严重。错误严重。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件 In my shcool,we have all kinks of sports activities.In the morning,we do morning exercise every day.But its not too much to keep our healthy.I am interested in playing badmindon and I usually play it with my classmate
16、 after school.I think its good for our health,and make me strong.To play badindon its can make me happy and take me easy.I like it,I will keep it in the future.问题问题-1 审题偏差：重点应着重写审题偏差：重点应着重写“你们每天是如何开展体育活动的你们每天是如何开展体育活动的”此句可以被视为第二层，此句可以被视为第二层，“我的感受或变化我的感受或变化”多余句，没话找话。作多余句，没话找话。作用：增加语法错误。用：增加语法错误。羽毛球：羽
17、毛球：badminton应选自己会的词汇写，尽量减少应选自己会的词汇写，尽量减少语言错误。语言错误。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件In our school,there are all kinds of sport activities.And in fact,all the schools are making sutdents take exercise now.So our teacher asks us to take part in the exercise,too.In other words,our school let us do so
18、me exercise in the afternoon.Such as play football,go running and so on.I always join the sport activities because in this way,Im becoming healthier and healthier.I think I will get more stronger in the future.中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件分析：分析：1.此文的最大问题是该重点写的部分此文的最大问题是该重点写的部分没有展开。没有展开。2.开头过于
19、罗嗦，开头过于罗嗦，in other words 一一句没有必要，句没有必要，老师让学生参加体育活老师让学生参加体育活动是一句简单明了的句子，还用的着动是一句简单明了的句子，还用的着解释吗？有凑字数之嫌。解释吗？有凑字数之嫌。3.红色字体为语法错误。红色字体为语法错误。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件学生作文分析二学生作文分析二原题：原题：还有两周就要参加体育测试了，可还有两周就要参加体育测试了，可是李华这时却感冒了是李华这时却感冒了,发烧、喉咙痛。发烧、喉咙痛。他他心里很着急。请你以书面形式给他提些建心里很着急。请你以书面形式给他提些建议。不少于议。不
20、少于60词。开头结尾已给出，不计词。开头结尾已给出，不计入。入。Dear Li Hua,Im sorry to hear that youre not feeling well.I hope you feel better soon Best wishes,Liz Smith中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件提示：这是一篇写回信，提建议的文章。常提示：这是一篇写回信，提建议的文章。常用提建议的句型有：用提建议的句型有：1.You should/could/shouldnt do 2.Youd better do/not do3.Why dont you/n
21、ot do 4.How/What about doing 5.If I were you,I would/wouldnt do6.its a good idea to do 7.中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件建议的内容提示：建议的内容提示：1.go to see the doctor2.take some medicine as you are told3.lie down and have a rest4.have some light food,like vegetables 5.drink more water/have some chicken
22、 soup which will make you feel better6.listen to music and relax yourself7.stop exercising for two or three days中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件鼓励性的话语：鼓励性的话语：1.keep cheerful/be happy2.neednt worry about the PE exam;its just a piece of cake3.I think you can get over it.4.Never give up.5.Youll be
23、better soon.中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件此类作文中学生们的普遍问题：此类作文中学生们的普遍问题：一类一类是提建议的常用句型没有背下是提建议的常用句型没有背下来，写作时句型单调；语法错误严重。来，写作时句型单调；语法错误严重。或无法摆脱母语干扰。或无法摆脱母语干扰。另一类另一类是会背是会背几个句型，但提不出什么建议来，属几个句型，但提不出什么建议来，属于无话可说型。于无话可说型。第三种情况第三种情况是能写出是能写出几条建议，由于没有支撑句作后续，几条建议，由于没有支撑句作后续，作文显得空洞无物。作文显得空洞无物。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析
24、优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件Dear Li Hua,Im sorry to hear that youre not feeling well.Dont worry,you will feel better soon.Youd better meet the doctor with your parents.And have some medicine.If you ill trouble,my suggest is have a nice rest every night.As for homework.If you feeling trouble.You can not do
25、 your homework and tomorrow you tell your teacher you are ill.At last you must pay attention to you clothes.You should wear some warm clothes!中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件此文的问题是：此文的问题是：1.没有扣住没有扣住“要参加体育测试，生病，要参加体育测试，生病，心情焦急心情焦急”来提建议。即：来提建议。即：文不对题文不对题2.语言功底较弱，语法错误严重。语言功底较弱，语法错误严重。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析
26、优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件.I can give you some advices.First,you should stay in home(and)have a rest.Dont forget to eat medicine.I know you very naughty,but heathy is the first.Second,dont worry about.We can help you have sports every day,and we can tell teacher help you.Dont worry about we have a lot o
27、f idea help you.At last,I hope you as soon as possible heathy good.中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件此文的问题：此文的问题：1.无法用正确的英语表达观点，语法无法用正确的英语表达观点，语法错误严重。错误严重。2.无法摆脱母语干扰，汉语式思维的无法摆脱母语干扰，汉语式思维的句子较多。句子较多。3.祈使句的使用过多，语气过于生硬。祈使句的使用过多，语气过于生硬。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件I think if you can you should b
28、etter go to the hospital.Because the doctors can give you more help than me.And if you want to go to the hospital,you also can rest in the your room and call doctor up.Befor he arrived you can drink a cup of juice.Juice can make you happy and forget your problems.Then you also can call your parents
29、up,they can look after you last,dont worry about you PE exam,its中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件此文的问题：此文的问题：1.审题严重偏差。审题严重偏差。2.语法错误严重，无法顺利表达完整句。语法错误严重，无法顺利表达完整句。3.逻辑思维不清。逻辑思维不清。如：原文如：原文 Juice can make you happy and forget your problems.此句译为：果汁能使你快乐，也能忘记你的此句译为：果汁能使你快乐，也能忘记你的烦恼。（烦恼。（注：果汁这么有本事？注：果汁这
30、么有本事？）中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件再如：再如：原文原文 And if you want to go to the hospital,you also can rest in the your room and call doctor up.注注：“想想去去医院医院”，“就就呆呆在房间在房间”，哪国有这等好事？哪国有这等好事？中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件1应该认识到，阅读是学校教育的重要组成部分，一个孩子如果在十多年的教育历程中没有养成阅读的习惯、兴趣和能力，一旦离开校园，很可能把书永远丢弃在一边，这样
31、的结果一定是我们所有的教育工作者不想看到的。2对教育来说，阅读是最基础的教学手段，教育里最关键、最重要的基石就是阅读。3但是现在，我们的教育在一定程度上，还不够重视阅读，尤其是延伸阅读和课外阅读。4.“山不在高，有仙则名。水不在深，有龙则灵”四句，简洁有力，类比“斯是陋室，惟吾德馨”，说明陋室也可借高尚之士散发芬芳5.这是一篇托物言志的铭文，本文言简义丰、讲究修辞。文章骈散结合，以骈句为主，句式整齐，节奏分明，音韵和谐。6.了解和名著有关的作家作品及相关的诗句、名言、成语和歇后语等，能按要求向他人推介某部文学名著。7.能够根据所提供的有关文学名著的相关语言信息推断作品的作者、作品的名称和人物形
32、象，分析人物形象的性格和作品的思想内容并进行简要评价。8能够由具体的阅读材料进行拓展和迁移，联系相关的文学名著展开分析，提出自己的认识和看法，说出自己阅读文学名著的感受和体验。9巧妙结合故事情节，在尖锐的矛盾冲突中，充分深刻显示人物复杂内心世界，突出了对人物性格的刻画，使其有血有肉，栩栩如生。10保尔身上的人格特征或完美的精神操守：自我献身的精神、坚定不移的信念、顽强坚韧的意志11把记叙、描写、抒情和议论有机地融合为一体，充满诗情画意。如描写百草园的景致，绘声绘色，令人神往。12简爱人生追求有两个基本旋律：富有激情、幻想、反抗和坚持不懈的精神；对人间自由幸福的渴望和对更高精神境界的追求。中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件中考英语考前冲刺作文指导分析优质课件
