1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习75岁老人身体不佳,却在锻炼身体的过程中在网上收获百万粉丝1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文Joan MacDonald is 75 years old this year.She started hitting the gym on a regular basis just a few years ago at the age of 70.Back then,Joan was out of shape and at a low point in her life.She was dealing with added pounds
2、 and a trip to the doctor only confirmed her fears that her health was on the decline.Worse still,the treatments given by her doctor werent working well.Her blood pressure was still high,and she also had kidney(肾)problems.After a tough conversation with her daughter who is a personal trainer,Joan kn
3、ew she needed to be the one to make a change.So she began to work out at once.4续写原文In January,2017,she flew down to Mexico.There her daughter was hosting a kind of camp for women like her,who hoped to lose some weight and feel their best.It was there that she learned how to document her journey on I
4、nstagram.It was very tiring at the beginning because she had to learn the skills as well as doing something challenging with her body.She had to learn how to eat properly,how many meals to eat,and how to do her exercises,hoping that she got them done right.It was especially difficult,because while J
5、oan was dealing with all of the physical diseases that result from aging,she was also fighting against a generational mindset,one that didnt look at exercise and eating healthily the same way we do now.She managed to stay active all these years by chasing after her children,taking care of her family
6、 and prioritizing everyone elses needs above her own.But when her kids grew up.Joan didnt have many hobbies that got her up and moving.Therefore,sharing her fitness photos on Instagram became that hobby.5段首句Para 1:Joan has 1.3 million fans on Facebook.Para 2:So far,hitting the gym regularly has bene
7、fited Joan a lot.6Part 2题目分析7续写原文分析8本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了75岁的主人公Joan因为身体不好,在治疗效果不佳的情况下,70岁时开始通过健身保持健康,她在网上拥有100多万粉丝,经常锻炼让Joan收益很大的故事。点1:位于续写第一段段首,流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语;点2:位于续写第一段段尾,流畅衔接第二段段首句;点3:位于续写第二段段首,续写衔接第二段段首语;点4:文章结尾升华,给予读者正能量,揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点9续写思路分析 Para 1:Joan has 1.3 million fans on Facebook.由第一段首句内容“
8、琼在脸书上有130万粉丝。”可知,第一段可描写Joan与粉丝的互动。10续写思路分析 Para 2:So far,hitting the gym regularly has benefited Joan a lot.由第二段首句内容“到目前为止,经常去健身房对琼很有好处。”可知,第二段可描写Joan从健身中获得好处,以及Joan的经历带来的启发。11续写素材 续写素材 粉丝的鼓励Joan分享到网上的东西Joan获得益处感悟12续写素材 续写素材 行为类 .给某人指路:show sb.the way/give someone directions.依靠:rely on/depend on.锻炼:
9、exercise/work out 情绪类 .好的:good/nice/fine.高兴地:happily/gladly/merrily.积极:positive attitude/act positively13续写素材 续写素材 高分句型1.She understands that they just need someone to show them the way.(运用了that引导宾语从句)高分句型2.She knows how impossible it can feel to start a fitness adventure at an age like hers.(运用了how
10、引导的宾语从句,it形式主语,不定式作真正的主语)高分句型3.Her experience shows that everyone should put their health first and that the secret to aging better is to do the things youve wanted to do and do them right now.(运用了that引导宾语从句,省略了关系代词的定语从句)14Part 3范文呈现15范文呈现Joan has 1.3 million fans on Instagram.These fans are always
11、giving her a lot of good feedback.She understands that they just need someone to show them the way.Therefore,apart from the photos,she also shares some inspiration from her workout and her ideas for meal.She knows how impossible it can feel to start a fitness adventure at an age like hers.And shes d
12、oing something right if her fans are anything to measure by.16范文呈现So far,hitting the gym regularly has benefited Joan a lot.She has stopped all of the medications she was relying on.She lost 50 pounds in her first year of exercising regularly.She has become thin and strong.She always walks happily t
13、hrough her daily gym routine.Her experience shows that everyone should put their health first and that the secret to aging better is to do the things youve wanted to do and do them right now.17范文译文Joan在Instagram上拥有130万粉丝。这些粉丝总是给她很多好的反馈。她明白他们只需要有人给他们指路。因此,除了照片,她还分享了一些锻炼和用餐想法的灵感。她知道在她这样的年龄开始健身冒险是多么不可能。如果她的粉丝可以作为衡量标准的话,她正在做正确的事情。到目前为止,经常去健身房让琼受益匪浅。她已经停止了所有依赖的药物。在定期锻炼的第一年,她减掉了50磅。她变得又瘦又壮。她总是愉快地完成日常的健身房锻炼。她的经验表明,每个人都应该把健康放在第一位,而更好地衰老的秘诀就是做你想做的事情,现在就做。18Part 4努力方向19高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语20定语从句状语从句(包含倒装句)强调句副词做状语非谓语(包括独立主格)21Thank you!