1、“展示而非讲述”策略在读后续写中的运用Tell：The girls are _.prettybeautifulgood-lookinglovelycharmingattractive两弯似蹙非蹙笼烟眉，一双似喜非喜含情目。态生两靥之愁，娇袭一身之病。泪光点点，娇喘微微。闲静似姣花照水，行动似弱柳扶风。心较比干多一窍，病如西子胜三分。曹雪芹红楼梦Lin Daiyu is a _ girl with a _ figure.Her eyes are brimful of love.She was as gentle as a _ reflected in the water.delicateslim
2、 flower只见船尾一个女子持浆荡舟，长发披肩，全身白衣，头发上束了条金带，白雪一映，更是灿然生光。那船慢慢荡近，只见这女子方当韶龄，不过十五六岁年纪，肌肤胜雪，娇美无匹；容色绝丽，不可逼视。金庸射雕英雄传Huang Rong is a _ pretty girl with _ skin like Snow White.She is dressed _ with _ hair falling over her _.youngfairin whitelongshouldersHow to“Show”关注细节描写细节描写，使抽象的、笼统的概念具体化，使读者能够身临其境，感同身受。外貌描写 情绪表
3、达 细化动作 外貌描写appearance身材/年龄/肤色/五官头发/穿着/装扮be dressed in+服装/颜色wear+妆容/首饰/鞋帽thin _苗条 _极瘦fat plump胖乎乎 stout肥壮 obese肥胖 _超重overweightslimskinnyof _ height/build 中等身材mediumbe+身材+with+肤色/头发/五官._浅色的；白皙的 _深色的 blonde金黄色的curly卷的 _浓密的 ponytail马尾辫 braids 发辫_小胡子 _络腮胡 goatee山羊胡fairdarkthickmoustachebeardbe dressed i
4、n+服装/颜色wear+妆容/首饰/鞋帽be+身材+with+肤色/头发/五官.TellTell:The baby is lovely.ShowShow:The baby is small,_ with a _ complexion(肤色).She wears a white _ hat.plumpsweaterfair be dressed in+服装/颜色wear+妆容/首饰/鞋帽be+身材+with+肤色/头发/五官.情绪表达emotion面部(face)/身体(body)声音(voice)从“头”到“脚”m头部：_(额),eyebrow,_(脸颊),lip,_(下巴)m肢体：_(拳头)
5、,thumb,_(指甲),waistm内部：brain,mind,heart,_(喉咙),blood,bone,muscle,belly,stomachjawnailthroatforeheadcheekfistTry and Matchroll sbs eyessbs jaw dropa lump in sbs throatbite sbs nailsshrug sbs shouldersbs stomach rumblemake sbs blood boila weight off sbs mindA.surprisedB.sad/movedC.nervousD.angryE.uncari
6、ngF.hungryG.disapprovedH.relievedTry and Matchroll sbs eyessbs jaw dropa lump in sbs throatbite sbs nailsshrug sbs shouldersbs stomach rumblemake sbs blood boila weight off sbs mindA.surprisedB.sad/movedC.nervousD.angryE.uncaringF.hungryG.dispprovedH.relievedGABCEFDHJulies _flushed with pleasure at
7、the compliment.听了这赞美的话，朱莉开心得满脸通红。Tom clenched his _and desired to punch Jack .Tom握紧拳头，想给杰克一拳。My heart began to _ and my mind _.我心跳开始加快，脑子里一片空白。Jack _and spoke in measured tones.Jack清了清喉咙，不慌不忙地说起话来。cheeksfistracewent blank cleared his throat叫shout:cry,yell,_(尖叫),bark/howl/_(吼叫)说say：respond/reply,expl
8、ain,complain,continue,argue,warn,announce,_(补充说),_(低声说),_(叹气),demand(质问),stammer(结巴).声音(voice)roarscreamaddwhispersighTellTell:She was angry.:“Ill never believe you again!”She _at him.Her whole body _.Salty tears _down her pale cheeks to her dry _.roaredwas shaking like a leafstreamedlipsshake like
9、a leaf 浑身发抖面部面部/身体身体/声音声音细化动作 Movement精选动词，提供细节Tell:Tom saved the girl out of the burning house.Show:Tom _the door open with great force,only to find the girl lying unconsicous on the floor.Without delay,he _,_her nose from the choking smoke and _downstairs.走walk walk rush/dash/_(冲),wander(漫步),pace(
10、踱步),march(齐步走),storm(气冲冲地走),skip(蹦蹦跳跳),limp(跛行),creep/tiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地移动),inch/edge(缓慢地移动).kickedprotectedpicked her uprushedcharge21Attention please讲述和展示也可相结合，即给出观点，又添加细节说明该观点，这既能迅速传达信息，又能使描写生动具体。She trembled with fear and gasped.She bowed her head in shame.由于篇幅限制以及突出重点的需要，应牢记细节描写是为主题服务，要注意掌握描写的度，无需面面俱
11、到。THANKSTell:Mac was scared.Show:“救命!”Mac歇斯底里地用颤抖的声音喊道。汗水和泪水顺着他的面颊流下来。他迅速溜进汽车，砰的一声关上门。2017.6 浙江高考读后续写浙江高考读后续写“狼口逃生狼口逃生”Tips:hysterically,sweat,slide,slamTell:Mac was scared.Show:“Help!”Mac _hysterically in a trembling voice.Sweat,mixed with tears,_down his cheeks.He _ into the car swiftly,slamming the door shut.2017.6 浙江高考读后续写浙江高考读后续写“狼口逃生狼口逃生”yelledpouredslidslide-slid-slid v.悄声地移动悄声地移动
