1、Part 4 Writing 写作题目一 有一英语网站正在征集以“A Sports Story”为主题的故事,请按以下要求用英文写一篇关于你的运动故事: 1.几年前,你忙于学习,没有时间进行锻炼; 2.后来你意识到要保持学习和锻炼的平衡,在空闲时间,你喜欢有规律的锻炼,尤其是骑行; 3.骑行不仅能锻炼你的身体,还能减轻你的焦虑,开阔你的视野,让你交了很多朋友; 4.你希望能代表你们城市,参加各种骑行大赛。 思路点拨 主题 体育故事 体裁 记叙文 人称 第一人称 时态 以一般过去时为主,一般现在时为辅 布局 1.介绍故事背景; 2.介绍骑行的好处; 3.你的打算。 遣词造句 .用本单元所学单词或
2、短语填空 1. n.紧张,焦虑 2.be in参与 3. 保持平衡 4. 爱上 5. 尽情地 答案 1.tension 2.involved 3.keep the balance 4.fall in love with 5.to ones hearts content .本单元语块、语法运用 1.完成句子 (1)几年前,我由于忙于学习,没有足够的时间进行锻炼。 Several years ago,because Im my study, I had no enough time to taking exercise. (2)后来,我意识到要保持学习和锻炼的平衡。 Later, I realiz
3、ed that I should between study and exercise. (3)在我的空闲时间,我喜欢上了进行定期锻炼,尤其是骑行。这让我的生活更有意义和丰富多彩。 In my spare time, I fell in love with taking regular exercise,especially cycling and it made my life more . (4)骑行不仅锻炼了我的身体,还减轻了我的焦虑。 Cycling not only , but also reduced my tension. (5)此外,我到达过很多景点,开阔了视野。 Beside
4、s, I reached many tourist attractions,which . (6)我有了更多机会去接近大自然,尽情地欣赏美丽的景色。 I had more chances to , enjoying beautiful scenery to my hearts content. 答案 (1)occupied with;be involved in (2)keep the balance (3)meaningful and colorful (4)built up my body (5)broadened my horizons (6)get close to nature 2.
5、句式升级 (7)用含有非谓语动词的句子改写句(1)。 Several years ago, , I had no enough time to be involved in taking exercise. (8)用非限制性定语从句改写句(3)。 In my spare time, I fell in love with taking regular exercise,especially cycling, my life more meaningful and colorful. (9)将句(4)转换成倒装句。 build up my body, but also it reduced my
6、 tension. 答案 (7)occupied with my study (8)which made (9)Not only did cycling 连句成篇 参考范文 基础篇 Several years ago,occupied with my study, I had no enough time to be involved in taking exercise.Later,I realized that I should keep the balance between study and exercise. In my spare time, I fell in love wit
7、h taking regular exercise,especially cycling, which made my life more meaningful and colorful. I think cycling was beneficial to me.Not only did it build up my body, but also it reduced my tension.Besides, I reached many tourist attractions,which broadened my horizons. I also had more chances to get
8、 close to nature, enjoying beautiful scenery to my hearts content. Importantly, I made many new friends, who often inspired me to stick to cycling. I hope I can represent my city to take part in all kinds of competitions of cycling, and become the champion. 提升篇 Several years ago,employed in my study
9、, I had no adequate time to be involved in taking exercise. Later,I was aware that I should keep the balance between study and exercise. In my spare time, I had a passion for taking regular exercise,especially cycling, which made my life more meaningful and colorful. I think riding was of great bene
10、fit to me. Not only did it build up my body, but also it reduced my tension. Besides, I reached many tourist attractions,which broadened my horizons. I also had more chances to get close to nature, enjoying beautiful scenery to my hearts content. Significantly, I made many new friends, who often ins
11、pired me to stick to cycling. I do hope I can represent my city to participate in varieties of competitions of cycling, and become the champion. 点评: 1.本文要点齐全,很好地完成了写作任务; 2.文章结构清晰,条理分明,体现出很高的语言素养; 3.在文章里运用了较多的高级结构和复杂的句式,提高了文章的层次; (1)运用了高级词汇(词组):occupied with、be involved in、meaningful and colorful、ben
12、eficial、build up、tourist attractions、broadened my horizons、stick to 等; (2)复杂的语言结构:非谓语动词作状语 occupied with my study、非限制性定语从句 which made my life.和 which broadened my horizons、部分倒装 Not only did it build up my body, but also.等复杂句式。 写作积累 句式: 1.Though there are different kinds of sports, swimming is my fav
13、orite. 2.Swimming is a really fantastic sport, which makes me feel relaxed. 3.First, set aside time to exercise regularly. Only in this way can you keep fit. 4.There is no doubt that doing more exercise is beneficial to peoples physical and mental health. 5.Personally, I have a passion for jogging b
14、ecause its beneficial to my health. 6.I hope that everyone do some sports in their spare time rather than just stay at home. 实战演练 () 2022 年冬奥会即将在北京举行,奥运精神和热爱运动的精神也一直在中国传递。假如你是李华,请写一封信给你 的笔友 John,谈谈有关运动的话题。内容包括: 1.多运动对人们的好处; 2.举例说明你是怎么运动的; 3.呼吁大家多运动,传播冬奥会的精神。 注意: 1.词数 100左右; 2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 3.开头和结
15、尾已给出,不计入总词数。 Dear John, There is no doubt that doing more exercise is good for our health. Yours, Li Hua 写作题目二 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150 左右。 The Seas Surprise Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for an adventure. They joked that some day they would find a talking fish
16、 or a mermaid(美人鱼)or a bottle with a treasure map inside. So far they had only found shells, rocks and seaweed. Today, though, was different. The boys felt excited. Sea crabs scampered on the rocks. Up one side and down the other. They were quick and lively. The tide didnt seem to ever wash them awa
17、y. Then Jim saw a fish. It was stranded on the beach, just flopping around. “Can it talk?” Andy asked. “It looks like any other fish,” Jim said. He picked it up gently and carried it to the water. “Do you think it will grant us any wishes?” Andy laughed. The boys watched as the silver fish sped off
18、through the water. “No. Maybe next time,” Jim grinned. As the two friends walked farther down the beach they came upon a bottle. It was green with a cork in the mouth. “Our luck will change. Does it have a map inside or a genie?” joked Andy. Andy reached down and picked up the bottle. He rubbed it.
19、Nothing happened. He tugged on the cork. Nothing happened. He shook it. Nothing happened. “Try the cork again. I bet the genie is waiting for us to release him. Or well find a treasure map and have a real adventure,” Jim exclaimed. Andy tugged again on the cork. He wiggled it back and forth. He twis
20、ted it around and around. Finally it popped out without breaking. Andy shook the bottle. Nothing came out. Looking inside he couldnt see anything. Jim looked too and shook his head. Empty. “Its just an old wine bottle,” Jim complained. He grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand. Paragrap
21、h 1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered(碎裂) into many pieces. Paragraph 2: The two boys ran after it. 写作流程 第一步: 初读获取基本信息 1.了解故事要素 2.理清故事情节 Jim 和 Andy想在海边寻宝挽救了一条搁浅的鱼遇到了一个瓶子? Beginning:Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for treasure. Jim saw a stranded fish on the beach. Jim picked up the f
22、ish gently and carried it into the water. They walked farther down the beach and came upon a bottle. Andy reached down and picked up the bottle. He rubbed the bottle, tugged on the cork and shook the bottle. Nothing happened. Jim grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand. The bottle hit a
23、rock and shattered into many pieces. Climax: ? The two boys ran after it. Ending:? 第二步:再读获取情节发展线索 梳理续写逻辑:细读两段续写的开头语,理顺续写段落间的逻辑关系。 Paragraph1:The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. Question 1:What was in the broken bottle? Question 2:What did Jim and Andy do? Question 3:What happened t
24、o the broken bottle? Paragraph 2:The two boys ran after it. Question 1:Why did the boys run after it? Question 2:What did they find later? Question 3:Where was the stranded fish saved by Jim? 第三步:预测情节发展 Paragraph 1:瓶子碎了,Andy和 Jim 看见一把银钥匙掉在地上,Andy弯腰想拾起钥匙。突然瓶子又完好如初,钥匙又回到 里面了。 Paragraph 2:两个孩子跟着瓶子跑。他们进
25、入海里时没有下沉而是漂浮在海上。他们感到很兴奋。瓶子把他们带到一 个岛屿附近,那儿有很多财宝,原来是那条搁浅的鱼来报恩的。 第四步:罗列提纲要点,优化提升,连接成文 Paragraph 1: hit a rock and shattered into many pieces, saw a long silver key, bent over to pick up the key, came together to form a bottle, began rolling slowly toward the sea Paragraph 2: ran after, entered the sea,
26、 floated on the surface of, followed the bottle, took as much as possible 第五步:检查誊写 Paragraph 1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered(碎裂) into many pieces. Both Andy and Jim gasped as they saw a long silver key on the ground in the glass pieces. Then they looked at each other. Why didnt it make any no
27、ise when they shook the bottle? Why didnt they see it? Andy bent over to pick up the key. Suddenly the glass pieces came together to form a bottle again. The key was mysteriously back inside! And the bottle began rolling slowly toward the sea. Paragraph 2: The two boys ran after it. When they entere
28、d the sea, astonishingly they didnt sink into the water but floated on the surface of it. They felt excited. They followed the bottle and then it stopped near an island where there was lots of treasure like diamonds and stones. “You can take as much as possible,” a voice came from the coast where a
29、talking fish was swimming. It was the stranded fish that Jim saved and put back into the water. 读后续写方法总结: 一、理清续写思路,打造高分作文 1.梳理记叙要素,归纳文本大意 文本大意(main idea)指文章的主要内容,即围绕主要人物或事物描述的主要事件及其结果。归纳记叙文文本大意可用 要素归纳法,即找出记叙文的六要素(时间、地点、人物和事件的起因、经过和结果),并将其概括为“何人/物于何时何 地做了何事,最终结果如何”,有时根据实际情况“何时何地”可以省略。 2.理清叙事情节,助推故事高潮
30、 情节是记叙文完整内容的具体展开,通常包括开端(beginning)、发展(development)、高潮(climax)和结局(ending)。在研 读所给文本的前提下,巧妙营造故事的高潮是提升写作质量的关键一环,其常用方法如下: (1)设立 1-2 个障碍:通过增加障碍反衬人物形象的高大,从而起到增强人物感染力的作用。 (2)营造冲突:营造冲突是一种简单有效可以达到故事高潮的方式,因为冲突可以带来紧迫感。 角色之间的冲突 角色与环境之间的冲突 放大内心冲突 3.研读段落开头语,精准定位写作方向 仔细阅读续写部分所给的开头语,寻找关键信息,结合叙事情节,找出其内在的逻辑联系,最终确定续写内容
31、。 4. 添加细节描写,凸显人物情感 细节描写主要是指对事物或人物的具体、生动、细腻的描写,包括景物或环境、人物行为、人物神情、人物心理等方 面,聚焦所见(see)、所听(hear)、所嗅(smell)、所尝(taste)或所触(touch),充实情境。通过细节描写表现主人公所做所感, 这样不仅让读者产生代入感,同时也能升华文章的主题。 二、关注两个维度,力争锦上添花 1.语篇的连贯性 (1)内容连贯:续写部分紧扣所给文本故事大意,与写作意图保持高度一致。 (2)语句连贯:在写作时要关注段落内部句与句之间的衔接、续写内容与段落首句之间的衔接、两个续写段落之间的衔 接和续写段落与所给文本之间的前
32、后呼应。 (3)语言连贯:续写部分的语言风格与所给文本的语言风格保持一致。 (4)结构连贯:续写完成后要使整篇文章前后呼应、逻辑通顺、结构完整。 2. 语言的丰富性 (1)句式结构:简单句、复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的灵活使用情况。 (2)语法结构:主动和被动语态、非谓语动词、with 复合结构等的准确使用,独立主格结构、虚拟语气等的合理使用。 (3)词汇选择:常用词汇尤其是动词、副词、形容词和名词的使用以及高级词汇的准确使用可以使语言变得丰富和生动。 特别需要注意的是,要学会运用动词来表达人物的情绪和心态,避免直接运用形容词来直接表达人物状态。 (4)修辞手法:比喻、拟人、夸张、引用
33、等修辞格的巧妙使用可以增强语言的丰富性和感染力。 三、避免三个误区 1.情节设计符合逻辑,避免太过荒诞的故事 读后续写从本质上来讲是考查考生的文字表达能力。由于其有原文故事的限制,还有两个段首句的限制,考生发挥想象 力的空间并不是很大,在故事的设计上并不能信马由缰。考生发挥想象力要在原文故事、段首句的基础及特定的框架 内进行。因此续写要求情节可简单,但是要合理。不要设计太过怪诞的情节。 2.文字精巧优美,书面化的长句不宜太多 续写使用语言要小巧、准确而有闪光点。故事的叙述不要用太过复杂的句子,但是,用词要精巧,要有精致的表达。 3.叙述要清楚连贯,对话不要太多 读后续写主要考查考生的叙述和描述
34、能力。因此,对话不要太多,150 词的故事续写设计三至四组对话即可。 写作积累 读后续写记叙文描写佳句 一、描写天气场景 1.The clear sky is as blue as the calm sea. 2.Today it is fine. The sky is cloudlessly blue. 3.It was a stormy night when they went out. 二、描写人物情感和心理 1.A sense of joy and happiness suddenly went through him. 2.The boy was too shocked to spe
35、ak a word out. 3.He was wild with joy when he finished the task on time. 三、描写外出和地理状况 1.It was a busy season for tourism and people were everywhere. 2.The place feasts my eyes. 3.The lake was a year-round paradise for the fishermen. 4.China has green hills and clear water and is full of beautiful sce
36、nery. 实战演练 () 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150 左右。 “Im going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(情绪)get the better of him. His parents were n
37、ot quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed. The boy lifted the last bag ont
38、o his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “Ill see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boys mother turned around to tell the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time t
39、o go back home.” The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didnt seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even her daily walks. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didnt. They offered the dog some of her
40、favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasnt her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried, “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “Weve tried everything.” “I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without
41、anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Lets get a little dog for Poppy.” It didnt take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wag
42、ging(摆动)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell. Paragraph 1: Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. Part 4 Writing 实战演练 写作题目一 One possible version: Dear John, There is no doubt that doing more exercis
43、e is good for our health. As students, we can make ourselves more active and smarter by doing exercise in our daily life. Personally, I think highly of jogging because its beneficial to our physical and mental health.Take myself for example, I often jog in the playground for half an hour.Each time I
44、 finish it, I feel it helps to build up my body and reduce my tension. Its helpful for us to set aside time to exercise regularly. I hope that everyone do some sports in their spare time rather than just stay at home or bury themselves in their work. Lets go out to do more exercise! Yours, Li Hua 写作
45、题目二 实战演练 Paragraph 1: Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the little dog. She lowered her head to watch it curiously. Then she became so excited that she accidentally knocked over the box in an attempt to get closer. With the box tipping over, ou
46、t came the little one, who was not shy and instantly got familiar with Poppy. It didnt take long before the two played around the house, cheerfully running after each other. Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. He had been missing his parents and the dog since it
47、 was the first time that he had been away from home for such a long time. When the boy caught sight of Poppy, he went rushing toward the dog and bent down to give her a big hug. Suddenly, the boy noticed the little dog, “Oh my god, who is this?” His parents laughed at the look of surprise on his face. “Its Poppys new companion,” said Mom.
