1、Analyses of the testAnalyses of the test 读后续写 Continuation Writing S I N C E 1 Reading 2 Plot planning 3 Micro-writing 4 Presentation Reading 1 who where when what how why when who where I, four businessmen, a young couple & two waiters at Balthazar one night Read to find brief information What did
2、the four businessmen do at Balthazar? The businessman hosting the other three considered himself a wine expert. He took a taste of the cheap wine in the first place, and showing off, he burst into delight about its purity. “Fantastic! he claimed. How did they feel? Maybe delighted. and the What did
3、the young couple do at Balthazar? This couple insisted the wine be poured into a fancy glass container before they drank . The young couple, who ordered the $18 pinot noir, were then unintentionally served the $2,000 Rothschild by the second waiter. On taking their first drink of what they believed
4、was cheap wine, they jokingly pretended to be drinking an expensive wine and copied all the behaviors of a wine expert, shaking the wine glasses, observing the liquid inside and tasting it slowly, totally fascinated. How did they feel? Enjoyable What did the two waiters do at Balthazar? The two wait
5、ers made an error and phoned me. How did they feel? Horrified. Para. 1: I rushed into my restaurant. Why did I rush ? Para. 2: After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild. Q1: Q1: Q2: Q3: How did I and the waiters feel? What might I see at Balthaza
6、r ? How did I comfort the waiters ? Why did I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild? How did I deal with the dilemma? What might I say to the businessmen and the young couple? Can you guess the ending? What would the waiter and I learn from this experience? make it logical(
7、合逻辑的合逻辑的) Plot planning Something must be included in P1 and P2. I rushed into my restaurant. 1.How did I and the waiters feel? 2.What might I see at Balthazar ? 3.How did I comfort the waiters ? After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild. 1.Why d
8、id I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild? How did I deal with the dilemma? 2.What might I say to the businessmen and the young couple? 3.Can you guess the ending? What would the waiter and I learn from this experience? Its time for you to assess your classmates continuati
9、on writing? Score (Your assessment) Reasons? Appreciate more sentences Assessment 总体要求：总体要求： 立德树人，服务选材，指导教学 具体表现为：具体表现为： 1.主题鲜明，不跑题 2.情节合理，不荒诞 3.情感真挚，不低级 4.续写完整，质量高 评分标准：评分标准： 评分时，主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构 三个方面考查，具体为： （1）续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与 原文情节情感的融洽度。 （2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当 性和多样性。 （3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。 I rushed into
10、 my restaurant .On arriving my restaurant, I threw myself on a chair out of breath. The two waiters, standing beside me silently, were looking at me frightenedly. “What? What happened？Why did you call me in such an urgent voice ？”？”I asked. They replied nothing, just staring at those four businessme
11、n and the young couple who were addicted to the tasty wine. After a while, they said that they had mistaken the most expensive wine for the cheapest wine and delivered the wrong order to the businessman and the young couple. Hearing their words, I just said some words to comfort them instead of scol
12、ding them . After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild. “Sir, so sorry that the waiters gave you the cheapest wine. Im to blame for the error.” After saying these words, I bowed to them deeply. The young couple happened to hear my words and felt a
13、stonished .”Thats nothing but a tiny error. I dont mind it. Though what I drunk was the cheapest,I felt satisfied.The taste of wine helped me get rid of the pressure of the work ,regardless of the price,” said one of the businessmen. Then the businessman and the young couple continued enjoying wine
14、as nothing had happened. Assessment (score) Reasons? I rushed into my restaurant. However, the whole brasserie was already in a mess. Fancy glasses were thrown onto the floor. Bottles became the weapon of those businessmen. Waiters hid under the counter . “Shut up!” I couldnt hold back my anger and
15、shouted.But I soon calmed down and realized that what really mattered was the solution to this messy situation. First,I asked my waiters to go home ,take a good rest and forget about the event that happened just now . After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,
16、000Rothschild. While I was working straight to the direction,I looked around cautiously and soon came up with an idea. I stared at one of them who held a bottle in his hand,and the highly lifted it up as if to hit someone. I shouted ,“ Dont do that any more. Rudeness is merely an expression of fear.
17、 You could afford to buy the $2,000Rothschild.That has confirmed that you have the ability to succeed and manage to do everything.So why dont you watch out for your manner?” These businessmen finally realized their mistakes and volunteered to pay for the bill. Assessment (score) Reasons? I rushed in
18、to my restaurant. I was very anxious. To my surprise,all of the hosts were enjoying themselves.It seemed that they didnt know what had happened. I looked for the two waiters who made the fault. Soon they walked to me and said,“boss, its all my fault. we are willing to receive the punishment.” I just
19、 said ,“everyone will make fault.” After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild. I didnt want to tell them the truth, so I said to the businessmen,“youre so lucky you can get a a $2,000 Rothschild freely”“Oh,really?Thank you.” He received the wine a
20、nd drank it. Assessment (score) Reasons? Sample writing: I rushed into my restaurant. The two parties were apparently enjoying their dinner time. The young couple were having so much fun pretending to be drinking an expensive wine, while the businessmen were also in a good mood, mistakenly assuming
21、they were tasting the most famous Bordeaux. Behind the counter stood the two waiters, close to tears. They felt guilty, wondering how they should smooth over their fault. Walking up to them, I patted their shoulders and said, “Take it easy, guys. It happens sometimes. But do remember this lesson.” A
22、fter comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a $2,000 Rothschild. I explained the whole thing and handed over the bottle to the businessmen with a sincerely apologetic smile. “Im terribly sorry, sirs. I wish our mistake hadnt ruined your night.” They looked astonished
23、first, but then burst into laughter. Afterwards, I turned to the young couple and decided to tell the truth, but I hesitated，just smiling, “Have a good evening!” The couple felt amazed but good enough. Yes, when facing trouble, I believe honesty is always the best solution, which is the recipe for my successful management in the past twenty years. Now its your turn to polish your continuation writing? Presentation 4 Can you give your classmates some tips on continuation writing? The integrity ,accuracy , logic and consistence. Appreciate more sentences Reflection
