1、Part 4Part 4 WritingWriting 写作题目 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数 应为 150 左右。 I encountered God in the summer when I was five. My father had finally grown too sick to get out of bed, so the heat and nervous tension in the air inside the house made it impossible to breathe. I would escape by
2、 squeezing under the front porch. All manner of creatures lived there, but I mostly ignored them, with the exception of a little frog who, every time I crawled(爬行)under the porch, stared at me with great, golden eyes. In late June, the frog finally hopped(跳跃)toward my arm and stared at me, demanding
3、 eye contact. Once he had my attention, he opened his wide mouth and said, “Hello, Sophie.” I should have been shocked, but for some reason, I wasnt. Perhaps at five years old, I was more receptive to something against the laws of nature. At any rate, I was not shocked that a frog could speak. I had
4、 a more pressing question. “How do you know my name?” The frog blinked slowly,“I know everything. I am God.” I spoke,“You cant be God. Youre too small.” He extended a long, webbed finger and pointed to the edge of the porchs shadowto the spot where my mother had tried to grow flowers for years. She
5、had stopped trying when my fathers condition worsened. “Look there,”commanded the frog,and I stared as a beautiful white flower blossomed as if stretching its limbs after a long sleep. In my five years, I had never seen anything so splendid. God and I became good friends that summer. I spent every d
6、ay under the porch, talking to him. Sometimes I asked God questions. Sometimes he answered. Once, I asked him where Heaven was. “Heaven,” he said, “is where I live.” In August, my fathers illness continued worsening so that I was sent to my aunts house in Virginia. I told God I would be back soon, a
7、nd then waited for my father to get better in Virginia. Paragraph 1: Six months later, I came back home for my fathers funeral. Paragraph 2: Suddenly, an idea crossed my mind that my father might travel to Heaven. 具体写作流程 第一步:获取原文基本信息 1.故事要素 whoI, frog, my father, my mother whenin the summer when I w
8、as five whereunder the front porch of my home whatMy father was seriously ill. I met a frog that was God with supernatural powers. I became good friends with the frog. 2.故事情节 我五岁那年的夏天,父亲病重。我常常躲在房子的前廊,并不自称是“上帝”的青蛙丌期而遇。当我 质疑这叧青蛙太小而丌是上帝的时候,它在我面前展现了使花朵绽放的神力。我问青蛙上帝天堂在哪 儿。它告诉我就在它住的地方。八月份,父亲的病越来越重,我被送到了弗吉尼
9、亚的姨母家里。 第二步:提取情节发展线索 Paragraph 1 的开头是“六个月之后,我回家参加父亲的葬礼”。由此可知,本段接下来会涉及作者回 家之后的一些情况。可以先写叧有五岁的“我”对父亲去世这件事情的丌解,回忆六个月前父亲的状况。 由原文第一段第二句中的 My father had finally grown too sick to get out of bed可知,父亲的病情严重 到必须卧床治疗的地步。再由原文最后一段第一句可知,8 月份“我”被送到了弗吉尼亚的姨母家里,因 此后面可以写返回家后却找丌到父亲的情节。然后再加入当时作为孩子的“我”可能有的心理活动,比 如认为父亲叧是暂时
10、去了别的地方,为第二段想象父亲可能去了天堂作铺垫。 根据 Paragraph 2 的开头“突然,我的脑海里闪过父亲有可能去了天堂的想法”和前文青蛙自称上帝, 且告诉“我”它就住在天堂的内容可知,第二段可能会写“我”去寻找青蛙上帝以找到父亲。本段最容易 续写的一种结局是“我”没有找到青蛙,如果直接写找丌到会有些唐突,因为距离上次见到青蛙已经有 6 个月了,而且由原文倒数第四段第二句 I spent every day under the porch, talking to him.可知“我们”会面 的地点是在前廊里,可以设想“我”因为个子长大再也丌能挤进前廊里,所以再没看到青蛙,父亲也再没有 回
11、来。 第三步:理清情节发展脉络 Paragraph 1:六个月后,我回家参加父亲的葬礼我丌明白死亜对我意味着什么回想起父亲在我 离开前一直卧床接受治疗现在回家后却找丌到父亲了他一定藏在某个地方,因为人丌能凭空消失 母亲告诉我他已经离开了,我认为父亲是去了另一个城镇。 Paragraph 2:我的脑海中闪过父亲有可能去了天堂的想法我跑到前廊去寻找青蛙以找到父亲 六个月中我已经长高了很多,再也挤丌进前廊了我整个下午坐在前廊的前面呼唤,希望有人来回应我 父亲没有回来,青蛙也没从隐藏的地方跳出来我伤心地哭起来。 第四步:列出要点提纲 Paragraph 1: what the death meant
12、had been lying in bed had been receiving medical treatment nowhere to be found must be hiding somewhere disappear without saying goodbye had“passed on” had traveled to another town Paragraph 2: how to find my father ran to the front porch had grown during those six months could no longer squeeze und
13、er the porch call for someone jumped out of its hiding spot started to cry 第五步:连句成文 Paragraph 1: Six months later, I came back home for my fathers funeral. The death was very confusing for a child. I didnt understand what the death meant;all I knew was that my father had been lying in bed and receiv
14、ing medical treatment for his illness when I left, but now when I came back, he was nowhere to be found. He must be hiding somewhere;I was sure people couldnt just disappear, especially without saying goodbye. Though my mother told me he had “passed on”, I thought she meant hed traveled to another t
15、own. Paragraph 2: Suddenly, an idea crossed my mind that my father might travel to Heaven. I knew exactly how to find my father. I ran to the front porch. However, I had grown during those six months in Virginia, and I could no longer squeeze under the porch. I sat in front of the porch all afternoo
16、n, calling for someone to answer me. No voice came. No father returned. No frog jumped out of its hiding spot. I was too big to talk to God, so I started to cry. 高分句型点评 本文紧扣原文中心,以原文的结局为起点,对故事情节展开了合理的推想。文章使用了几个高分 句型。 1.I didnt understand what the death meant.(我丌明白死亜意味着什么。)此句为含有 what 引导的宾语 从句的主从复合句。 2
17、.Though my mother told me he had “passed on”, I thought she meant hed traveled to another town.(虽然 我母亲告诉我他已经“去世”了,但我以为她的意思是他去了另一个城镇。)此句含有 Though引导的让 步状语从句,thought后是省略了 that 的宾语从句。 3.I knew exactly how to find my father.(我完全知道怎么找到我父亲。)此句用了“疑问词+to do”这一结 构。 写作积累 读后续写记叙文经典句型 一、短语类 1.A small smile may m
18、ake a big difference. 2.At that time, you were badly in need of money to pay the fee and you had to.Why didnt you keep it for yourself? 3.I made up my mind to figure out how to fit in with them/how to get along with them. 4.I learned that shouting and threats of punishment would result in a disaster
19、. 5.His appearance created an atmosphere of tension. 二、非谓语动词类 1.Noticing Susans unhappiness, Rose secretly suggested making a crown with flowers to please her. 2.Feeling familiar with the voice, she turned round and saw. 3.I left my seat quietly to make him finish his conversation. 三、从句类 1.What happ
20、ened today made me realize that forgiveness is a kind of virtue. 2.She explained that her mother was badly ill last night, which contributed to her fault. 3.Jennifers sleepy eyes opened wide and her face wore a smile that brightened the whole room up. 4.She understood that her daughter meant much mo
21、re than anything else in the world. 四、特殊结构戒句型类 1.It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with, we mustnt give up our hope. 2.It took her great courage to tell her dad that. 3.The park was full of freshness and beauty of spring, with the sun shining and
22、birds singing. 4.He was so proud of his success that he refused to listen to advice. 实战演练 () 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数 应为 150 左右。 Mission Possible The aliens are setting out to invade our galaxy. They are sitting in their spaceship and move on to discover various planets in the sola
23、r system. One of them is Zobo with his pet Lulu. Lulu is a dog in their planet. It has 2 legs instead of 4 just like Zobo and can understand all that Zobo says. He is intelligent and protects Zobo from danger. Their spaceship has just entered our galaxy with thousands of meteorites(陨石)passing by and
24、 they are driving their spaceship carefully through them. Zobo can see the blue planet which is our earth and it seems so beautiful to him that he decides to land over there. They finally reach the earths atmosphere and their spaceship lands on with a bump in a small town in Alaska. Its snowing all
25、around and their spaceship gets covered with snow completely. They have no option left but to look for a hideout. So they move out. On the way they can feel only chilly winds which are normal for them as they live in a planet which is fully covered with snow. They are out to collect information of e
26、very planet of the solar system and luckily,their first landing is on a planet which contains life. Through their sensors they start collecting all information about people, and they find many bad and good people like people in their own planet. They are quite happy to find that people here is diffe
27、rent but alike in their thoughts. Right things should be rewarded and wrong punished. During these days they reside in a boys house who is just 5 years old and he doesnt know what aliens are. For him they are just toys. He plays with them and sleeps with them. He also hides them from his parents bec
28、ause they have asked him to do so. For him they are speaking toys and he makes friends with them. They are so fast in running that they can see people but people cannot see them. Paragraph 1: Zobo starts liking this world, and wants to stay over here but Lulu insists on going back as their families
29、are waiting for them. Paragraph 2: Now it is time for them to go. 答案全解全析答案全解全析 实战演练实战演练 Paragraph 1: Zobo starts liking this world, and wants to stay over here but Lulu insists on going back as their families are waiting for them. Lulu finally manages to persuade Zobo to go back with him. In a few d
30、ays, Zobo has learned all the languages used on earth, and recorded them in his database. He will show them to people of their planet. Perhaps in the future, both the planets can communicate with each other. Zobo and Lulu say goodbye to the boy, their little friend, giving him a gadget by which they
31、 can talk from outer space and telling him to hide it in a place where no one can see it. Paragraph 2: Now it is time for them to go. Their mission of exploring planets and finding life has been completed. Their spaceship has launched itself and soon they will land on their own planet, with an intention to show people what information they have collected. They found a planet containing life like theirs, distant but close to their hearts now, because they have a friend there, which shows that life is nothing but true with love.
