1、读读后续写强化训练后续写强化训练Honesty Wont Let You Honesty Wont Let You DownDownInterpretation of the Text 文本解读A storyhowwherewhenwhywhowhat读什么？一、角色性格一、角色性格二、角色外表二、角色外表三、角色关系三、角色关系四、剧情主线四、剧情主线五、最后情感五、最后情感六、最后时空六、最后时空七、伏笔与呼应七、伏笔与呼应原文回顾 Asadwasa 13-year-oldboywhowasveryhonestandhardworking.Recently,hehadenteredanew
2、school,sohehadnofriendsyet.OnMondaymorning,hewasnearlylateforschool.Thenightbefore,hisfamilyattendedhiscousinsweddingandreachedhomelate,whichwaswhyhecouldntgetupontimeasusual. Atschool.Asadcouldnotpayattentiontoanythingandwantedthebelltoringsothathecouldbuysomethingtoeat.Afterafewhours,whenthebellra
3、ng.Asadquicklyopenedhisschoolbagtofindhismoney,butjustthenherememberedthathehadleftforschoolinahurryinthemorningandforgottentotakemoney.Helookedunderhisbooks,hopingtofindsomemoneybuttherewasnothing.原文回顾 Notknowingwhattodo,hewalkedoutoftheclassroomandsatonabenchinfrontofthecanteen.Hesawafewofhisclass
4、matesthere,amongthemwasFahad.Hewasoneoftherichestkidsinhisclass,buthewasaveryarrogantboywhothoughteveryoneelsewasaloser.ButasAsadwasnew,hedidntknowmuchaboutFahad. WhenhewenttowardsFahadandaskedifhecouldborrowsomemoneyforhislunch,Fahadlaughedalotandsaid,Iknewyouwerealoser,maybeabeggar？ Fahadlaughedou
5、tsoloudthatotherkidsalsoheardandmadefunofthesituation.HedidntanswerFahad,andslowlywalkedbacktowardsanemptybench.原文回顾 Whenhereachedthebench,henoticedsomethinglyingnearit.Itwasawallet.HepickeditupandrecognizeditasFahads,asherememberedFahadshowingittohisfriendsandtellingthathisuncleboughtitforhimfromth
6、eUK.Therewasquitealotofmoneyinsideforakid. Para. 1: Atfirst,AsadwantedtokeepitasecretandpunishedFahad._ Para.2: ThenFahadsaid. Whyareyougivingitback?_如何续？一、定二条一、定二条读后读写的原文通常由两条主线引导，一条叫做剧情线（剧情线（Plot line) Plot line) , 另一条叫做情感线（情感线（Emotion line)Emotion line) ,剧情线是文章中的明线。位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语点点1
7、1位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首语点点2 2位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语点点3 3文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调剧情的寓意点点4 4如何续？二、设四点二、设四点 Asad, an _ and hardworking boy, was a newcomer to the school without friends around. One day he was in such a _that he forgot to take _ with him. As a result, he had either to _ _food or borrow money from
8、 Fahad, an arrogant boy who was one of the richest boys and thought everyone else was a _. Naturally, Fahad _ _his request and even laughed at him, which made him _ (embarrass). Left alone on the bench in front of the canteen, he quite _ spotted a wallet on the bench. He immediately recognized it _
9、to Fahad, with a lot of money inside. turned down turned downhurryhurrymoneymoneygo withoutgo withoutloserloserhonesthonestembarrassedembarrassedaccidentallyaccidentallybelongedbelongedUnderstanding the storyUnderstanding the story problem - solution - problem - solution - problem - solutionStory St
10、ory linelineEmotion Emotion linelineStory lineStory linenew, no friends, no moneyborrow from FahadF refused the request, laugh atSpotted Fs walletWhat to do with the wallet ？lonely, helplesshopefulunhappy, embarrassedexcitedtorn ？Understanding the storyUnderstanding the story Para 1: At first, Asad
11、wanted to Keep it a secret and punished Fahad. Para 2: Then Fahad said, “Why are you giving it back?”What happened before Fahad asked the question? 1. Did Asad change his mind at the last minute? What made him change his mind?2. What was his new idea?3.How did he give back the wallet and what was Fa
12、hads reaction?1.How did Asad explain the whole thing? And how did he feel?2. Did Fahad believe his explanation? And what did he do?3. Asads reflections./ What did they each learn from the incident?Design the plot: top Design the plot: top sentencesentence续写参考思路： Paragraph 1: At first, Asad wanted to
13、 keep it a secret and punished Fahad. 思路1：我内心纠结 - 做诚实的人这一信念让我做出归还的决定 -我追上去，归还钱包- Fahad不解地拿了回去； 思路2：我想看他出丑，作为对我嘲笑的报复 -理智（做个诚实人）让我把钱包还给他。 Paragraph2: Then Fahad said, Why are you giving it back? 思路1：我解释了我内心的想法 - 被触动，他对我表示感谢，对所有人表示歉意 - 请我们吃午餐，成为好朋友 - 诚实让我收获了友谊和信任； 思路2：Fahad怀疑我的动机 -我解释原因 -借我钱，成了好朋友 反思：h
14、onesty伴我同行。u So embarrassed was she that she stood there clumsily, feeling the blood rush to her face.u She lowered her body, hesitated for a moment, wondering how to hide her inner embarrassment.u She opened her mouth, her face turning red.uAll the air seemed to disappear and she felt as if the who
15、le world were watching her.（环境描写）Language accumulation- embarrassmentLanguage accumulation- embarrassmentu An inner voice asked me to buy the pair of boots I liked, but another voice came into my mind, urging me to buy some decorations and feasts for the family.u Feeling quite torn between . And .,
16、I could hardly make the decision.Language accumulation Language accumulation 纠结纠结Honest - Honest - B Being honest - Honestyeing honest - Honesty Asad congratulated himself on making the right decision, making the school life ahead no longer lonely. The belief “Being honest wont let you down” will st
17、ick with him through the tough days ahead. Asad scratched his head, not knowing how to respond to Fahads apologies, but he knew he was, has been and will be honest. Make a good endingMake a good ending A. Message点睛式： Being honest not only helped him gain others trust but also made new friends in thi
18、s new school，a new chapter of life beginning to unfold before him. Make a good endingMake a good ending B. 环境描写烘托式： Bathed in the warm noon sunshine, Asad couldnt help smiling, glad that his simple honesty was rewarded with such a large circle of nice friends! More examples: Outside the window, the
19、birds perched on the top of the branches singing happily, as if celebrating my wise choice. Make a good endingMake a good ending C. 展望将来式： With more friends around, Asad was convinced that a new life was waiting for him to explore. Make a good endingMake a good ending D. 回首反思式： Looking back, Asad co
20、ngratulated himself on making the right decision, which helped him turn over a chapter of life. Make a good endingMake a good ending E. 自然过程式： By being honest and saying the truth, not only did Asad get some money to buy lunch when Fahad lent him some, but he was also able to make new friends. On th
21、e other hand, Fahads life changed, all his pride and selfishness went away and he learned an important lesson, that “Honesty wont let you down.”Make a good endingMake a good endingPossible versionPara.1: At first, Asad wanted to keep it a secret and punished Fahad. At least he could afford the lunch
22、 now. However, another voice popped up, urging him to give it back to Fahad, which made him feel torn. “I should never keep the wallet at the cost of my honesty, and Fahad would be extremely embarrassed without any money in the presence of so many classmates!” Asad convinced himself. Once he made up
23、 his mind, he accelerated his pace and caught him up. “Fahad, its your wallet and I found it on the bench.” Taking over the wallet, Fahad stared into Asads eyes with a puzzled look written on his face. (98)描写内心纠结的经典句式描写内心纠结的经典句式 + +定语从句定语从句分词作状语分词作状语+ +独立主格结构独立主格结构高级词块：高级词块：in the in the presence pr
24、esence of, afford, pop of, afford, pop up, at the cost of, up, at the cost of, accelerateaccelerate等等。等等。Possible versionPara.2: Then Fahad said, “Why are you giving it back?” He even looked into his wallet, obviously doubtful about Asads act. Calmly and patiently Asad explained, “I had originally w
25、anted to keep it secret as a punishment for your arrogance, but being honest matters more to me.” Hearing what Asad had said, Fahad felt his face burning with shame. He bent, thanking Asad for saving him from the embarrassing situation and apologizing to the classmates around for calling them losers
26、. “And the lunch is on me. You all are my friends!” Fahad announced. (88)动作与内心活动结合，使句子丰动作与内心活动结合，使句子丰富富句子副词置于句首，令人眼前一亮句子副词置于句首，令人眼前一亮情感表现与动作组合描写，情感表现与动作组合描写，再加上现在分词的运用，高再加上现在分词的运用，高级而又有画面感级而又有画面感长句子把握得不错，采用对长句子把握得不错，采用对称的结构，读起来有韵律美。称的结构，读起来有韵律美。高级词块：高级词块：originally, originally, matter, burn with shame, matter, burn with shame, be on sb.be on sb.等等。等等。
