1、She is a kind teacher.In order to help you,she always works hard.She is a teacher who is very helpful,for example,she always helps you with your science.Who is she?Lets play a guessing game!She is a teacher who likes travelling.She is a teacher.-Try to make your writing betterpollutionHi!Tina,Im hap
2、py to get your letter.I hear that the pollution is bad.I have some suggestions.You should walk to school.You should turn off lights.You should plant some trees.You should use something that can be used many times.These are my suggestions.I hope the environment in your hometown will be better later.Y
3、ours,Bill TinaIm happy to get your letter.You should walk to school.Tip1:Use words and phrases properly and vividly.用词适切、用词适切、生动生动Im happy to receive your letter.You should go to school on foot.How to make it more vivid(生动的生动的)？Im happy to hear from you.You should go to school on foot instead of tak
4、ing cars.Parts of Body:正文正文(节选节选)You should walk to school.You should turn off lights.You should plant some trees.You should use something that can be used many times.Sentence patterns(句型句型)of giving advice:should/can do sthWhy not do sth?/Why dont you do sth?What about doing sth?/How about doing st
5、h?It is+adj+for sb to do sthIt is a good idea to do sthHad better do sthIt is better to do sthTry to do sthLets do sth Lets walk to school.It is a good idea to walk to school.Youd better walk to school.Tip2:Try to use different sentence patterns(句型句型).Wed better turn off lights so that we can save e
6、nergy.You should turn off lights.Parts of Body:正文正文(节选节选)Adverbial Clause状语从句状语从句 so that,when,in order to,Turn off lights when we leave the classrooms to save energy.In order to save energy,lets turn off lights.You should plant some trees that are good for the environment.You should plant some tree
7、s.Parts of Body:正文正文(节选节选)Attributive Clause定语从句定语从句 that,which Tip3:Use complex sentences(复合句复合句)to make sentences better.You should plant some trees that can make our earth green.Use something that can be used many times.For example,we can use china cups instead of paper ones.Use something that ca
8、n be used many times.Parts of Body:正文正文(节选节选)Try to add an example.for example,such as Use something that can be used many times,such as using cloth bags instead of plastic bags.Tip4:Add examples to make your writing persuasive(有说服力的有说服力的).Hi!Tina,Im happy to hear from you.Because Im sorry to hear t
9、hat the pollution is serious.I have some suggestions for you.Lets walk to school instead of taking cars.Its good for us to reduce air pollution.You should plant some trees that are good for the environment.Turn off lights when we leave the classrooms to save energy.Use something that can be used man
10、y times.For example,we can use china cups instead of paper ones.These are my suggestions.If everyone starts to do something,the world will be saved.I hope the environment in your hometown will be better and better in the future.Yours,Bill Tip5:Use linking words properly 连接词使用恰当连接词使用恰当()Coherent(连贯的连
11、贯的)?写作中写作中句子和句子之间句子和句子之间比较常用的连接词比较常用的连接词1.表示并列表示并列/递进关系：递进关系：and,besides,whats more,also,not only,but also,at the same time,2.表示转折关系：表示转折关系：but,however,3.表示因果关系：表示因果关系：because,since,so,therefore,4.表示结果：表示结果：as a result,sothat,5.表示先后：表示先后：First,Second,Third,Next,Finally6.表示时间：表示时间：when,while,after,be
12、fore,as soon as7.表示总结：表示总结：in a word,generally speaking,all in all Hi!Tina,Im happy to hear from you._Im sorry to hear that the pollution is serious._I have some suggestions for you._,Lets walk to school instead of taking cars.Its good for us to reduce pollution._,Turn off lights _ we leave the clas
13、srooms to save energy._,you should plant some trees that are good for the environment._,use something that can be used many times.For example,we can use china cups instead of paper ones.These are my suggestions.If everyone starts to do something,the world will be saved.I hope the environment in your
14、 hometown will be better and better in the future.Yours,Billfinally,so,firstly,but;when;secondly;whats more;when Secondly Firstly But Whats more So Finally Firstly,lets walk to school instead of taking cars.Its good for us to reduce pollution.Secondly,turn off lights when we leave the classrooms to
15、save energy.Whats more,you should plant some trees that are good for the environment.Finally,use something that can be used many times.For example,we can use china cups instead of paper ones.Finally,use something that can be used many times.For example,we can use china cups instead of paper ones.Hi!
16、Tina.Im happy to hear from you.But Im sorry to hear that the pollution is serious.So I have some suggestions for you.These are my suggestions.If everyone starts to do something,the world will be saved.I hope the environment in your hometown will be better and better in the future.Tip6:Make sure the
17、structure(结构结构)is clear.采分点采分点满分满分可给分值可给分值1.1.内容充实，覆盖要点内容充实，覆盖要点（内容、要点）（内容、要点）7 76 67分分 描述了所有要点，内容合理、丰富描述了所有要点，内容合理、丰富35分分 描述了大部分信息，内容比较合理描述了大部分信息，内容比较合理12分分 描述了小部分信息，内容不合理描述了小部分信息，内容不合理0分分 没有作答或描述内容与主题无关没有作答或描述内容与主题无关2.2.用词适切，语法正确，用词适切，语法正确，句型多样句型多样（词汇、语法、句型）（词汇、语法、句型）7 76 67分分 用词适切，句型变化多样且有效，完全或基用
18、词适切，句型变化多样且有效，完全或基本没有语言错误本没有语言错误3 35分分 用词基本适切，句型较为单一，有少量语言用词基本适切，句型较为单一，有少量语言错误但不影响理解错误但不影响理解1 12分分 有较多语言错误，一定程度上影响理解有较多语言错误，一定程度上影响理解1 1分分 有大量语言错误，影响理解有大量语言错误，影响理解3.3.结构紧凑，意思连贯结构紧凑，意思连贯（语意、连词、指代）（语意、连词、指代）4 43 34分分 行文连贯，连接词使用恰当，指代清晰行文连贯，连接词使用恰当，指代清晰1 12分分 行文不够连贯，连接词使用不够恰当，指代行文不够连贯，连接词使用不够恰当，指代不够清晰不
19、够清晰0 0分分 没有连贯的意识没有连贯的意识4.4.书写规范，词数适宜书写规范，词数适宜（标点符号、大小写、（标点符号、大小写、词数）词数）2 22 2分分 大小写、标点正确，词数达标，书写规范整洁大小写、标点正确，词数达标，书写规范整洁1 1分分 大小写、标点有部分错误，词数达标，书写尚大小写、标点有部分错误，词数达标，书写尚可辨认可辨认0 0分分 大小写、标点错误较多，语言应用不规范，词大小写、标点错误较多，语言应用不规范，词数严重不足，书写难以辨认数严重不足，书写难以辨认 作文评分标准作文评分标准pollutionHi!Tina,Im happy to get your letter.
20、I hear that the pollution is bad.I have some suggestions.You should walk to school.You should turn off lights.You should plant some trees.You should use something that can be used many times.These are my suggestions.I hope the environment in your hometown will be better later.Yours,Bill TinaHomework
21、Polish your own writing.1.1.学习学习语文是一种享受，你会发现语文学习是在与另一个人对话，也是在与自己对话。每当你读一篇文章时，仿佛作者就在你身边，他的经历、他的情感都进入了你心中语文是一种享受，你会发现语文学习是在与另一个人对话，也是在与自己对话。每当你读一篇文章时，仿佛作者就在你身边，他的经历、他的情感都进入了你心中。2.2.不论不论读名家名篇，还是自己创作，你会更清楚地认识到自己，每次学习语文，其实都是对自己的一次审视，你不仅仅懂的更多，而且文学素养也随之提高。这便是语文，需要你与之心灵相通。读名家名篇，还是自己创作，你会更清楚地认识到自己，每次学习语文，其实都
22、是对自己的一次审视，你不仅仅懂的更多，而且文学素养也随之提高。这便是语文，需要你与之心灵相通。3.动物也有着自己的语言。它们不光有声音语言，还有许多无声的语言，例如美妙的舞姿、绚丽的色彩和芬芳的气味，研究这些千奇百怪的语言对人类有特殊的意义。4.议论文写作中大部分同学会陷入泛泛而谈，没有议论的内容，就算有论据可用，也只是蜻蜓点水，草草收兵。不少作文且不说能运用几种修辞组织语言，更不说能使句子富有意蕴，单是连最基本的语言通顺也很难做到。5.记叙文的写作反映的问题则更大，且不说选材的平淡，就语言的叙述而言，无法体现出一个学生高中三年这一思想蜕变的进步，反而还停留在初中的水平，令人汗颜。6.大部分的
23、记叙文平铺直叙，语言啰嗦乏味，缺少灵动性的语句，不会运用各种表达方式，逻辑错乱，这样的文章基本都被判为四类下。7.7.由由果溯因法。事物都是互相联系的。比如，有很多事物就是以因果关系的联系形式存在的。写材料作文，审题时如果能由材料中列举的现象或结果推究出造成所列现象或结果的本质原因，往往能找到最佳的立意。果溯因法。事物都是互相联系的。比如，有很多事物就是以因果关系的联系形式存在的。写材料作文，审题时如果能由材料中列举的现象或结果推究出造成所列现象或结果的本质原因，往往能找到最佳的立意。8.8.提炼提炼中心法。这是写新材料作文最为常见且最为稳妥的审题立意方法。写新材料作文时，如果能准确地提炼出材
24、料的中心，并以其作为文章的主旨，一定会使所写文章既切题又有深度。所以，写新材料作文时这种方法来立意中心法。这是写新材料作文最为常见且最为稳妥的审题立意方法。写新材料作文时，如果能准确地提炼出材料的中心，并以其作为文章的主旨，一定会使所写文章既切题又有深度。所以，写新材料作文时这种方法来立意最多最多。9.9.抓抓关键句法。关键句常常有暗示材料中心的作用。所以，有些新材料作文材料中的关键性语句可以作为选择立意角度的突破口。在新材料作文的材料中，关键句常常是命题者或材料中的人物的评议性语句。关键句法。关键句常常有暗示材料中心的作用。所以，有些新材料作文材料中的关键性语句可以作为选择立意角度的突破口。在新材料作文的材料中，关键句常常是命题者或材料中的人物的评议性语句。
