1、高一学生写作指导高一学生写作指导Guided writing14班，王美月32班，杨帆37班，黄美3班 张翠晶周洁周洁刘梦垚吴石磊吴石磊 1.单词拼写或用错：单词拼写或用错：We should eat more vagetables a good eating habbits are importantvegetableshabits2.时态语态问题时态语态问题 In the past,people eat more vegetables.3.主谓一致问题主谓一致问题,谓语动词错用谓语动词错用 Do exercises is a good way to keep healthy.we shou
2、ld eating three meals every day.4.形容词副词错用形容词副词错用 Regularly exercises are very important Good eating habits can make you health and strong ateDoingRegularhealthyeat5.词性混淆问题词性混淆问题 Now peoples life is more and more well People have known that It is important for themselves to keep healthy and have good
3、 habits.6.介词短语的运用问题介词短语的运用问题 It is good at our habits.Some are particular with food.better and betterthemforabout1、先根据文章的内容和语言初、先根据文章的内容和语言初步步确定档次确定档次。第五档第五档.2125分分第四档第四档.1620分分第三档第三档.1115分分第二档第二档.610分分 第一档第一档.15分分 0分分词汇词汇,句型句型（高级）和（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语法多样化（较复杂）1.覆盖了所有的覆盖了所有的要点要点 2.应用了较多的语法结构应用了较多的语法结构和词
4、汇和词汇 3.有效地使用了语句间的有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑连接成分，使全文结构紧凑要要点点全全连连接接词词语言地道，语言地道，规范规范覆盖所有内覆盖所有内容要点容要点2、主要内容：、主要内容：内容要点；内容要点；词汇和语法的数量和准确性；词汇和语法的数量和准确性；上下文的连贯；上下文的连贯；语言的得体性语言的得体性应用了较多应用了较多的语法结构的语法结构和词汇和词汇有效地使有效地使用了语句用了语句间的连接间的连接成分成分当今社会中当今社会中,人已经知道人已经知道,重要的是保持健康和良好重要的是保持健康和良好的生活习惯，对于饮食健康也越来越重视。请以的生活习惯，对于饮食健康也
5、越来越重视。请以Good Eating Habits and Health为题目，写一篇为题目，写一篇关于好的饮食习惯与健康的作文。请涵盖以下要关于好的饮食习惯与健康的作文。请涵盖以下要点：点：1.健康的饮食习惯对我们来说很重要。健康的饮食习惯对我们来说很重要。2.过去，人们生活水平不好，吃的垃圾食品较少，过去，人们生活水平不好，吃的垃圾食品较少，所以很健康。现在，我们应当多吃蔬菜少吃肉，所以很健康。现在，我们应当多吃蔬菜少吃肉，少吃垃圾食品。少吃垃圾食品。3.足够的锻炼对我们的身体来说非常的重要，我足够的锻炼对我们的身体来说非常的重要，我们应当多运动。们应当多运动。任务呈现任务呈现 一一 统
6、筹安排统筹安排 Outline of the text:Paragraph1:introduce the toppic“good eating habits and health Paragraph2:introduce the differences about eating between past and now Paragraph3:conclusionWriting steps词语储备：词语储备：A:1.超超 重重 2.精力旺盛的精力旺盛的 3.减减 肥肥 4.定期锻炼定期锻炼 5.对对有好处有好处 6.养成好习惯养成好习惯 7.足够的睡眠足够的睡眠 8.缓解压力缓解压力自我轻松自我
7、轻松 9.节食节食 10.恰当的饮食恰当的饮食 11.按时吃三餐按时吃三餐 12.吃很多的垃圾食品吃很多的垃圾食品 13.大量大量 14.关注关注 15.重视重视 16.适量适量 1.overweight 2.energetic 3.lose weight 4.take regular exercise 5.be good for/do good to 6.develop/form a good habit7.enough sleep 8 release oneself 9.go on a diet.10.proper diet 11.eat meals 12.eat too much jun
8、k food 13.a great deal 14.Pay attention to 15.attach great importance to 16.in proper quantity 17.(不不)健康的饮食习惯健康的饮食习惯18.含量高含量高/低低/丰富丰富19.感觉虚弱感觉虚弱(健康健康/很糟很糟/恶心恶心)20.增强体质强身健体锻炼身体增强体质强身健体锻炼身体21.保持健康保持健康22.对对有害有害17.unhealthy eating habit 18.be high/low/rich in.19.feel weak(well,terrible,sick)20.build up
9、ones body21.keep fit/healthy 22.be harmful to do harm to 与健康有关的谚语与健康有关的谚语(谚语谚语)每天一只苹果不用看医生每天一只苹果不用看医生an apple a day keeps the doctor away (谚语谚语)早睡早起使人健康、富有和聪明早睡早起使人健康、富有和聪明early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy,wealthy and wise.备用句型：备用句型：表达观点的结构表达观点的结构1.常言道，俗话说，俗话说的好常言道，俗话说，俗话说的好 as the
10、saying goes 表示开头过渡的结构表示开头过渡的结构2.众所周知，as is known to all、it is well known that 对于一个话题进行总结的结构对于一个话题进行总结的结构3.总而言之，总的来说，总而言之，总的来说，In a word,in general,in short,on the whole,in conclusion 备用句型备用句型：1.你工作越努力，你取得的进步就越大。你工作越努力，你取得的进步就越大。The harder you work at it,the more progress you will make.额外成就感额外成就感The+
11、比较级比较级.,the+比较级比较级.比较级比较级+and+比较级比较级(The world is getting smaller and smaller.)备用句型：备用句型：2.在这个迅速发展的世界里，对每个人在这个迅速发展的世界里，对每个人来说，学好英语是非常重要的。来说，学好英语是非常重要的。It is important for everyone to learn English well in our rapidly developing world.额外成就感额外成就感同样句型包括：It is important/(necessary,difficult,convenient,p
12、ossible)for sb.to do sth.。3.在我看来，我们应该养成健康饮食的习惯以强健在我看来，我们应该养成健康饮食的习惯以强健身体。身体。In my opinion,we should have to develop healthy eating habits to build up a strong body.4.我们最好定时就餐我们最好定时就餐 Wed better have meals regularly.5.为了健康，我们饮食应多样化。为了健康，我们饮食应多样化。To keep fit,we are supposed to have various healthy die
13、ts.6.有句名言说道：人如其食（饮食塑造人）有句名言说道：人如其食（饮食塑造人）.As a proverb says,/(As is well known to us,)we are what we eat.7.很多人开始意识到锻炼的重要性了很多人开始意识到锻炼的重要性了 Many people are becoming aware of the importance of exercising.8.只有用这种方式，我们才能有足够精力更好的只有用这种方式，我们才能有足够精力更好的学习。学习。Only in this way can we have enough energy to study
14、 better.保持健康的方法保持健康的方法 健康对我们任何人来说都是最为重要的。为了保持健康，我们需健康对我们任何人来说都是最为重要的。为了保持健康，我们需要一些普通的知识。要一些普通的知识。首先，注意你的饮食。我们应该吃大量的水果和蔬菜，因为它们首先，注意你的饮食。我们应该吃大量的水果和蔬菜，因为它们富含纤维素并且脂肪含量较低。正如一句谚语所说：富含纤维素并且脂肪含量较低。正如一句谚语所说：“一天一个苹一天一个苹果不求医。果不求医。”因此水果对健康有益。不要吃太多富合脂肪的食物，因此水果对健康有益。不要吃太多富合脂肪的食物，比如说黄油。同时，应当适量地吃甜食，因为糖过多对我们人体比如说黄油
15、。同时，应当适量地吃甜食，因为糖过多对我们人体不利，也不要喝太多的咖啡。不利，也不要喝太多的咖啡。其次，锻炼是必需的；经常性的锻炼能使我们保持身材；通常其次，锻炼是必需的；经常性的锻炼能使我们保持身材；通常每天跑步的人的心脏要比那些不跑步的人更强壮。每天跑步的人的心脏要比那些不跑步的人更强壮。最后，养成良好的生活习惯。我们晚上应该睡八小时，不要最后，养成良好的生活习惯。我们晚上应该睡八小时，不要过分辛苦地工作。过度劳作和睡眠不足将导致生病。而且，不要过分辛苦地工作。过度劳作和睡眠不足将导致生病。而且，不要吸烟。吸烟。以上这些方面我们都该注意，这样才能保持健康。以上这些方面我们都该注意，这样才能
16、保持健康。任务呈现：任务呈现：1.词数词数100120左右左右 2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯可适当增加细节，使行文连贯书面表达如何写？书面表达如何写？五个步骤1、审题、审题文字信息文字信息图画信息图画信息题材、人称、时态、要点题材、人称、时态、要点2、以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句、以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句 话的细节要点。话的细节要点。3、联词成句：用联词成句的方法将上述要点、联词成句：用联词成句的方法将上述要点 的词语扩展成句子。的词语扩展成句子。4 联句成文：联句成文：注意：注意：主语和谓语主语和谓语背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等）背景（适当增加时间、地点条件等）逻辑关
17、系逻辑关系开头与结尾开头与结尾语篇衔接语篇衔接5、检查修改，规范抄写、检查修改，规范抄写给阅卷人以好的第一直观印象给阅卷人以好的第一直观印象整体三部分整体三部分 Heading点题；一两个句子；概括性；暗示性2.Body 中心记述部分；层次分明3.Ending 小结；呼应主题 技技 巧巧1.使用较高级的词汇使用较高级的词汇3.使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词词汇反映你知识贮存量的词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。的一个重要标志。运用得当的句子结构可以运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉整篇文章因此而
18、生辉 。使用恰当连接词，对写一使用恰当连接词，对写一篇有篇有“英语味英语味”的文章很的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。自然、紧凑。2.使用较丰富的句式使用较丰富的句式1.Because the weather was good,our journey was comfortable.2.We all think he is a great man.3.Suddenly I thought out a good idea.4.The students there neednt pay for their books.5.As a result the plan wa
19、s a failure.The plan turned out to be a failure.Thanks to the good weather,our journey was comfortable.一、怎样使用较高级的词汇一、怎样使用较高级的词汇We all think highly of him.A good idea occurred to me./A good idea suddenly struck me.Books are free for the students there.6.When she heard he had died,she went pale with s
20、orrow.7.She went to Austria in order to study music.8.When he spoke,he felt more and more excited.9.In our school,there are twenty-six classrooms.10.You can find my house easily.She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music.At the news of his death,she went pale with sorrow.The more he spoke
21、,the more excited he felt.Our school is made up of twentysix classrooms.Youll have no trouble finding my house.丰富的句式：丰富的句式：(常用到的句型结构）常用到的句型结构）利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。1.感叹句 e.g.How happy I was when I received your letter!What a kind boy he is!How disappointed he was!2.强调句 e.g.It was this young boy t
22、hat helped the old granny.I do hope you can come if possible.3、倒装句 e.g.Only in this way can you solve this problem.There comes the police car.Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man.4、省略句 e.g.They read while walking or riding on a bus.Come to me if necessary.5、with短语 e.g.I saw
23、 a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.6、定语从句 e.g.In my opinion,cyber cafes should be a place where we can find much useful information.Lets come to the main teaching building,at the back of which stands the school library.7、各种名词性从句 e.g.Thats what I should do.We should
24、 do a favour to whoever needs help at present.8、各种状语从句 e.g.Time passed quickly before we knew it.The moment we reached the farm,we got down to harvesting.So long as we work harder at our lessons,well catch up sooner or later.Do call me before hand so that I can meet you at the airport.They had to wa
25、it because the rain was getting more and more heavily.1 When he arrives,please give me an e-mail.（使用V-ing形式）.2.To his surprise,the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）3.Though Im weak,Ill make the effort.(使用倒装句)4.He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用
26、强调句型)5.I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气）On his arriving,please give me an e-mail.What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.Practice 怎样使用较丰富的句式怎样使用较丰富的句式Weak as I am,Ill make the effort.It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what
27、 had happened.I couldnt have passed the physics exam but for your help.6.She walked out of the lab and many students followed her.(使用过去分词)7.They sang and laughed as they went back to school.(使用V-ing形式)8.I wont believe what he says.（使用状语从句）9.If you study hard,you will make rapid progress.（用并列句）10He h
28、ad no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.(使用倒装句)No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.Followed by many students,she walked out of the lab.Singing and laughing,they went back to school.No matter what he says,I wont believe.Study hard and youll make rapid p
29、rogress.高考大纲中常用的高考大纲中常用的连接词连接词1.表示递进表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容在同一话题上补充内容 另外，还有：what is more;besides;also;moreover;in addition2.表示转折关系表示转折关系 但是，然而，相反：but;however;yet;instead;on the other hand;on the contrary.3.表示因果关系表示因果关系 因为，因此，所以:since;as;because (of);so;thus;therefore;as a result;4.表示条件关系表示条件关系 如果，只要:if;on c
30、ondition(that);as long as 除非:unless 否则:or else 5.表示时间关系表示时间关系 当 的时候:when;while 在之后:after 在之前:before 直到:until 一就:as soon as 后来，然后:later;afterwards 不久:soon 近来:lately;recently 自从:since 从那时起:from then on6.表示特定的顺序关系表示特定的顺序关系 首先，最主要的:above all 其次:secondly 然后:then;next 最后:finally;in the end7.换一种方法表述换一种方法表述
31、 换句话说:in other words;that is to say;8.进行举例说明进行举例说明 例如，比如:for instance;for example;like;such as9.用于陈述事实用于陈述事实 实际上:in fact;actually;as a matter of fact 跟你说实话:to tell you the truth10.对一个话题进行总结对一个话题进行总结 总而言之，总的来说:on the whole;in short;all in all;in general;in a word 其它常用到的副词其它常用到的副词 Therefore;otherwise;
32、finally;furthermore;Thus;namely;although;afterwards;personally;On one side of the road there is a new classroom building.On the other side,where the playground used to be now stands another new buildingour library.(NMET1999 范文)As far as I know,everyone is happy about this new arrangement of things.(
33、NMET2001 范文)Whats more,I can go to bed earlier.(NMET2001 范文)三、怎样使用恰当的连接词三、怎样使用恰当的连接词PracticePractice 1 1 请在下列句子中（间）填上恰当的关联词或意思有联系的短语。Xiao Ming was walking in the street _ he heard someone cry for help.2.He advised that I hire a car _ I could travel around in the west.3.It was not long _ the police c
34、ame._he heard the cry for help,he jumped into the water to save the girl.whenin order thatbeforeAs soon as 5.Do you agree with my arrangement?_,do write to me soon.6.We can go downtown and do some shopping._,we can pay a visit to some places of interest.I shared the cost of the gas with my friends._
35、,I saved$80.8.Eating sugar is bad for our teeth._,it may make us fat.If not/soIn additionAs a resultWhats worse范文范文 The Way to Stay Healthy Health is most important for any of us.In order to stay healthy,we need some common knowledge.Firstly,pay attention to the diet.We should eat lots of fruit and
36、vegetables,because they are rich in fiber and Iow in fat.As a proverb says,An apple a day keeps the doctor away.“So fruit is good for health.Dont have a lot of food that contains too much fat,such as butter.Meanwhile,sweets should be eaten in proper quantity,because too much sugar does harm to us.Do
37、nt drink too much coffee,either.Secondly,exercise is necessary.Regular exercise can help us keep from getting fat.People who do running every day usually have stronger hearts than who dont.Finally,form good living habits.We should sleep for about 8 hours at night,and never work too hard.Over work an
38、d little sleep will lead to illness.Whats more,stay away from cigarettes.These are the things we should pay attention to so as to stay healthy.In current society,people have known the importance of keeping healthy and good life habit.In the past,people ate three meals at home,and they ate more veget
39、ables and less meat.They were very strong and seldom went to see doctors.Now life is better,people eat more meat,fish,eggs and other food with more fat.They often go out for good meals with their families and friends.But they get easy to be ill.And sports play an important role in our daily life.les
40、s exercise are bad for health.Good rest,less meat and fish,more vegetables and enough exercise are good for health.So I exercise every day.I eat a lot of vegetables.I eat fruit and drink milk every day.I drink a cup of water 15 minutes before each meal and eat much vegetables and fruit.Of course,I l
41、ove junk food,too,and I eat it once a week.And I sleep nine hours every day.The better we get into good eating habits,the happier our life becomes.一一 统筹安排统筹安排Outline of the text:Paragraph1:introduce the toppic“good eating habits and healthParagraph2:introduce the differences about eating between pas
42、t and nowParagraph3:conclusion1.话题要一致或相关。仿写有时会和续写相结合，在仿写时我们要注意话题或中心的一致性，使前后语意连贯。2从分析情节入手，把握人物的性格特征 从整体到部分，只有了解了故事的全貌，才能更好地把握人物的性格，因为人物的性格是通过完整的故事情节，在矛盾的冲突中展现出来的。3.从分析环境入手，探究人物命运及其思想性格之所以如此的社会原因 首先，人物的成长变化、人物性格的形成与社会环境有着密不可分的关系。4.赏析主要人物形象的作用，主要是赏析人物形象的社会意义 首 先要结合情节分析人物形象的典型性，然后结合社会现实分析人物形象折射的社会现象及给人带
43、来的某种启示。5.根据材料一中孩子们的自述，可见他们偏爱自然界中的某一方面，没有接受完整的自然教育，他们在自然界的行为比较自我随性，可能会妨害生物。6.这部带有自传色彩的长篇小说以“我”的经历和视角来安排结构和故事情节。通过“我”的人生经历和感情遭遇来展示人物性格的发展。它既有利于直接展示人物的内心世界，也在无形中拉近了作品和读者之间的心理距离，易于取得感人的艺术效果。7.散步是一篇叙事抒情的散文。本文从一件小事入手，表达了深刻的内涵。这种以小见大的写法给读者留出了想象空间，同时也充分地表达了主题思想。日常生活中，你可曾见过一些小事蕴藏着哲理和内涵。试着写一段文字，从生活中的“小”发掘出“大”。8.如果我们囫囵吞枣地看待我们的人生，那么我们只会看到人生中的不幸与灾难，而把一些幸福快乐的事忽略了。只有静下心来，慢慢地品，慢慢地赏，也许不幸的背后就有幸福的嫩芽。9.雨是最寻常的，一下就是三两天。可别恼。看，像牛毛，像花针，像细丝，密密地斜织着，人家屋顶上全笼着一层薄烟。树叶儿却绿得发亮，小草儿也青得逼你的眼。傍晚时候，上灯了，一点点黄晕的光，烘托出一片安静而和平的夜。在乡下，小路上，石桥边，有撑起伞慢慢走着的人，地里还有工作的农民，披着蓑戴着笠。他们的房屋，稀稀疏疏的，在雨里静默着。
