1、No Crown for meInterpretation of the Text 文本解读A storyhowwherewhenwhywhowhatSusanRoseInterpretation of the Text 文本解读(Who)GrandmaSchoolmates1.Susan was invited to the woods full of flowers but couldnt go,not finish the work of grandmother.大家邀请大家邀请Susan到一个到处都到一个到处都是鲜花围绕的丛林中玩耍，但是鲜花围绕的丛林中玩耍，但是她由于没有完成奶奶布置
2、的是她由于没有完成奶奶布置的任务，没法出去玩。任务，没法出去玩。2.Susan moved the mark in the stocking,cheated her grandmother.Susan抹去了奶奶在袜子里的抹去了奶奶在袜子里的做的标记，欺骗奶奶任务已经做的标记，欺骗奶奶任务已经完成了。完成了。3.Susan was allowed to go,with red cheeks,feeling guilty.当奶奶同意当奶奶同意Susan出去玩的时出去玩的时候，只见她羞愧的红了脸。候，只见她羞愧的红了脸。Interpretation of the Text文本解读(How)情感线：情
3、感线：1.从一开始，从一开始，Susan看到大家都可以出去玩，但是自己却要在家帮奶奶做袜子而产生看到大家都可以出去玩，但是自己却要在家帮奶奶做袜子而产生委屈委屈的心理的心理。2.由此，由此，Susan生出了想要敷衍了事糊弄奶奶，从而脱身好让自己置身于美丽的大自然的生出了想要敷衍了事糊弄奶奶，从而脱身好让自己置身于美丽的大自然的喜悦心理喜悦心理。3.可不曾想，奶奶却夸奖自己，还说一如既往地信任自己，最终允许自己出去玩可不曾想，奶奶却夸奖自己，还说一如既往地信任自己，最终允许自己出去玩，从而，从而演变出来了愧疚心理演变出来了愧疚心理。读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考
4、英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）1.Interpretation of given information首句解读：Para.1 The little party had reached an open space in the woodsGiven Information“Will you come with us,Susan?”cried several girls to a schoolmate.“We are going to the
5、 woods;do come,too.”(Para 1)读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）New InformationWho are involved in the little party?What did they do in the party?What are Susans and her friends feelings when they are enjoying t
6、hemselves in the party?What will Susan think of when playing with her friends?1.Interpretation of given information首句解读：Para.1 The little party had reached an open space in the woods读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读
7、（G-N策略）1.Interpretation of given information首句解读：Para.2“Now,Susan,”said Rose,“Put on the crown of flowers,for you are to be our queen.”“Yes,I have cheated her,”said she to herself.“If she knew all,she would never trust me again.”（para.11)Given Information读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执
8、教课件【推荐】Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）New Information What are Susans and her friends feelings when they are enjoying themselves in the party?Why did friends choose Susan to be put on the crown?What was Susans reaction after knowing she was chosen to be thei
9、r“queen”by her friends?Will Susan admit her fault?And how?1.Interpretation of given information首句解读：Para.2“Now,Susan,”said Rose,“Put on the crown of flowers,for you are to be our queen.”读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】2.Interpretation of underlined words下划线词解读：finish,home,Rose,gr
10、andmother,tear,flowers,the mark,in the stocking,company,cheatedCharacterObjectsPlacesEmotionsSusan,grandmother,flowers,the mark,in the stockingInterpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读hometear,finish,company,cheated读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】SusanRos
11、eGrandmaInterpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读 1reflecting on what she had cheated her grandmothercried out Put on the crown of flowers,for you are to be our queen.读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】SusanRoseGrandmaInterpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读 2reflecting on what she had c
12、heated her grandmothercried out Put on the crown of flowers,for you are to be our queen.trembled with fearwith tears rolling down her face.读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之动作神态描写：内疚、自责的心理篇Para.10:As Susan repeated these words,she felt th
13、at she was trying to cheat herself.She had acted a lie.读后续写的评分原则之一是“内容的丰富性”。我们可以通过对人物的动作、语言、心理活动、表情和环境等细节的描写以及修辞等多种方式来丰富内容，增强叙述的画面感，使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。这篇文章将会大量的运用一些字词句来描写一个人物的内疚、自责的心理。读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】词的积累：词的积累：形容词：confused,insecure,anxious,bewildered,discouraged,frustr
14、ated,guilty,ashamed,depressed,lonely,remorseful,inferior,isolated.词块和句的积累：词块和句的积累：1.“I should like to go with you very much,”replied Susan,with a sigh.2.“How tiresome it must be to stay at home to work on a holiday!”said Rose,one of the girls,shaking her head.3.Susan heard the remark,and,as she bent
15、 her head,she wiped away a tear,and thought of the pleasant afternoon the girls would spend gathering wild flowers in the woodsThe Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之动作神态描写：内疚、自责的心理篇读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】II.词块和句子的积累4.Her grandmother took the work and looked at it v
16、ery closely.5.As she left the cottage,she walked slowly away,not singing as usual.6.“There is nothing the matter.”As Susan repeated these words,she felt that she was trying to cheat herself.7.I felt incredibly ashamed of myself for getting so angry.8.I believed Julie was totally remorseful over what
17、 she did.9.I realized I was becoming increasingly depressed and apathetic.读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】2.很快地，很快地，Susan和小伙伴们分开了，回到了家去向奶奶道歉。和小伙伴们分开了，回到了家去向奶奶道歉。Quickly Susan left the other girls,went back home _.(运用并列句句型)Quickly Susan left the other girls,and went back home,_.(运
18、用非谓语动词结构)Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.她的伙伴们都在到处跑着，自我娱乐，可她的伙伴们都在到处跑着，自我娱乐，可Susan却独自坐在草坪上陷入自却独自坐在草坪上陷入自我反思。我反思。Her companions were running about enjoying themselves,but Susan sat alone on the grass _.(运用连动句句型)Her companions were running about enjoying themselves,but Susan sat alone on the grass,_.(运用非谓语
19、动词结构)and apologized to her grandmotherreflecting on what she had cheated her grandmotherand reflected on what she had cheated her grandmotherapologizing to her grandmother读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】5.她觉得她无法再往前走了，脚像灌了铅一样沉重和僵硬。她觉得她无法再往前走了，脚像灌了铅一样沉重和僵硬。He didnt think he could g
20、o any further.His legs_.(比喻修辞)felt like pieces of wood heavy and stiff3.她说，她说，“可是我已经欺骗了我奶奶可是我已经欺骗了我奶奶”，脸颊上留下了泪水。，脸颊上留下了泪水。“But I have cheated my grandmother,”said she,_.(运用并列句句型)“But I have cheated my grandmother,”said she,_.(运用独立主格结构)and tears flowed down her cheeks4.Rose嫣然一笑，并没有多说什么，将处于自责中的嫣然一笑，并没
21、有多说什么，将处于自责中的Susan抱抱入怀中。入怀中。_,Rose smiled radiantly,gathering her _ Susan into her arms.(用副词作状语，形容词作定语)tears flowing down her cheeks.guiltySpeechlessly读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】读后续写高考英语作文新题型6-PPT执教课件【推荐】8.一听到那个坏消息，她自责不已。一听到那个坏消息，她自责不已。On hearing the bad news,_.On hearing the bad news,she _,with grea
22、t guilty,tears_ her cheeks.(句子拓展)lowered down her head6.Susan took off the crown and her tears rolled down.Susan took off the crown,_.(用“with+n.+非谓语动词”改写句子)Susan took off the crown,_.(用独立主格结构改写句子)with her tears rolling down7.女孩们看着她内疚地低下了头。女孩们看着她内疚地低下了头。The girls looked at her _.her tears rolling dow
23、nshe felt extremely guiltywith their heads down guiltilystreaming/rolling/pouring down Possible version 1 Paragraph 1The little party had reached an open space in the woods.When her companions ran about enjoying themselves,Susan sat on the grass,reflecting on what she had cheated her grandmother and
24、 wishing she were at home admitting her fault.After a while Rose cried out,“Let us make a crown of flowers,and put it on the head of the best girl here.”Soon the crown was finished.All the girls agreed Susan was the best girl both in school and at home and she deserved it,so they decided she was to
25、wear it.Possible version 1Paragraph 2“Now,Susan,”said Rose,“Put on the crown of flowers,for you are to be our queen.”As these words were spoken,the crown was placed on her head.In a moment she took it off,and threw it on the ground,saying,“No crown for me;I do not deserve it.”The girls looked at wit
26、h their mouths open in surprise.“I have cheated my grandmother,”said she,tears flowing down her cheeks.Quickly Susan left the other girls,went back home apologizing to her grandmother.“Susan,”said her grandmother,“I am so happy you have realized your fault,and you are still my own little girl!”点评：在第
27、一段的续写中，对于点评：在第一段的续写中，对于SusanSusan的动作和心理描写会是我们的主要侧重的动作和心理描写会是我们的主要侧重点。由于内心带着愧疚，所以哪怕在大家开心的玩耍的时候，点。由于内心带着愧疚，所以哪怕在大家开心的玩耍的时候，SusanSusan也是在也是在reflecting onreflecting on 并且并且w wishing she were at home admitting her faultishing she were at home admitting her fault。这样。这样的描写可以和其他的小伙伴们形成鲜明的对比，从侧面凸显出的描写可以和其他的小
28、伙伴们形成鲜明的对比，从侧面凸显出SusanSusan内心的不内心的不安。第二段中像安。第二段中像tears flowing down her cheekstears flowing down her cheeks；I do not deserve itI do not deserve it；went back home apologizing to her grandmotherwent back home apologizing to her grandmother等这些句子的描写就可以直等这些句子的描写就可以直接抒发出接抒发出SusanSusan的悔过之心。这样就可以从正反两面来突出的悔
29、过之心。这样就可以从正反两面来突出SusanSusan这一人物性这一人物性格，也能更好地促进剧情的发展，从而揭示主题格，也能更好地促进剧情的发展，从而揭示主题-知错要改以及要懂得这样一知错要改以及要懂得这样一个道理，你若想获得更多就要承担的更多。个道理，你若想获得更多就要承担的更多。Possible version 2 Paragraph 1The little party had reached an open space in the woods.When her companions ran about enjoying themselves,Susan sat on the grass
30、,reflecting on what she had cheated her grandmother and wishing she were at home admitting her fault.After a while Rose cried out,“Let us make a crown of flowers,and put it on the head of the best girl here.”Soon the crown was finished.All the girls agreed Susan was the best girl both in school and
31、at home and she deserved it,so they decided she was to wear it.Possible version 2Paragraph 2“Now,Susan,”said Rose,“Put on the crown of flowers,for you are to be our queen.”Upon hearing the words,Susan trembled with fear.“If only I could tell them the truth.”thought Susan,struggling hard in her heart
32、.At the same time,the crown was placed on her head.“No crown for me;I do not deserve it because I have cheated my grandmother.”cried she,with tears rolling down her face.Speechlessly,Rose smiled radiantly,gathering her guilty Susan into her arms.“No,Susan,you deserve the crown.The time you speak out
33、 the truth,you win our trust again and I believe your grandmother will love you deeper and trust you more.Lets go together and admit your fault”said Rose,putting the crown on Susan and leading the way to grandmothers home.After Susans apologizing,her grandmother said mildly,“I am so happy you have r
34、ealized your fault,and you are still my own little girl!”点评：这篇范文相对于上一篇来说，对于点评：这篇范文相对于上一篇来说，对于Susan的肢体语言和心理语的肢体语言和心理语言的描写会更到位一些。这样可以更好的凸显出一个人物的性格，使言的描写会更到位一些。这样可以更好的凸显出一个人物的性格，使其栩栩如生，也使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。而这些效果的产生都其栩栩如生，也使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。而这些效果的产生都是通过使用一些微技能来达到的，比如非谓语动词的运用，副词的使是通过使用一些微技能来达到的，比如非谓语动词的运用，副词的使用，虚拟，比喻等。尤其像前文用，虚拟，比喻等。尤其像前文Susan的的trembled with fear；Speechlessly;with tears rolling down her face和后文奶奶的和后文奶奶的said mildly可以产生明显的对比效果，足以见得奶奶的高深用意。她对于可以产生明显的对比效果，足以见得奶奶的高深用意。她对于Susan的教育是引导自身去感悟，而非是直接讲大道理，这样可以让孩子学的教育是引导自身去感悟，而非是直接讲大道理，这样可以让孩子学会自我教育，从而点名了文章主旨。会自我教育，从而点名了文章主旨。
