1、读后续写读后续写高一（1）/(4)班读后续写试题说明u 提供一篇提供一篇350350词词以内的语言材料，原文多是情节丰富的以内的语言材料，原文多是情节丰富的记叙文记叙文，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语段落开头语进行进行续写续写(150150词词左右左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接逻辑衔接、情节情节和和结构结构完整完整的短文。的短文。命题特点 读后续写文章题材选择以记叙文为主。文章信息完整，既可以提炼出要点，又要给续写留出余地，此类文章故事性强，情节有起伏，内容连贯，逻辑性强，结构清晰，结尾处有结局或者感慨、总结等。段落要
2、求：给定的段落开头能引导故事延续，又防止天马行空的想象。评分标准 Jenny was the only child in her home.She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily.She couldnt help weeping when she thought of the scolding from her mother.Having wandered in the street for hours,she felt a little hungry and w
3、ished for something to eat.She stood beside a stand for a while,watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business.However,with no money in hand,she sighed and had to leave.The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked,“Hey,girl,you want to have the noodles?”“Oh,yes.but I dont ha
4、ve money on me,”she replied.“Thats nothing.Ill treat you today,”said the man.“Come in.”The seller brought her a bowl of noodles,whose smell was so attractive.As she was eating,Jenny cried silently.“What is it?”asked the man kindly.“Nothing,actually I was just touched by your kindness!”said Jenny.“Ev
5、en a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles,while my mother drove me out of the house.She showed no care for me.She is so merciless compared to a stranger!”Hearing the words,the seller smiled,“Girl,do you really think so?I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot.But i
6、t is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby.Can you number the times she cooked for you?Have you expressed your gratitude to her?”Jenny sat there,speechless and numb with shock;she remembered Mothers familiar face and weathered hands.“Why did I not think of that?A bowl of noodles from
7、a stranger made me feel grateful,but I have never thanked my mum for what she has done for me.”On the way home,Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home.Paragraph 1Nearing the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath._Paragraph 2A gentle touch on he
8、r hair called her mind back._Task:a continuation(续写)of the story what happened _in_ the story what happened _ the storyParagraph 1Nearing the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath._Paragraph 2A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back._afterWhat/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhy The key elements to explore in a s
9、tory“43214321”模式下的读后续写思维模式下的读后续写思维“4321”Method4Reads-Read for ,emotional change,conflict,theme3Principalsaction-responseconflict-solutionnegative-positive2Given sentences1Good ending研读文章意识研读文章意识-情节推进情节推进意识意识:结局反推情节结局反推情节意识意识衔接意识衔接意识主题意识主题意识写作方法三大原则三大原则写作小技巧写作小技巧1.双线并行情节线情感线写作小技巧写作小技巧2.巧用过渡地点过渡逻辑过渡因果
10、：thus、therefore时间过渡at first/early in the morning/when./on arriving at.(一到.)/without hesitation(没有迟疑)/having done.(做完.)/finally/in the end02、写作方法写作小技巧写作小技巧3.换词大法简单词高级词see-catch sight ofhappy-delightedsad-depressedsay-murmur/interrupt/insist/whisper/add/shout.02、写作方法写作小技巧写作小技巧4.万能句式过渡词，with/without.+介
11、短/doing(主动)/done(被动),人 did.,doing.,feeling.eg:After 10 minutes,with a book in her hand,enjoying her favorite songs,she stepped into the classroom,feeling delighted.5.记叙性语言与描述性语言结合，避免流水账。02、写作方法两个雷区两个雷区太过离奇对话、长句过多Step 1 ReadingFast readingWhats the style of the passage?A.Narration(记叙文)B.Exposition(说明
12、文)C.Argumentation(议论文)讲述人物讲述人物经历、事经历、事物变化物变化Fast readingWhich one is true according to the passage?A.The author tells the story in the first person.B.The author tells the store in the second person.C.The author tells the story in the third person.YouHe She Itin the first person.I WeWhat tense should
13、 we use if we will continue to write?A.The simple past tense 一般过去时B.The simple future tense 一般将来时C.The simple present tense 一般现在时 Fast reading Task 1 Read for elements Careful readingwhowhowhenwhen wherewhere whatwhat whywhy IDavidthe day of the big cross-country runthe race spot(a place with thick
14、evergreen forest)David hesitated and said he decided not to run.Because the coach was afraid he would be laughed at by the kids from other schoolsa special education teacher of Davids schoola ten-year-old boy with a brain disease;unable to walk or run like other kids;rock from side to side while wal
15、kingTask 2 Read for plot&EmotionsEmotions Though unable to walk or run like other kids,David was treated equally as a regular kid and usually lived a happy life in the school.He decided to take part in the cross-country run and practiced very hard,never missing a single practice,though he was always
16、 finished his run long after the others.He was asked to decide by himself whether to run or not on the run day because the coach was afraid he was laughed at by the kids from other schools.He was standing by himself off the side by a fence but his usual big toothy smile was absent.HappyDeterminedHes
17、itantDepressed/Lost and downPlot&EmotionsAs a special education teacher,I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.I found David standing alone by a fence,not warming up and walking the route like other runners before the race.I asked his coach and learn
18、ed the reason.After making sure David could run if he wanted,I turned to find him coming towards me.AdmiredSurprised FrustratedDetemined读故事读故事Step 2 Writing两种构思方法两种构思方法“四到一行四到一行”“线索呼应线索呼应”看看 听听 想想 说说 做做找出线找出线索，前后呼应索，前后呼应“两法六句两法六句”第一第一步步 依依据首句，构思框架据首句，构思框架两两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)读懂两段首句读懂两段首
19、句第第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句、第第二段首句后的二段首句后的衔接句。衔接句。即即第二段的尾句第二段的尾句能体现故事圆满结局的句子能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故或故事事给我们启示的句子。给我们启示的句子。(2)写好三个衔接句写好三个衔接句(3)写好一个升华句写好一个升华句动作描写动作描写增加细节增加细节所见所见所闻、所说所闻、所说所思所思所做所做环境描写环境描写人物描写人物描写 语言描写语言描写心心理活理活动描写动描写第二第二步步 增增加细节，展开续写加细节，展开续写续故事续故事Conflicts1.1.最终最终DavidDavid参加比赛了吗？是什么让他改变了
20、主意？参加比赛了吗？是什么让他改变了主意？2.2.比赛过程中，其他学校的孩子嘲笑比赛过程中，其他学校的孩子嘲笑DavidDavid了吗？为什么有或没有了吗？为什么有或没有嘲笑他？嘲笑他？Theme读后续写一般都用正能量结尾。所以其他学校的孩子们应该没有嘲读后续写一般都用正能量结尾。所以其他学校的孩子们应该没有嘲笑笑DavidDavid，反而会很敬佩他，会为他的身残志坚和不畏困难坚持到最，反而会很敬佩他，会为他的身残志坚和不畏困难坚持到最后的精神而鼓掌。后的精神而鼓掌。-所以根据事情的发展顺序和所给的首句，所以根据事情的发展顺序和所给的首句，Conflict 1 就是第一就是第一段要解决的内容，
21、第二段就解决段要解决的内容，第二段就解决Conflict 2.续故事续故事Clues-首句线索首句线索Para1:We sat down next to each other,but David wouldnt look at me.Para2:I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.Why?What was he doing then?How was he feeling then?What did I decide to do?What and how did I say to him
22、then,making him determined to run?-I managed to persuade David to join in the race.-Though David finished the run long after the other children,he was admired and respected by other kids.How did he perform in the race?What did I feel when seeing him perform that way?What was the other kids response
23、to his performance?续故事续故事Clues-原文线索原文线索1.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.2.After making sure.,his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.3.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.4.David had not missed a single practice,and
24、 although he always finished his run long after the other children,he did always finish.5.,I was familiar with the challenges DAvid faced and was proud of his strong determination.比赛结束时，受到在场师生的比赛结束时，受到在场师生的鼓励和钦佩甚至尊敬，鼓励和钦佩甚至尊敬，David很很可能有这个表情。可能有这个表情。可以用来描述可以用来描述David赛跑时的样赛跑时的样子子-动作描述动作描述 两个两个always的部
25、分可以用来描述的部分可以用来描述David在比赛时的结果：他不可在比赛时的结果：他不可能跑赢别人，但仍坚持跑完全能跑赢别人，但仍坚持跑完全程。这可能是有些同学容易忽程。这可能是有些同学容易忽视的地方。视的地方。此处是我能够成功鼓励此处是我能够成功鼓励David参参加越野赛跑的基础。所以续写加越野赛跑的基础。所以续写第一段时可以参照此句。第一段时可以参照此句。这是这是David最令人敬佩的品质，最令人敬佩的品质，也应该是也应该是“我我”说服他参赛的关键说服他参赛的关键点。点。Paragraph 1We sat down next to each other,but David wouldnt look at me.Task 3 Outline possible plot（para.1）Reasonable动作，心理，情感，环境动作，心理，情感，环境/情景情景
