1、1大学英语四级写作专题辅导大学英语四级写作专题辅导 吴少驰 江苏大学外国语学院 2大学英语四级作文评分标准l一、评分原则一、评分原则1 CET检查考生是否达到大学英语教学大纲规定的四级和六级教学要求，对作文的评判应以此要求为准则。l2CET作文题采用总体评分(Global Scoring)方法。阅卷人员就总的印象给出奖励分(Award Scores)，而不是按语言点的错误数目扣分。l3从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体。作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容要通过语言来表达。要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而合适地表达思想，也就是要考虑语言上
2、的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。3l4避免趋中倾向。该给高分的给高分，包括满分；该给低分给低分，包括零分。一名阅卷人员在所评阅的全部作文卷中不应只给中间的几种分数。l 5.字数不足以应酌情扣分。l二、评分标准二、评分标准1本题满分为15分2阅卷标准共分五等：2分、5分、8分、11分及14分。各有标准样卷一份。3阅卷人员根据阅卷标准，对照样卷评分，若认为与某一分数(如 8分)相似，即定为 该分数(即8分)；若认为稍优或稍劣于该分数则可加一分(即9分)或减一分(即7分)。但不得加或减半分。4分数档4评分标准2分(33)条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。5分(39)
3、基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。8分(45)基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。11分(57)切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。14分(67)切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。注：白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给0分。5CET4写作评分标准高分作文基本要求：思想表达正确，语义连贯，无重 大语言错误高分要求：句型的多样性经典词组短语的运用亮点词汇6写作题型l议论文1.主题型（topic）健康对人类的幸福必不可少；如何保持健康；结论2.
4、观点对比型（A&B）有人认为，英语对中国经济发展很重要；另有人认为，英语对中国经济发展没有意义；我的观点l说明文很多人不注重日常卫生习惯；不注意卫生习惯的后果；如何解决这一问题7写作题型l描写文（图表作文）描写图表内容（现象）；分析现象的原因；观点或解决办法l应用文（包括书信、便条、通知、海报等）主题；相关细节；重申主题8写作原则l内容简单化（“简单”是指适合在30分钟内表达）l结构模式化（主题句-分论点-总结）l语言要包装l错误要回避9写作技巧l宏观结构三段式开头要开门见山，写出主旨句；段落内部结构：主题句+扩展句（+结尾句）10l微观结构学会遣词造句词汇准确使用词汇，在此基础上尽量使用高级
5、词汇多使用词组、短语恰当运用过渡词汇避免多次重复使用同一词汇，可以用同义词或同根词替代句型注意变化句式简单句复合句交叉使用适当使用插入语，倒装句等恰当使用修辞11建议l平时多注意收集有用词汇句式l注意模仿12题目：BicyclesAn Important Means of Transport in China提纲：（1）为什么自行车在中国这样普及（2）和汽车的比较（3）自行车在中国的前途13模板的提炼过程：思路和表达Bicycles are very popular in China.Almost every family in the city has two or three bicycl
6、es.During the rush hour,you can see that thousands of people-man and woman,old and young-ride their bicycles to work and study.That is why China is called“the kingdom of bicycles”.14l单复数错误：man and woman men and womenl词性错误：old and young the old and the youngl专有名词：第一个和最后一个单词首字母大写，其他：实词（名动形副代数）首字母大写；虚词
7、（介连冠）首字母不大写。152006.12Direction:许多人喜欢在除夕夜观看春节晚会但有些人提出取消春节晚会我的看法 16l句式提炼：Bicycles are very popular in China.l词性转化：popular popularitylIn China,bicycles have gained wide/great popularity among Chinese people.17l2011-06l现在网上购物已经成为一种时尚lIn the recent decade,online shopping has gained wide popularity among
8、youngsters.18l2010-06l如今不少学生在英语学习中不重视单词拼写lIn China,English learning has gained wide popularity among students.However,19l2009-12l建设绿色校园很重要lIn the contemporary society,the concept of green campuses has gained wide popularity among universities or colleges.20l2009-06l越来越多的博物馆免费对外开放的目的是什么？lIn the prese
9、nt-day society,free admission to museums is enjoying wide popularity among Chinese citizens.21l2008-12l一次性塑料袋曾经广泛的使用lDuring the past decades,disposable plastic bags gained wide popularity among people in the world.22l2008-06l娱乐活动多种多样lIn this day and age,a variety of recreational activities have gain
10、ed wide popularity among individuals.23lBicycles are very popular in China.?24lIn my eyes,you are the most beautiful.lIn my eyes,no one is more beautiful than you.25l高分句式l结构：No _ is/are more _than_.lBicycles are very popular in China.lIn China,no means of transport is more popular and important than
11、 bicycles.26l我能想到最浪漫的事就是和你一起慢慢变老。l？27l高分句式：双重否定l句型：否定词(no/not/never/nothing)+有否定意义或否定前缀或否定后缀的名词、形容词、副词、动词、介词、连词等28lNothing great was ever achieved without enthusiasm.Ralph Waldo EmersonlNothing is impossible to a willing heart.HeywoodlNo man is useless in this world who lightens the burden of someon
12、e else.Charles DickenslThe word“impossible”is not in my dictionary.Bonaparte Napoleon29l2011.12lDirections:Youre allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will by commenting on the humorous saying,Quitting smoking is the easiest thing in the world.Ive done
13、it hundreds of time.”Youd write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.Outlines:1.坚强的意志是成功的重要保证。2.意志坚定的人才能完成伟大的使命。3.学生也是这样，不刻苦学习，终究不会成为有用之才。30l意志坚定的人才能完成伟大的使命。lPeople cannot accomplish great missions without a strong will.lNo one can undertake a great mission without a strong will.lNo man is
14、unlikely to have brilliant achievements with an iron will.lHe will not succeed who will not persevere.31l被动表达lNo great mission can be accomplished without a strong will.lNo success cannot be achieved with an iron will.32lNothing Succeeds Without a Strong WillNo great work can be performed without wi
15、ll.We envy famous men and imagine that fame was due to some stroke of luck.But when we know their histories,we find that it is long years of will and constant effort that have brought about their success.Just as we cant reach the top of a mountain without climbing,we cant achieve success without wil
16、l.The modern society provides people with more opportunities than before,and there are stories which tell us the possibility of becoming successful overnight.Actually that is not the case.Before these people become successful,a lot of hard work has been done,unnoticed mostly.What we usually see is t
17、he result,but what we ignore is a long process of struggling forward and wrestling with internal or external obstacles.Take quitting smoking for example,which is,to most people,a difficult task,so people always give up the idea for they dont have the strong will.In a nutshell,strong will is an impor
18、tant condition or role of the success the individual should desire to maintain forever.There is no instant success in this world.Strong will is the best policy to make your life distinct and your dreams come true.33l高分句式：排比句式lI came;I saw;I conquered.Julius CaesarlGovernment of the people,by the peo
19、ple and for the people,shall not perish from the earth.Abraham LincolnlStudies serve for delight,for ornament,and for ability.Francis Bacon lSome books are to be tasted,others to be swallowed,and some few to be chewed and digested.Francis Bacon34l排比句式lIt cannot be denied that technology does help us
20、 a lot.Internet provides us with easy access to various aspects of knowledge and information;mobile phones make it more convenient for us to communicate with one another;a growing number of man-made satellites have been launched to probe into the secrets of the universe.Without technology,the world
21、would stop developing.That is why we should be proud of advanced science and technology in the contemporary age.35l排比句式lsome discard litters everywhere;some cheat in tests;some waste food on canteens;some throw offensive/insulting remarks at others;some are always late for classes;some guys even wat
22、ch pornographic or violent films in dorms.36l2009.12lDirections:For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Creating a Green Campus.You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below:1.建设绿色校园很重要 2.绿色校园不仅指绿色的环境.3.为了建设绿色校园，我们应该.37l1.建设绿色校园很重要lThe
23、concept of“Green Life”has gained wide popularity among Chinese citizens.Almost every university has been aware of the importance of building a green campus.Without green environment it is impossible for college students to have an enjoyable/agreeable life in the Ivory Tower.Furthermore,a green campu
24、s is of benefit to broaden/consolidate students awareness of environmental protection.Creating a Green Campus38l2.绿色校园不仅仅指绿色的环境lIn addition to green environment,green campuses also refer to decent behaviors.However,taking a look around,we can find a good many examples of inappropriate ones:some disc
25、ard litters everywhere;some cheat in tests;some waste food on canteens;some throw offensive/insulting remarks at others;some are always late for classes;some guys even watch pornographic or violent films in dorms.In fact,it has become a trend for many students to turn a blind eye to their own bad ac
26、ts.39l3.为了建设绿色校园，我们应该lAccordingly,it is imperative/urgent for us to take measures to maintain green campuses.For one thing,it is essential that regulations should be worked out to ban these negative behaviors.For another,we should educate,advocate and encourage our classmates,friends and acquaintanc
27、es to refuse all uncivilized acts.If we do our utmost to do so,the future of our college life will be hopeful,promising and rosy.40l友情提醒：高分句式灵活灵活运用lNowadays English learning is very popular in China.lIn recent decades,English learning has gained/is enjoying wide popularity among Chinese students.lNo
28、wadays English learning is more and more popular in China.lIn recent decades,English learning has gained/is enjoying growing popularity among Chinese students.lIn recent decades,English learning has found its growing popularity among Chinese students.41l首段首尾句句式选择（呼应式写法）l1)_has/have gained(is/are enj
29、oying)wide popularity among_.l2)_has/have found its/their way among _.l3)It has become a prevalent trend for_ to_.It has become a prevalent trend that_.l4)There is a growing trend of_.There is a growing trend that_.l注：首句前加上适当的时间状语42l2011-06l现在网上购物已经成为一种时尚lIn the contemporary society,online shopping
30、has gained wide popularity throughout the world.For the sake of convenience,a growing number of people make purchases on a variety of shopping websites every day.It has become a prevalent trend for youngsters to shop online.43lIn the contemporary society,it has become a prevalent trend for youngster
31、s to shop online.For the sake of convenience,a growing number of people make purchases on a variety of shopping websites every day.Online shopping has gained wide popularity throughout the world.44lIn the contemporary society,there is a growing tide of youngsters shopping online.For the sake of conv
32、enience,a growing number of people make purchases on a variety of shopping websites every day.Online shopping has gained wide popularity throughout the world.45l2009-12l建设绿色校园很重要lIn the present-day society,the concept of“Green Campus”is enjoying wide popularity among universities.Without green envir
33、onment it is impossible for college students to have an enjoyable and agreeable life in the Ivory Tower.Thus it has become a prevalent trend for universities to create green campuses.46l2010-06l如今不少学生在英语学习中不重视单词拼写lIn recent decades,English learning has gained wide popularity among students.There is
34、a growing trend/tide of learning English in China.However,47l题目：My View on Double BA Degreel提纲：1.现在大学生读双学位的现象很常见 2.对此，人们看法不一 3.我对这一现象的看法练笔48lMy view on Double BA DegreelIn the contemporary society,the system of double bachelors degree has gained wide popularity among universities or colleges.On many
35、 campuses it has become a prevalent trend for students to have two majors at the same time.49lTo this phenomenon,different students take divergent attitudes.Some strongly approve of it in that a double bachelors degree can broaden their vision,thus putting them in a more favorable position in the jo
36、b-seeking market.On the contrary,those who stand firmly opposed to it also have cogent reasons.For one thing,two majors make it difficult for them to focus on one particular field;for another,they can expand their scope of knowledge by reading extensively rather than pursuing a double bachelors degr
37、ee.50lPersonally,I am slightly negative about double bachelors degree.In this day and age,the more skilled we are in one specific realm,the better we can meet the societys needs.Accordingly,it is advisable that we should make the most of our college life to acquire more specialized knowledge and ski
38、lls to set the stage for our future.51lMy View on Double Degreel In the recent decade,double BA degree has gained wide popularity among universities or colleges.Taking a look around,we can see a great many students strive for it.l To this phenomenon,people who favor it are convinced that a double BA
39、 diploma builds up confidence in the fierce competition and enables graduates to land an interview easily.By contrast,those who oppose it contend that learning two majors deprives students of their spare time to do extracurricular activities.Whats more,they regard double BA degree as a certificate r
40、ather than the standard for weighing a persons capability.l From where I stand,a student with two majors stands a better chance to find a satisfactory job in the market.Therefore,it is essential that we push for a double BA degree and pave the way for a bright future.52l观点对比型模板提炼lTo this phenomenon/
41、issue,different _ take divergent attitudes.Some strongly/firmly/constantly approve of/advocate it in that/as _.On the contrary/By contrast,those who are/keep/stand strongly/firmly/constantly opposed to it cogently/convincingly contend that _.53lTo this phenomenon/issue,different _ take divergent att
42、itudes.Some who strongly/firmly/constantly approve of/advocate it are cogently convinced that_.On the contrary/By contrast,those who are/keep/stand strongly/firmly/constantly opposed to it contend that _.54lTo this phenomenon/issue,different _ take divergent attitudes.Some strongly/firmly/constantly
43、 approve of/advocate it.They hold the view that_.Moreover/Furthermore,_.In addition,_.On the contrary/By contrast,those who are/keep/stand strongly/firmly/constantly opposed to it also have cogent/sound reasons.For one thing,_;for another,_.55l(时间状语),_has/have gained(is/are enjoying)wide popularity
44、among_.It has become a prevalent trend for_ to_.Some_ strongly/firmly/constantly approve of/advocate _ in that/as _.(Some_ strongly/firmly/constantly approve of/advocate _.For one thing,_;for another,_.)lOn the contrary/By contrast,those who are/keep/stand strongly/firmly/constantly opposed to it al
45、so have cogent/sound reasons.According to their point of view,_.Moreover/Furthermore,_.In addition,_.56五彩斑斓的英语句子l什么样的句子更加吸引阅卷老师？l优美句子的艺术张力何在？l优美的句子如何形成？57l如何避免句式单调?l被动式lIt形式主语/宾语l分词作状语lThere belWith复合结构（with+n.结构）l非限制性定语从句l倒装l主语从句l名词化58l被动式l人们普遍认为理论与实践是不可分的。It is widely accepted that theory is insep
46、arable from practice.l学生应该适当重视单词拼写。Due importance should be attached to spelling.l事情应当按照轻重缓急来处理。Priority should be given to the urgency of matters.l只有拥有远大的理想与辛勤的努力才能取得成功。No success can be achieved without aspiration and perspiration.59lIt形式主语/宾语l(1)不用说 It goes without saying thatl(2)值得做某事 It pays to
47、 do sth.l(3)不可否认 It cannot be denied that It is undeniable that It must be admitted thatl(4)人们普遍认为 It is commonly believed that It is generally considered that It is widely accepted that It is universally acknowledged that60l(5)很重要 It is exceedingly/extremely important/essential/crucial/vital/necess
48、ary/imperative/urgent(for sb.)to do It is exceedingly/extremely important/essential/crucial/vital/necessary/imperative/urgent that+主语+(should)do/be donel(6)很流行/普遍 It has become a prevalent trend/tide(for sb.)to do61l(7)使得怎么样 make it+adj.+(for sb.)to dol(8)认为怎么样 think/believe/consider/find it+adj.+(f
49、or sb.)to dol(9)想当然认为 take it for granted that(take sth.for granted)62l分词作状语lTaking a look around,we can see a great many students strive for it.lEncouraged by parents and teachers,a great many students strive for it.lEquipped with a double BA certificate,they can enhance their competitiveness and p
50、romote their development.63lthere be 结构l(1)不可否认 There is no denying(the fact)thatl(2)是没有/几乎没有意义的 There is no/little point/sense in doingl(3)对于人们观点不一 There is no consensus among_ on_/doingl(4)也有人持有不同的观点 There are also some who hold the opposing opinion.64lthere be 结构的灵活运用l1.近几年这个地区的人口锐减。In recent dec
