1、Your Description,My GuessStudent A describes the person on the screen and student B makes a guess who the person is.He is an actor/a singer.His films are very good and interesting.He can also dance very well.He has many fans and most of my classmates like him very much.Directions:Introduce one of yo
2、ur classmates.You can talk about:his/her appearancehis/her personalities or behaviorWho is the reader of your essay?How to achieve your purpose?Whats the purpose of your essay?A recommended structure:IntroductionThesis statementBodyTopic sentenceSupporting sentences/paragraphsConclusionThesis restat
3、ementHis/Her appearanceBackground information/Your feelings/CommentsPersonality and BehaviorRead the first paragraph of Sample 1 and think:1.What stands out about the person?2.Is there an overall impression or idea that can structure this essay?3.Do you notice an overall quality,skill,or goal that s
4、eems to characterize this person?4.Is there a thesis statement that points out this quality or trait?Write Statements,Not AnnouncementsHow to begin your essay effectively？Read paragraphs 2-4 of the sample essay and think:Whats the main idea of each paragraph?Para.2Para.3Para.4Thesis statement:_ Cary
5、,who is my classmate and best friend,is one of the best people Ive ever seen.Cary and I became classmates two years ago.As our intimacy grows up,I can tell he is truly attractive,versatile and hard-working.Replace vague ideas with specific informationHow to describe a persons physical appearance?01.
6、Describe the person in general terms.02.Follow“Top to Bottom”order03.Tell a little bit about the persons clothes.04.Round it off with a general statement.Group work Read paragraph 2 of the sample and think:ChecklistThe process of describing a persons appearanceRefer to this checklist of steps as you
7、 rewrite this paragraph.1.Describe the person in general terms.(Topic Sentence)2.Follow“Top to Bottom”order3.Tell a little bit about the persons clothes.4.Round it off with a general statement.Hes not very tall,a bit shorter than me,but he has strong muscle that enable him to run fast,so he leaves m
8、e an impression that he might be strong and good at sports.The Original Versionlack topic sentencelack adequate detailsAn Improved VersionGeneral impression:He is a nice-looking boy,average-height.Details:He has softly waving black hair and friendly eyes and a pleasant smile.His white school uniform
9、 is usually as clean as snow.He appears to be so fit that it reminds me of his talents in sports.Brief conclusion:The more you know about him,the more charming you feel he is.How to describe a persons personality and behavior?Read paragraphs 3-4 of the sample essay and think:1.What kind of person is
10、 he?What makes you think so?2.What supporting details does the writer use?Are they vivid and lively?Why?ChecklistThe process of describing a persons personality and behavior.1.Does the author briefly introduce the persons main personalities in the topic sentence?2.Do all the details work together to
11、 support main personalities in the topic sentence?3.Is there any details irrelevant to the topic sentence?General impression(What):Besides his outstanding appearance,Cary strikes me more as an all-round and diligent person.TellHe is not only good at sports,such as football,basketball,etc.but also dr
12、aws very well.He works very hard all the time.ShowDontDoAs an old saying goes,success comes from hard work.He makes use of any time and chance to improve his painting skills.When he is absorbed in painting,nothing can make him distracted.How to describe a persons personality and behavior?Not only do
13、es he amazes us with his good performance in school sports meeting but he is also good at painting.His works are spoken highly of by both his teachers and some famous painters.An Improved Version Besides his outstanding appearance,Cary strikes me more as an all-round and diligent person.Not only doe
14、s he amazes us with his good performance in school sports meeting but he is also good at painting.His works are spoken highly of by both his teachers and some famous painters.As an old saying goes,success comes from hard work.He makes use of any time and chance to improve his painting skills.When he
15、 is absorbed in painting,nothing can make him distracted.Dont tell;Do show.How to conclude the essay instead of just leaving off?What do we say in a conclusion of an essay?The ways to conclude an essay:End with+a summary and final thoughta prediction or recommendationa thought-provoking quotation/qu
16、estionHow to conclude the essay instead of just leaving off?An Improved Version Now my classmate is preparing for his art exam with other students with similar goals.I hope he will realize his dream of being admitted by his ideal university and I am looking forward to the day when he comes back.Befo
17、re you start to revise your own essay,ask these questions:Description ChecklistAbout Unity Does my essay have a clearly stated thesis,including a dominant impression?Have I eliminated or rewritten irrelevant material?About Support Have I provided rich,specific details for each supporting point?About Organization Do I have an interesting introduction,an effective body and a solid conclusion?Write the second draft according to what weve learned today.
