1、 At the end of this class,you will be able to:1.identify problems related to supporting details,cohesion&coherence（衔接与连（衔接与连贯）贯）,words and sentence variety in a passage;2.know how to improve a passage by adding details,making it more cohesive and coherent and varying the language;3.improve a passage
2、 with some problems.Structure Content Language Three parts Topic sentences Key points Supporting details Correct,cohesive and coherent(衔接衔接连贯连贯),varied does not have enough supporting details for each key point;is not cohesive or coherent(衔接连贯衔接连贯)does not have varied language(dull and repetitive重复的
3、重复的)How to add supporting details？Work in groups,compare the sentences and summarize the ways to add supporting details.To make the sentences longer and more specific,we can:1.use specific words 2.give examples 3.explain reasons 4.give facts as evidence (1)I hate the bad weather today.(2)My father i
4、s a warm-hearted man.(3)Square dancing is becoming more and more popular in China.How to make your passage cohesive and coherent？Work in groups,compare the sentences and summarize the ways to make the passage more cohesive and coherent.To make the language more cohesive and coherent,we:1.can use tra
5、nsitions（衔接词、短语）（衔接词、短语）2.must pay attention to the logical relationship 3.should make sure the topic is consistent Online courses have some advantages.They are convenient,because you can learn something that cannot be gained in classroom.They have disadvantages,too.Many things have disadvantages,so
6、 we should take them seriously.How to vary the language？Work in groups,compare the sentences and summarize the ways to vary the language in a passage.To avoid dull and repetitive language,we can use:1.pronouns 2.synonyms 3.different sentence patterns Doing sports is a useful way to reduce stress.Doi
7、ng sports helps you forget the trouble and makes you refreshed.Talking with your friends is also a useful way to reduce stress.1.Read the passage,find out the possible problems and decide what kind of problems they are.lacks supporting details is not cohesive or coherent the language is repetitive a
8、nd dull2.Improve the passage3.Discuss in groups and collect your ideas.1.Share what you have improved.2.Explain the reasons why your improve it in this way.假定假定你是李华，你校学生会刚刚举办了你是李华，你校学生会刚刚举办了“跳蚤市场（跳蚤市场（flea market）”活动。你的外国活动。你的外国笔友笔友Jenny对此很感兴趣，于是写邮件向你了解对此很感兴趣，于是写邮件向你了解基本情况。请你给她写一封回信，简要介绍这基本情况。请你给她写一封回信，简要介绍这次活动。要点如下：次活动。要点如下：1.活动的目的和内容；活动的目的和内容；2.你的心得体会。你的心得体会。注意：注意：100词左右。词左右。1.Write a passage.2.Find a partner and peer-edit（同伴互改）（同伴互改）the passage youve written.
