1、10 月 考读 后 续 写Steps步骤：步骤： AReadingBPredictingCWritingcharactersplotthemesort outkey informationproper languageuJack -uLinda - Jacks wife need money for operation a clerk at the local bank plan a theft (n偷盗偷盗)How did Jack steal? Did he succeed?The next day, he went to work as usual. Everything seemed
2、normal: he joked with his workmates and helped his clients as he always did. But no one noticed that he had brought a bigger suitcase to work, instead of the small one he always carried. At 5:00 pm, the bank closed, and the clerks and the guards had all gone home. However, at that moment, Jack was i
3、n the bathroom, and the guards didnt notice him, of course. When the noises coming from the street were replaced by silence and everything turned dark, Jack came out from the bathroom. He first cut the lines of the alarms and monitors with tools from his new suitcase. He was all too familiar with th
4、e equipment since he had been working there for 8 years and had been studying the security system for the past 30 days. Using a special key and some other tools, he then easily opened the doors of the safes. The banks security system wasnt very good, which allowed Jack to take a lot of money. Severa
5、l minutes later, Jack left the bank with a heavy bag filled with money. How did Jack steal? Did he succeed?The next day, he went to work as usual. Everything seemed normal: he joked with his workmates and helped his clients as he always did. But no one noticed that he had brought a bigger suitcase t
6、o work, instead of the small one he always carried. At 5:00 pm, the bank closed, and the clerks and the guards had all gone home. However, at that moment, Jack was in the bathroom, and the guards didnt notice him, of course. When the noises coming from the street were replaced by silence and everyth
7、ing turned dark, Jack came out from the bathroom. He first cut the lines of the alarms and monitors with tools from his new suitcase. He was all too familiar with the equipment since he had been working there for 8 years and had been studying the security system for the past 30 days. Using a special
8、 key and some other tools, he then easily opened the doors of the safes. The banks security system wasnt very good, which allowed Jack to take a lot of money. Several minutes later, Jack left the bank with a heavy bag filled with money. uWith full preparation, Jack managed to steal a lot of money wi
9、thout being noticed.6wife; money; operation; suffering; the bank; theft; suitcase; the clerks; the guards; thesecurity systemsort out characters:place:others:wifethe bank; money; operation; suffering the clerks; the guards; the security system; theft; suitcase 7Paragraph1:After Jack had been gone fr
10、om the bank for a while, the alarms (警报器警报器)began to ring. Was Jack caught immediately?not very likely What would happen after the alarms rang?The theft caused great attention from people. What would Jack do ?8Paragraph 2:But the most unlucky man was the manager of the bank, an old man. Why was he t
11、he most unlucky man? As a manager of the bank, what would happen to him? be to blame; be removed from the position How did Jack feel? ashamed; guilty Whats the result?Jacktell the truth; be punished Linda?Jack:Jack:work as usualfelt guilty tell the truthbe punishedmanager:manager:be to blamebe remov
12、ed from/be fired Linda:Linda:be saved / die存在问题逻辑混乱，与上文不符脑洞乱开-Para.2，无视首句话信息人物关系不明，节外生枝缺乏常识无视法制个别关键词理解不到位-alarm,manager,unlucky语言表达不清几句话说不到重点；情节主线不清， 顺序混乱；语言错误影响整体表达u未明确说明manager的不幸结果uJack心安理得逃脱法网，不符合价值观u Jack按理已经离开一段时间了，与上文不符u 情节基本清楚，符合基本逻辑，语言虽有错误，尚不影响整体表达。Paragraph 1: After Jack had been gone from
13、 the bank for a while, the alarms began to ring. The police arrived at the bank very quickly, only to find no one there. The next day was a really special day for the town, which was filled with newspaper and TV reporters covering the strange theft. The clerks at the bank were busy discussing the ca
14、se, of course, including Jack. The police could only promise to catch the thieves as soon as possible, even though no clues had been found yet. Paragraph 2: But the most unlucky man was the manager of the bank, an old man. He seemed to be the only person to blame and was removed from his position. At last, with enough money for her operation, Jacks wife was saved. However, Jack felt guilty about the manager of the bank. He could not forget what he had done to the old man. His guilt deepened as time went by. Finally, he turned himself in to the police and accepted his punishment.
