1、 中考英语书面表达（中考英语书面表达（20分）评分标准分）评分标准四档评分：四档评分：第一档：第一档：符合符合题目要求，内容完整，运用较多的语法结题目要求，内容完整，运用较多的语法结构，有效使用语言连接成分，具有较强的语言表达能力，构，有效使用语言连接成分，具有较强的语言表达能力，语言生动无误，层次结构清晰。（语言生动无误，层次结构清晰。（1720分）分）第二档：基本第二档：基本符合符合题目要求，内容较为完整，层次结构较题目要求，内容较为完整，层次结构较清晰，表达较清楚，语言有少量错误（清晰，表达较清楚，语言有少量错误（1116分分）第三档：部分内容第三档：部分内容符合符合题目要求，内容不够完
2、整，层次结题目要求，内容不够完整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言有较多错误（构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言有较多错误（510分）分）第四档：内容不第四档：内容不符合符合题目要求，表达不清楚，或照抄，拼题目要求，表达不清楚，或照抄，拼凑几个词语（凑几个词语（14分）分）SkillsSkills IX.书面表达。（书面表达。（18分）分）在过去的日子里，我们曾经欢笑，也曾经哭泣在过去的日子里，我们曾经欢笑，也曾经哭泣照片，或将照片，或将这些精彩定格，或勾起你对往事的回忆。某英语网站向你发出邀这些精彩定格，或勾起你对往事的回忆。某英语网站向你发出邀请，请你按要求用英语写一篇文章，分享你照片背后
3、的故事。请，请你按要求用英语写一篇文章，分享你照片背后的故事。要求：要求：1.故事必须原创；故事必须原创；2.80-120词，开头已给出，不计入总词数；词，开头已给出，不计入总词数；3.文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。参考要点：参考要点：1.描述你的照片描述你的照片(时间，地点，人物时间，地点，人物)；2.分享你的故事分享你的故事(起因，经过，结果起因，经过，结果)；3.谈谈你的感受谈谈你的感受(感动，怀念，影响感动，怀念，影响)。This is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,_
4、This is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,I was in hospital.It is 7 oclock pm,the tall boy is help me with my English.In the morning,he play football with my classmates happly on the playground.Sudenly I felt down and hurt myself.He have to stay in hospital for two month.I very worry m
5、y study.My friend came see me.He told me dont worry.He taught my English every day.I was moving.What do you think of the writing?8waswas helping I playedI hadworriedExamine the topic 审题审题Step 1It is the footstone(基石基石)of a perfect writing.仔细审题仔细审题（方向盘）（方向盘）人称人称 (一人称）一人称）时态（过去时）时态（过去时）体裁（记叙文）体裁（记叙文）审
6、内容审内容：确定基本要素确定基本要素:5W1H:5W1H when where whowhywhathowThis is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,I was in hospital.It was 7 oclock pm,the tall boy was helping me with my English.In the morning,I played football with my classmates happly on the playground.Sudenly I felt down and hurt myse
7、lf.I had to stay in hospital for about two month.I very worried my study.My friend came see me.He told me dont worry.He taught my English every day.I was moving.10Better the layout(布局布局)Step 2 A better layout can make the writing more clear.Basiclayout基本基本结构结构 Paragraph1Paragraph 2when where who cau
8、se process resultParagraph 3Introduction引入引入details细节细节conclusion总结总结 Para.3 conclusion Para.2 details Put the writing into a better Put the writing into a better layout.layout.Para.1 introduction This is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,I was in hospital.It was 7 oclock pm,the tall b
9、oy was helping me with my English.In the morning,I played football with my classmates happly on the playground.Sudenly I felt down and hurt myself.I had to stay in hospital for about two month and I very worried my study.My friend came see me.He told me dont worry.He taught me every day.I was movig.
10、Enlarge 扩写扩写Step 3 Enlarging makes the writing much richer .(一一).).单个的词单个的词短语（修饰语短语（修饰语+名词动词名词动词+宾语宾语/副副)a boy-a a boy-a tall and strong tall and strong boyboyhelp me-help me help me-help me with my study with my study carefullycarefully(二二).).形成基本句式单位形成基本句式单位 Who did what(Who did what(短语变句短语变句子子)A
11、A tall and strong tall and strong boy boy was helpingwas helping me me with my Englishwith my English carefully in the hospital.carefully in the hospital.(三三).).组句成段，连段成文组句成段，连段成文Para.3 conclusion Para.2 details Put the writing into a better Put the writing into a better layout.layout.Para.1 introdu
12、ction This is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,I was in hospital.It was 7 oclock pm,the tall boy was helping me with my English.In the morning,I played football with my classmates happly on the playground.Sudenly I felt down and hurt myself.I had to stay in hospital for about two mont
13、h and I very worried my study.My friend came see me.He told me dont worry.He taught me every day.I was movig.It happened to me 3 years ago.I always think of it.And I thank him very much.I should learn from him.12The right grammarStep 4 Grammar plays a very important role in English writing!Look for
14、the grammatical mistakes This is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,I was in hospital.It was 7 oclock pm,the tall boy was help me with my English in a hospital.In the morning,I played football with my classmates happly on the playground.Sudenly I felt down and hurt myself.I had to stay
15、in hospital for about two month.I very worried my study .My friend came see me.He told me dont worry.He taught me English every day.I was moving.It happened to me 3 years ago.I always think of it.And I thank him very much.I should learn from him.ahelpinghappilysuddenlymonthsmovedfellworried aboutver
16、y muchtonot to15Common mistakes in grammar 常见语法错误常见语法错误1.拼写错误拼写错误2.名词单复数问题名词单复数问题3.动词动词，介词、，介词、冠词冠词 乱用乱用4.代词的误用代词的误用 5.前后不前后不一致一致6.逻辑不清逻辑不清Better vocabulary(词汇词汇),phrases and sentencesStep 5 They can make the writing more vivid(生动的生动的),more meaningful andmore attractive.我我希望你能帮助我。希望你能帮助我。A.I hope yo
17、u can help me.B.I look forward to your help.How can we better the vocabulary?Wonderful phrases(短语短语)can be used instead of common words.Turn the Turn the underlined phrases underlined phrases into better ones.into better ones.1.There are some tears in my eyes.2.I take pride in him.I him.My eyes tear
18、s.am proud of are full of A.Learning English is interesting,I think.B.I find_ really_ to learn English.C._ interesting for me_ _English.How can we better the sentences?Better sentence patterns can be used to improve the writing.itinteresting Itstolearn1.I was moved.There were some tears in my eyes.I
19、 was _ moved _ there were some tears in my eyes.2.They read aloud,we read aloud too._ they _ we read aloud.Linking words(连接词连接词).Simple sentences can be put into complex sentences(复合句复合句)for better.sothatBoth and1.I have some suggestions._,_,_,(表顺序表顺序)2.Tom didnt like math._,he liked English.(表转折对比表
20、转折对比)FirstSecondThirdHoweverA better logic can make readers have a better understanding of the writing.Add inter languages(加过渡词）加过渡词）The better composition:This is a photo that is very special to me.In the photo,I was in hospital.It was 7 oclock pm,a tall boy was helping me with my English in a hosp
21、ital.I played football with my classmates happily on the playground.Suddenly I fell down and hurt myself.I had to stay in hospital for about two months I was very worried about my study.my friend who is Tom came to see me.When he knew about that,he said he would help me with my study.he taught me ev
22、ery day.,I didnt fall behind the other students.I was my eyes tears.I always think of it.I learn from him.The photo reminded me of my bad day.On a sunny morning,Soand ThenFrom then on,carefullyThanks to Tomso moved that were filled with Although 3 years has passed since it happened to me,should No m
23、atter when we meet people in trouble,we should help them because the rose is in her hand,the flavor is in mine.19 卷面整洁不一定加分，卷面潦草一定要扣分！Step 6 Copy 书面书面表达表达六步六步法法zxxkwSummary审审（_ ,_ ,_）人称人称时态时态体裁体裁列列（_ _）列提纲列提纲分段落分段落扩扩（_ ）扩文章扩文章改改（_ ）改错误改错误美美（_ ）美语句美语句抄抄（_ ）抄美文抄美文 Practice makes perfect.Never forget why you started and your mission can be accomplished.不忘初心，方得始终不忘初心，方得始终
