1、2020 年新高考山东卷读后续写精深分析与拓展年新高考山东卷读后续写精深分析与拓展 【真题再现真题再现】 The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs. M
2、eredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before
3、. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother.
4、He wants very much to earn some money, but I dont see what he can do.” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money.” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist t
5、hem.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).” The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,”
6、 said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.” 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, to
7、o. With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 主题语境：人与社会 （社会服务与人际沟通） 语篇类型：记叙文（故事） 研读语篇： 读后续写是一种将阅读和写作紧密结合的考查形式。 读后续写主要考查学生把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力语言运用的准确性和丰富性对语言结构的 把控能力创造性思维能力。由此可见，对文本的深度解读非常重要。 给定材料是一个叙事类文本，共 8 段，325 词。 【What】该材料讲述了在经济衰退的大环境下，小镇上很多人失业。善良的 Meredith 太太热心帮助他人。其中有 一家三口，丈夫卧
8、病在床，妻子因要照顾他无法外出挣钱。他们的儿子 Bernard 想帮助维持生活却不知该做什么。 Meredith 太太的三个孩子 Clara，Harry 和 John 从母亲那得知此情况后，非常想帮助小男孩，John 想出一个好主意。 他们决定把家里的那盒玉米做成爆米花，再让 Bernard 拿到社区售卖。 第一段介绍了故事背景，第二段描述了 Meredith 太太的友善和关爱他人。第三、四段讲述了小男孩 Bernard 一 家的困境，最后四段则是三个孩子的积极回应去帮助 Bernard。 Who(人物)：Mrs. Meredith, Bernard, Bernards parents, Cl
9、ara, Harry, John Where（地点）：a small community What(事件)：Mrs. Merediths children want to assist the boy Bernard in need. Why(起因)：With Berbnards father sick in bed, his mother was unable to go out to work. Bernard wanted to do something to support his family. 【Why】该】该材料的价值取向是传播爱与友善。 【How】作为故事类记叙文，该材料通过事
10、件的起承转合不断推动情节发展。文本包含两条主线，明线是 Meredith 的 3 个孩子尽力帮助 Bernard，暗线是两家人的心理和情感线：Meredith 一家助人的快乐，Bernard 一家受助的感激。 【内容分析】【内容分析】 已知文章内容：Meredith 一家人住在一个小社区，由于经济衰退，城里一些人失业了。许多家庭都在努力维持 生计。人们试图互相帮助以应对困境。Mrs. Meredith 是个善良体贴的人，她拜访贫穷的人，给他们带食物和药品。 在她拜访过一个家庭后（这个家里丈夫卧病在床，妻子要照顾他而不能出去工作，还有一个叫伯纳德的小儿子）， 她把这个家庭的情况告诉了孩子们，并希
11、望他们去见见那个叫伯纳德的小男孩。Mrs. Meredith 看出伯纳德很想赚钱 帮助他的妈妈， 但是不知道他能做什么， 或许孩子们可以想出什么办法来帮他。 后来孩子们想到了用玉米做爆米花， 让伯纳德在社区卖爆米花的主意。 可续写线索：Mrs. Meredith 会觉得孩子们的主意怎么样？他们接下来会怎么做？伯纳德通过卖爆米花赚钱了 吗？ 1. 第一段所给首句“When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too.”这一句是故事 继续发展的关键点，可从 Mrs. Meredith 同意约翰的主意后，
12、孩子们是如何做的扩展开去，可以写孩子们是如何分工 的，他们都做了什么，Mrs. Meredith 帮他们做了什么，无论从什么角度拓展，都要注意与续写第二段首句呼应。 2. 第二段所给首句 “With everything ready. Bernard started out on his new business.” 这一句与前文 Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.呼应，可以从伯纳德卖出爆米花后的感受，以及 Mrs. Meredith 的孩子们帮助伯纳德 后的感受拓展。 【易错分析】【易错分析】 1. 审题失误 这篇文章的
13、主题应该体现“互助、感恩” ，但是个别同学写成了赞扬小男孩的努力养家。 2. 细节失误 文章中提到了叔叔送了一大箱子玉米，续写时有同学又写到去商店买玉米，信息不对称。还有上文提到是 take it around to the houses and sell it挨家挨户卖， 但是下文有同学写到了去广场上卖， 去富人区 （somewhere richer） 卖图片图片 3. 考虑不周全 续写第一段开头 “妈妈也认为是个好主意” ， 接下来应该写什么？好多同学看到了续写第二段的 with everything ready，断定上文应该写准备爆爆米花过程，这 absolutely right。但是，
14、要不要提前去找 Bernard 一家沟通呢？不管 人家同不同意就开始各种准备，是不是有点不尊重对方的感觉？ 4. 时态错误 这是最普遍的错误。如： She thought its a good idea.（误） She thought it was a good idea. （正） 【参考构思】【参考构思】 After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is s
15、uffering so much.” have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成完成) .” 续写第一段的段首语提到 Mrs. Meredith 也同意 John 的主意，那接下来就会涉及到把计划告诉 Bernard 一家、 他们有什么反应、以及如何制作爆米花。 第二段段首语提到Bernard开始他的新营生， 接下来就涉及到爆米花卖给谁、 别人对Bernard的反应、 以及Bernard 的感受。（new business 不一定就是指卖爆米花，不同学生有不同思路） 有了剧情， 有了主题， 再根据续写两段给的第一句话 When Mrs
16、. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one,too. 和 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 我们知道Bernard 应该在众人的帮助之 下，批发了爆米花，遇到了没有成本，于是 Clara, Harry, John 应该会借钱给 Bernard 去进口爆米花，然后 Bernard 售出去了自己的爆米花给邻居们， 邻居们根据材料中爱的主旨， 应该是踊跃购买， 支持Bernard的爆米花事业。 Bernard 赚了钱，还清了 C
17、lara, Harry, John 的钱，并且用盈余的钱来补贴家用，一家人对于 Mrs. Meredith, Clara, Harry, John 还有邻里的帮助非常感动。总之续写要体现温情，互助，有尊严，自立自强，这些积极的元素。 值得注意的是，根据续写第二段的 with everything ready,我们知道续写第一段应该是 Bernard 在做准备工作，而 且他的准备工作应该是基于 Clara, Harry,John 的帮助 话题激活词汇： 情感：happy，excited，delighted，gratitude，thankful，expect 动作：smile，laugh，help
18、，encourage 短语结构：send sb，agree to，happy with，gratitude to sb/for sth，encourage sb to do sth，help sb with sth，be busy doing sth，try ones best to do sth，carry out 【范文参考与欣赏】【范文参考与欣赏】 例文例文 1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of the idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Then Mrs. Meredith searched the internet
19、 and ordered a household popcorn machine. After that, Mrs. Meredith, together with her three children, paid another visit to the family and told them about the popcorn plan. Needless to say, they were deeply moved, especially Bernard who finally found a way to make money for his family. A few days l
20、ater, the machine was delivered to Mrs. Merediths doorstep. And it wasnt long before they got the hang of using the machine to make popcorn. With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. Although it was a hard time and things were tight for everybody, Bernards business worked out q
21、uite well. He carried the popcorn on his small bike, going from door to door to sell it. People were surprised to see such a little, poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at their doors, but eventually almost all of them would buy a bag or two. It is love that makes the world go round and Bernard felt
22、it deep in his little heart. 例文例文 2 When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Then she said, “You may send him every Saturday morning, if you will pop the corn for him yourselves. John, will you agree to take charge of the work?” “Indeed, I will,” replied John, and
23、he kept his word. Very soon the children were busy popping the corn, while their mother went out to buy the paper bags. When she came back, she brought Bernard with her. The corn was all popped, and the paper bags were filled and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived. With everything ready, Be
24、rnard started out on his new business. And much sooner than could be expected, he returned with an empty basket. Never had he earned so much money before in his life. When he found that it was all to be his, he was so delighted that he could hardly speak, but his bright smiling face spoke for him. P
25、eople began to watch for the “little pop-corn boy”, and every week he had at least fifty cents to take home, and often more. All this was because of Johns bright idea, and the way he carried it out. 例文例文 3 When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. When the three sib
26、lings called on Bernard and shared the big project with the poorboy, Bernards face lit up but quickly his excitement faded. “Thank you for your big box of corn, but I dont have a single penny to buy popcorn and paper bags.” Bernard sighed heavily. Smiling slyly, John produced 50 dollars, which was c
27、ontributed together by Clara and Harry. Excitement returned to Bernards face as he murmured a sincere thank you with a trembling voice. With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. With the big box hanging around his neck, Bernard become the No. 1 popcorn boy in the neighborhood.
28、The three siblings would help him with filling and making changes. Together, they sold 500 portions in a single day as the neighbors still showed support despite their own poverty. By the end of the day, Bernards corn box was emptied but his cash pot was full of notes and coins.Yet, he knew, from th
29、e bottom of his heart, that it was not just money, but also love, sacrifice and fraternity, that filled his pot. 续写技能训练续写技能训练 I received an urgent call from my aunt.“Turn on the TV.Grannys on the Channel 10 news.”It turned out that Granny had made a sandwich run for her office and was stopped at a r
30、ed light downtown.She had the window rolled down to enjoy the breeze when a man rushed up to the drivers side window,intending to carjack(劫车)her. Now,what the would-be carjacker couldnt have known was that this woman simply wasnt “a granny”.This was Nancy Johnson the same woman who owned and lived o
31、n a Texas cattle farm,drove her own tractors,and dug her own post holes to lay fence.The week before,she had shot a rattlesnake and chopped off its head with a shovel.She was the proud owner of the new minivan(小型货车) she was driving.In other words,she was not your normal kind of granny. The carjacker
32、 leaned into the open window,one hand stuffed in his pocket,and said,“Get out of this car.I have a gun,and I will shoot you.” A statement like that would have terrified anyone else.Instead,Granny saw it as a challenge.“If you really had a gun in your pocket,you would have pulled it out and led with
33、that first,” she shouted at him,apparently unworried. She was right.The criminal didnt have a gun.He instead reached into the window,grabbed her,and tried to pull her out of the van.He pulled open the door,wildly catching Grannys arms.Granny leaned her shoulder inside to press the horn(喇叭) and start
34、ed yelling to make people around notice what was happening.With the door now open,she held tight the steering wheel with one arm and started kicking the man anywhere her foot could make contact.This tall woman had quite a reach. 注意:续写词数应为 150 左右。 After a well-placed kick,the man was done,and attempt
35、ed to release her and run. Later,we asked,“Granny,dont you realize you could have got yourself killed?” 参考范文 After a well-placed kick,the man was done,and attempted to release her and run.But Granny wouldnt stand for that.It was now her turn to grab him.Her hands were made strong from hours and hour
36、s of farm work.That poor fool didnt have a chance.She shouted for help to bystanders,and they rushed to her aid.With Granny leading the charge,a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk,holding him there until the police came.A silver-haired woman had just made a citizens
37、arrest. Later,we asked,“Granny,dont you realize you could have got yourself killed?”Grannys answer was surprisingly amusing and simple,“I wasnt scared of that little idiot.Id had my brand-new van for less than two days and a pack of good sandwiches for my office.And there was no way he was going to get either of those!” But we all learned an important lesson from her that daythe same lesson that had been building through the years.She encouraged us to push boundaries and expectations.But even more so,she taught us fearlessness.
