1、1 上海黄浦区上海黄浦区 2016-2020 年五年高考二模英语试题汇编年五年高考二模英语试题汇编-作文作文专题专题 2020届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题 VI. Guided Writing 66.Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 你校学生会正开展主题为“The first job I want to take”的英语征文比赛，请你撰文参加（文中请不要出现 真实的校名和人名
2、） 。你的征文内容需包括： 1.离开校园、步入社会后，你想从事的第一份职业是什么； 2.你想从事这份职业的原因（可从个人特点、职业价值等方面进行阐述） 。 _ _ _ 【答案】The first job I want to take after graduation from college is a doctor. The reasons are as follows. Firstly, the new coronavirus has brought suffering and misfortune to many people all over the world, which gives
3、 me the idea of being a doctor. I hope to contribute to peoples health in the future. Secondly, I am a person who likes to challenge myself. Although it is very hard to study medicine, I like the challenges it brings and make great efforts to study it well. Thirdly, as a doctor, I can eliminate the
4、pain and relieve the discomfort of others, which will bring me a sense of accomplishment. In summary, being a doctor can realize my dream. I will study hard, enter a good medical university, continue to practice and strive to become an excellent doctor. 【解析】 【分析】 2 本篇书面表达是一篇征文。你校学生会正开展主题为“The first
5、job I want to take”的英语征文比赛，请你 撰文参加。 【详解】这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来。动笔前，一定要认真分析 要点，不能遗漏要点：1.离开校园、步入社会后，你想从事的第一份职业是什么；2.你想从事这份职业的 原因（可从个人特点、职业价值等方面进行阐述） 。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻 辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。根 据写作要点我们可以初步确定文章可能使用到的词汇和短语及句子有：The first job I want to take after graduat
6、ion from college is a doctor. The reasons are as follows. the new coronavirus，contribute to peoples health in the future， challenge myself， make great efforts， eliminate the pain and relieve the discomfort of others， a sense of accomplishment，Being a doctor can realize my dream. study hard，enter a g
7、ood medical university， strive to become an excellent doctor。 可以使用的衔接词： 1.表文章结构顺序： First of all， Firstly/First， Secondly/Second And then，Finally，In the end，At last，Above all。2.表并列补充关系：What is more，Besides，Moreover， Furthermore，In addition，as well as，not onlybut (also)。通过词汇铺垫，我们就很容易地行文了，文章写 完之后要检查文中是
8、否存在拼写或语法错误。 【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。 作者在范文中使用了主从复合句：Firstly, the new coronavirus has brought suffering and misfortune to many people all over the world, which gives me the idea of being a doctor. Thirdly, as a doctor, I can eliminate the pain and relieve the discomfort of other
9、s, which will bring me a sense of accomplishment.这两句话运用了 which引导的非 限制性定语从句；Although it is very hard to study medicine, I like the challenges it brings and make great efforts to study it well. 这句话运用了 although 引导的让步状语从句。 使用了一些固定词组， 如： as follows， contribute to，make great efforts，realize my dream。全文中没有
10、中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。 另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。 2019届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题 VI. Guided Writing 76.Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假如你是明启中学的高三学生李华，你的朋友李楠想在高考结束后报班学习驾驶或者第二外语，他发邮件 3 向你询问有没有兴趣一起学习，请给他回复一封电子邮件，
11、必须包括以下内容: 你愿意一起报班学习，并告知感兴趣的内容，二选一； 阐述你选择的理由。 (注意:文中请不要出现真实的校名人名) _ _ _ _ 【答案】In the E-mail, you mentioned you want to sign up for class to learn driving or a second foreign language after the college entrance examination, and asked me whether I am interested in learning it together. I think learning
12、 to drive is good in such a long vacation. With the development of society, everyone will have their own car so that its necessary for us to drive cars. If we learn to driving cars in the holidays, we can practise driving every day, which is much faster than only in your spare time. Next knowing tha
13、t we are able to drive cars makes us more confident. Whats more, the ability to drive brings us independence and convenience, which means you can go wherever and whenever you want. My dear friend , do you think so? I am looking forward to receiving your apply! Yours, Li Hua 【解析】 【分析】 本文为应用文。你的朋友李楠想在
14、高考结束后报班学习驾驶或者第二外语，他发邮件向你询问有没有兴趣 一起学习，你给他回复一封电子邮件，内容包括你愿意一起报班学习，并阐述你选择的理由。 【详解】本文为邮件，即书信体。书信体一般包括三个部分。第一部分是写信的目的。即我愿意和你一起 4 学驾驶。第二部分叙述学驾驶的好处。可以从以下几个方面写，如可每天练习开车，学的快。开车让我们 更自信。会带来了独立和便利等。最后一部分写期待对方的回信。写作时多用高级词汇，句式相对要灵活 些，单句与复句相结合。在列举理由时要用顺序连词，上下文意思连贯。同时注意要求的字数，不要太多 也不要太少。 【点睛】本文符合书信体的要求，文中运用了一引起较高级的词汇
15、如 sign up for; be interested in; practise doing sth.; the ability to do; spare time; whats more 等。句式相对灵活多样，有一些较高级的句式，如宾语 从句 asked me whether I am interested in learning it together； 状语从句 everyone will have their own car so that its necessary for us to drive cars；定语从句 we can practise driving every da
16、y, which is much faster than only in your spare time；非谓语 knowing that we are able to drive cars makes us more confident；定语从句中有一个状语从 句 the ability to drive brings us independence and convenience, which means you can go wherever and whenever you want 等，这些都彰显了文章的档次。 2018届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题 V
17、I. Guided Writing 76.Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假设你是社区“老年之家”志愿者协会的负责人李明，近期准备组织老人们到公园踏春赏花。请就此活动写 一份申请报告给社区相关负责人(申请报告中请不要出现真实的校名和人名)。你的申请报告需包括: 1. 此次活动的主旨和安排； 2. 需要社区提供的支持(如人员、经费等)。 _ _ _ 【答案】 In order to promote the
18、traditional virtue of respecting the old and loving the young of the Chinese nation and enrich the life of the elderly, our volunteer association of home for the elderly are going to take the elderly to enjoy the spring flowers this weekend. After the discussion, we choose Nanhu Park as our destinat
19、ion, which has a picturesque scenery and attracts a large number of tourists every day. Whats more, it is close to our 5 community and it is convenient for us to for us to get there. As there are some elderly people in our community who are too old to walk far, we decide to rent several wheelchairs
20、and push them there to enjoy the flowers, but we are short of money, so we hope that our community can provide some financial support to pay for the cost of renting wheelchairs. I would appreciate it if we can get your approval. 【解析】 【分析】 本篇书面表达是提纲类作文，要求写一封申请报告。 【详解】第 1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一封申请报告：假设你是社区“老年
21、之家”志愿者协会的负责 人李明， 近期准备组织老人们到公园踏春赏花。 请就此活动写一份申请报告给社区相关负责人(申请报告中 请不要出现真实的校名和人名)。你的申请报告需包括:1. 此次活动的主旨和安排；2. 需要社区提供的支持 (如人员、经费等)。时态应为一般现在时。 第 2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组） ，如：traditional virtue（传统美德） ，volunteer association（志愿 者协会） ，picturesque（风景如画的） ，scenery（景色） ，attract（吸引） ，enrich（使丰富） ，rent（租用） ， wheelchair（轮椅）
22、 ，financial support（资金支持）及 convenient（方便的）等。 第 3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。 第 4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的 整洁美观。 【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有 in order to（为了） ，a large number of（大量） ，be close to（离近） ，be short of (不足)，tooto（太 而不能）以及 pay for（为付钱） ，而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“A
23、fter the discussion, we choose Nanhu Park as our destination, which has a picturesque scenery and attracts a large number of tourists every day.” 定语从句和原因状语从句“As there are some elderly people in our community who are too old to walk far, we decide to rent several wheelchairs and push them there to en
24、joy the flowers”宾语从句“so we hope that our community can provide some financial support to pay for the cost of renting wheelchairs.”形式主语 it is convenient for us to for us to get there”形式宾语“I would appreciate it if we can get your. approval.”全文没有语法错误，上 6 下句转换自然流畅。 2017届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题 VI.
25、 Guided Writing 76. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 日前， 某寄宿制中学 （boarding school） 明文禁止学生叫外卖 （order take-away food） ， 学生中议论纷纷。 假设你是学生会主席李明，请代表全校同学给校长写一封信，信中内容包括： 1）向校方反馈同学们对此规定的看法。 2）向校方提出的意见和建议。 （文中不得出现考生姓名、学校等任何真实信息） 【答案
26、】Dear Respectable Principal, On behalf of all students in our school, Im writing to you about the school ban on ordering take-away food imposed by our school recently. We all agree that the ban on take-away food is reasonable. The quality of take-away food is not reliable and might do harm to our he
27、alth, so this ban is aimed at protecting our health and helping us form a good eating habit. Meanwhile, there are still some problems even if we dont order take-away food. We sincerely hope our school will improve the service of the school canteen. Basically, there is a variety of food in our school
28、 canteen and the taste is acceptable. But it is super-crowded during lunch break, and many of us have to line up too long. Is it possible more windows will offer food? Whats worse, the food we can get after long-time waiting is cold in winter, which is far from satisfactory. Besides, we strongly adv
29、ise our school to offer the night-time snacks. Most students have supper before five oclock, so many of us, especially boys, feel hungry at night. Without night-time snacks, no wonder many students turn to instant noodles to satisfy our appetite at night, which is bad for health. To sum up, our scho
30、ol has made a right decision, while there is still room for improvement, which all students are looking forward to. 7 Faithfully Yours Li Ming 【解析】 本文是一篇建议信。建议信是写信人向收信人对某事提出的建议和忠告。建议信可能是写给个人，也可能 是写给某个组织或机构，信的内容要包括写信的原因，建议的内容，提出建议的理由。建议信要写得简明 扼要、目的明确、具有合理性和说服力。具体写作步骤一般是“三段式”，具体为： 第一段：表明写作意图。陈述事由，简单介绍
31、自己，注意语气。 第二段：应该首先肯定对方的优点，然后再写需要改进的地方或针对具体情况提出具体的建议或忠告。 注意千万不要让别人以为你是在投诉，而不是提建议。 第三段：对提出的建议进行总结。要注意有礼貌，使读者容易接受。 亮点分析：整体看本文内容完整，结构合理。文章有理有据，语言礼貌。连接词的运用，使文章层次 分明，思路清晰。文章复合句与简单句相结合，句式灵活，使用了状语从句，还运用了定语从句及名词从 句，介词短语等，从而增加文章的可读性。 本文第一段直接切入正题， 说明写信的原因。 第二段首先肯定此禁令。 在本段中运用了宾语从句： We all agree that the ban on t
32、ake-away food is reasonable.和一个状语从句：The quality of take-away food is not reliable and might do harm to our health, so this ban is aimed at protecting our health and helping us form a good eating habit。 简单清晰地加以肯定。然而笔锋一转，用一个连词“Meanwhile”指出了仍有一些问题。本句中运用了表示顺 序的连接词，“Basically.,. Whats worse,Besides,To su
33、m up”，详细地提出了自己的意见和建议，还让 文章错落有致。本段中语法结构句式多变。 第三段中的主要的句式如下。由“even if”引导的让步状语从句：here are still some problems even if we dont order take-away food. We sincerely hope our school will improve the service of the school canteen.。 并列句： But it is super-crowded during lunch break, and many of us have to line u
34、p too long。定语从句： the food we can get after long-time waiting is cold in winter, which is far from satisfactory。 和定语从句： , which is bad for health. 由 advise 所带的使用 should do的宾语从句：we strongly advise our school to offer the night-time snacks.由 so 引导的状语从句; Most students have supper before five oclock, so
35、many of us, especially boys, feel hungry at night.。最后一段用一个复杂句完美地做了一个总结：To sum up, our school has made a right decision, while 8 there is still room for improvement, which all students are looking forward to. 2016届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题 II. Guided Writing Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 上海迪士尼度假区(Shanghai Disney Resort)即将开幕，现正招募志愿者，假设你是李华，给招募活动的 联系人王先生写一封自荐信表达你的意愿。你的信必须包含以下内容： 1. 简述你写信的目的； 2. 介绍自己的 2 项特长或优点，以及可提供的相关的志愿者服务内容； 3. 谈谈你对志愿者活动的认识。
