1、1 上海上海区徐汇区区徐汇区 2016-2020 年五年高考二模英语试题汇编年五年高考二模英语试题汇编-书面表达书面表达专题专题 2020年年上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题 VI. Guided Writing 76.Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假设你叫王林，你的美国好友 John 来信说他最近每天晚上玩手机到深夜，导致白天没有精神且食欲不振。 他对此很担心，但又管不住自己，
2、因此写信向你求助。请你用英语给 John写一封回信，谈谈你的想法并 给他一些建议。 _ _ _ _ _ 【答案】Dear John, I am pleased to receive your letter seeking after my proposals on how to overcome the awful habit of staying up late. Therefore, I am writing to give you a helping hand. From my point of view, there are two accounts for this. For one
3、 thing, a habit is easy to form but hard to get rid of. According to the statistics, it may take a person 21 days to cultivate a habit but 90 days to get over it. For another, since mobile phones have become an indispensable part in our daily life, it is absolutely difficult to resist the tempt of i
4、t, especially for us adolescents. Here are some humble suggestions for your consideration. First and foremost, you are supposed to switch off your phone and keep your phone away from you before going to bed so that it will not attract you attention. Additionally, if I were you, I would work out prop
5、erly before going to bed to relax yourself both physically and mentally. Last but not least, it is high time you enhanced your awareness of early sleep. As a classic prover goes that early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise. 2 Whichever suggestion you will take, please pe
6、rsevere in it. Hopefully, your problem would be solved soon. Best wishes! Yours, Wang Lin 【解析】 【分析】 第一步：审题第一步：审题 体裁：应用文 时态：根据提示，时态多为一般现在时。 要求： 1. 给美国好友回信； 2. 表示对于好朋友担心，并提供可行性方案帮助他解决这一问题。 第二步：列提纲（重点词组）第二步：列提纲（重点词组） overcome the awful habit of；give you a helping hand；became an indispensable part；for y
7、our consideration； both physically and mentally 第三步：连词成句第三步：连词成句 1. How to overcome the awful habit of staying up late 2. I am writing to give you a helping hand. 3. Here are some humble suggestions for your consideration. 4. You are supposed to switch off your phone and keep your phone away from yo
8、u before going to bed so that it will not attract you attention. 3 5. It is high time you enhanced your awareness of early sleep. 第四步：连句成篇（衔接词使用）第四步：连句成篇（衔接词使用） 1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second And then, Finally, In the end, At last 2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Fu
9、rthermore, In addition As well as, not onlybut (also), including, 3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand,On the other hand Some,while others,as for, sothat 4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result 连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定
10、要规范清晰， 第五步：润色修改，注意主谓一致、单复数、冠词等语法正确使用。第五步：润色修改，注意主谓一致、单复数、冠词等语法正确使用。 【详解】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如 I am pleased to receive your letter seeking after my proposals on how to overcome the awful habit of staying up late. 运用了非谓语及宾语从句复杂句式 if I were you, I would work out properly before goin
11、g to bed to relax yourself both physically and mentally.。运用了虚拟条件句，使说辞更具礼貌性。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显 示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。 2019年年上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题 VI. Guided Writing 76.Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chine
12、se. 假设你将组织本班的毕业聚会，谈谈你的具体设想并说明理由。 内容必须包括: 1. 明确聚会将在何时，何地，以何种形式举行 2. 简述你的理由 4 (文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称) _ _ _ _ _ _ 【答案】 To celebrate our graduation and say farewell to each other, our class decide to hold a graduation party at 5 pm next Sunday in the lecture hall. On the party, our teachers and parents will
13、be invited to the party, because they have devoted and will devote a lot to our study and life. Therefore, on behalf of us, our monitor will deliver a speech to show our gratitude to them. Then, the highlight is that we will give presents to each other, such as photo albums, books, for these things
14、will symbolize our everlasting friendship and witness the years we have spent together and chased our dreams together. Im sure everyone will have fun and the wonderful party will always be in our mind. 【解析】 【分析】 本文属于说明文，介绍一次毕业晚会的大概组织过程。 【详解】本文属于说明文，介绍一次毕业晚会的大概组织过程，时态为一般将来时，人称为第一人称。关 键要点如下：将组织毕业聚会；聚会
15、时间和地点以及形式；如此设计的理由。 第二步：根据关键要点，确定关键词，如：graduation party（毕业晚会），the lecture hall（演讲大厅），5 pm next Sunday（下周日下午 5点），deliver a speech（做演讲），give presents（赠送礼物）等。 第三步：根据提示及关键词进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题以及句子结构完整。 第四步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，使之自然流畅，书写一定要规范 清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面。 5 【点睛】本篇范文结构清晰，内容完整，过渡衔接严谨自然，符合说明文的要求，其中不乏亮点句
16、型。 非谓语动词的使用 To celebrate our graduation and say farewell to each other, our class decide to hold a graduation party at 5 pm next Sunday in the lecture hall. 2018年年上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题 VI. Guided Writing 76.Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instruction
17、s given below in Chinese. 成长道路上难免遇到来自同伴的压力(peer pressure)。同伴压力可能给我们带来积极或消极的影响。请结 合自己生活中的一个具体事例, 谈谈你的体会。 注意:请勿透露本人真实姓名和学校名称。 _ _ _ _ _ _ 【答案】There is no doubt that we are faced with peer pressure every day. Peer pressure has both advantages and disadvantages, and the key is with what kind of mentalit
18、y we look at it. If we are always envious of others famous brand clothes or shoes, we will inevitably have the desire to compare ourselves, which is bad for our personal development. On the contrary, peer pressure which is from studies will motivate us to get good grades For example, when my deskmat
19、e got a better grade in the mid-term exam than me, I made up my mind to surpass him in the model exam, As a result, I made full use of time to study hard and spared no effort to prepare for the final exam. As it turned out, I did better in the final exam than him In word, peer pressure is a normal p
20、henomenon, which we cant avoid. And as long as we face it positively, it will be beneficial to our personal development. 6 【解析】 【分析】 本篇书面表达是开放性作文，要求就来自同伴的压力谈谈自己的体会。 【详解】第 1步：根据提示可知，本文要求就来自同伴的压力谈谈自己的体会：成长道路上难免遇到来自 同伴的压力(peer pressure)。同伴压力可能给我们带来积极或消极的影响。请结合自己生活中的一个具体 事例, 谈谈你的体会，时态应为一般过去时。 第 2步：根据写作要
21、求，确定关键词（组），如； peer pressure（同龄压力），mentality（心态），surpass （超过），beneficial（有益的）， motivate（激励），inevitably（不可避免地）及 compare（攀比）等。 第 3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。 第 4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的 整洁美观。 【点睛】 范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有 be faced with（面对），look at（看待），make up o
22、nes mind(下决心)，prepare for（为做准备）以及 make full use of（充分利用），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“If we are always envious of others famous brand clothes or shoes, we will inevitably have the desire to compare ourselves, which is bad for our personal development.”，“In word, peer pressure is a normal phenomenon, which we cant
23、 avoid.”及“As it turned out, I did better in the final exam than him”，状语从句 And as long as we face it positively, it will be beneficial to our personal development. ”，表语从句“and the key is with what kind of mentality we look at it.”，同位语从句 “There is no doubt that we are faced with peer pressure every day
24、.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流 畅。 2017年年上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题 VI. Guided Writing Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 7 请简单描绘图片内容，并用你生活中的一个经历来具体说明。你的文章必须包括： 1） 对图片的简单描述； 2） 对个人经历的具体描写； 3） 你当时的感受或想法。 2016年年上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题上海市徐汇区高考二模英语试题 II. Guided Writing Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假设你是李华，学校有四个社团正招募新人（如下图所示），你希望加入其中一个。请你写一篇日记， 谈谈你的想法。内容必须包括： 你希望加入的社团 选择该社团的原因 你可以为该社团做些什么 注意：请勿透露本人真实姓名和学校名称。
