1、中考作文试题分析中考作文试题分析及毕业班写作及毕业班写作教学建议教学建议毕业班写作教学建议毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作审审列列写写润润查查誊Examining and consideringOutliningWritingPolishingCheckingCopying outThe Writing Steps 2016年中考作文原题再现年中考作文原题再现 假如你是张鹏，转学去了杭州。你的好友王新来信询问你的近况，并告诉你他暑假要来看你。请根据以下提示，给王新写一封回信。 写作要点： 1.表达你收到他来信后的激动心情。 2.介绍新学校。 （1）设施：一个大操场，一
2、个图书馆。 （2）师生：友善，易于相处。 3.针对他独自乘火车来杭州提出具体建议。次要信息主要信息限制性开放性审审列列写写润润查查誊Examining and consideringOutliningWritingPolishingCheckingCopying outThe Writing Steps 什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序， 不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。 2016年中考作文原题再现年中考作文原题再现 假如你是张鹏，转学去了杭州。你的好友王新来信询问你的近
3、况，并告诉你他暑假要来看你。请根据以下提示，给王新写一封回信。 写作要点： 1.表达你收到他来信后的激动心情。 2.介绍新学校。 （1）设施：一个大操场，一个图书馆。 （2）师生：友善，易于相处。 3.针对他独自乘火车来杭州提出具体建议。次要信息主要信息限制性开放性什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序， 不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。激动，近况 操场 设施 图书馆介绍学校情况 友善 师生 易于相处 暑假来杭州，具体建议什么是列提纲？1.把通过审题所获得的信息按照内容有机地分
4、组结合。2.把分组之后的信息按照正常的思维逻辑顺序排序， 不强求分段，但建议分段。4.初步确定添加细节的位置。3.确定开放性信息的内容。WordsAPhrasesBSentencesCWriting(写)Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）1.Transitional phrases(使用过渡性词语)2.Universal sentence patterns(万能句型的使用) 3.Synonyms(同义词语的使用）4.Clauses and non-finite verbs(从句和非谓语动词的使用) 5.Different sentence patterns(不同句式的使用）Inform
5、ationInformation信息信息SpellingSpelling拼写拼写PunctuationPunctuation标点标点GrammarGrammar语法语法Checking(查)Copying out(誊)Neat writingCapital and small lettersSpellingPunctuationAfter that, check again!毕业班写作教学建议毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累1）词汇的积累2）短语及同义词组的积累3）美文，美句的积累4）话题万能句的积累Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性）
6、1.Transitional phrases(使用过渡性词语)表时间： at first; at last; in the end; then;next; after thatwhen; while; as soon as; not.untilat the same time; at times; all the time表情感： to ones surprise/joy;Luckily;Fortunately;Unluckily;UnfortunatelyPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表并列：either.or;neither.nor;both.and;not only.but
7、also表递进：besides;whats more;whats worse;also;in addition;moreover表原因：because; due to the fact that.;because of;thanks to;due toPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性) 表转折：however;but表举例：for example;for instance;such as;like; that is to say.表总结：in short;in a word;last but not least;in general;generally speaking表想法： I t
8、hink/believe.;in my opinion;from the bottom of my heart;to be honest; to tell the truth; as we knowPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表结果：so;as a result;therefore;so.that表目的：so that;in order to;in order that;so as to;for表对比：while;on the one hand;on the other hand;Each coin has two sides; prefer.to.;would rather d
9、o.than do.;prefer to do .rather than do.;prefer to do .instead of doing.Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)2.Universal sentence patterns(万能句型的使用)梦想：I will work hard to make my dream come true.I hope your dream will come true one day.时间：It takes sb some time to do.Sb spend some time (in) doing.Its time for sb to d
10、o sth.Its a waste of time to.Its.years/days since sb+V.edPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表做某事如何：Its important/necessary/useful/useless/common/interesting.(for sb) to do sth.Its a pity that.Its great fun to/sb have(has) great fun doing表某人性格如何去做某事：Its kind/friendly/nice/polite/rude/smart/foolish/generous.of sb t
11、o do sth.Its my honor/pleasure to dosth.Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)表喜爱：love;like;enjoy;be _ of;care _;be _ in;show great interest in; lose _ in;put ones heart into.表利弊：be good for;be _ to;be bad for ;be harmful to ;do _ to;.have/has great/much influence on sb;sth benefit(s) sb;sb _ from sth;affect sb;have
12、 an _ on sb3.Synonyms(同义词语的使用）fondforinterestedoneselfbeneficialharmbenefit(s)effectPolishing(如何增加文章的可读性) 表决心：make up ones mind;decide to do;make a _ to do表困难：have difficulty/_/trouble (in) doing/with sth表想要：want to do;would like to do;_ doing表准备： be/get ready for/to do;_ fordecisionproblemsfeel lik
13、epreparePolishing(如何增加文章的可读性)Friends can help you in trouble.4.Clauses and non-finite verbs(从句和非谓语动词的使用)Friends are the people who can help you when you are in trouble.You will get satisfying marks in the next exam with my suggestions, and it can make you be sure to be less and less worried before a
14、n exam.Getting satisfying marks ., you are sure to be.Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)5.Different sentence patterns(不同句式的使用）You can try to commuicate with your close friends.Why not try to communicate with your close friends./How about trying to.Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)Youve learned so hard, and it is a chance fo
15、r you to show yourself.Youve learned so hard, and isnt it a chance for you to show yourself?Im sure you are confident of overcoming your worries now.Im sure you are confident of overcoming your worries now, arent you?Polishing(如何增加文章的可读性)You should believe in yourself.Do believe in yourself.I can un
16、derstand you are very worried.I can understand how worried you are.毕业班写作教学建议毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累三.在日常的教学中加强句型的训练简单句的基本句型简单句的基本句型（1）主语）主语+系动词系动词+表语表语（2）主语）主语+不及物动词不及物动词（3）主语）主语+及物动词及物动词+宾语宾语（4）主语）主语+及物动词及物动词+间接宾语间接宾语+直接宾语直接宾语（5）主语）主语+及物动词及物动词+宾语宾语+宾语补足语宾语补足语（6）There be 句型句型造句造句
17、一句多译一句多译Reading is fun.Reading is enjoyable.Reading is a pleasure.Reading makes us happy.Reading offers us a lot of fun.Reading provides not only knowledge but also fun for us.We can get great fun by reading from books.主从复合句主从复合句（1）宾语从句）宾语从句 （2）状语从句）状语从句（3）定语从句）定语从句毕业班写作教学建议毕业班写作教学建议一.教会学生写作的步骤，训练学生
18、有序写作二.在日常的教学中注重积累三.在日常的教学中加强句型的训练四.进行科学有效的批改和讲评1教师批改、学生互批，教师面批 2作文讲评（信息点的完整性，结构顺序的逻辑性，开放性信息点描写的合理性，细节添加的适当性，信息点之间的连贯性，开头结尾衔接的自然性，词法语法的准确性，句子类型的多样性，文字标点书写的标准性。） 3范文呈现 假如你是王明，转学来到哈尔滨。你的好友张亮来信询问你的近况，告诉他寒假要来看你。请根据以下提示给张亮写封回信。写作要点： 1.表达你收到他来信之后的激动心情。 2.介绍新学校。 （1）设施：一个大体育馆，一个拥有10万册 藏书的图书馆。 （2）师生：友善，易于相处。
19、3.针对他独自乘火车来哈尔滨提出具体建议。 Words cant express how excited I was when hearing from you. I miss you very much and everything here is going on well. I have been here for several months and I cant wait to tell you what my new school is like. What pleases me most is that there is a large gym in my school, whe
20、re we students can play sports every day. Also, in my free time, I can go to the library with 100,000books. I often lose myself in the books and I enjoy the pleasure from that .Besides, the teachers and the classmates here are kind and warm-hearted. Its not hard to get along well with them. To my jo
21、y, Ive made a few good friends like you. Im happy to hear that youll come here tovisit me in the winter holiday. Ill show you around the beautiful city and enjoy the ice and snow. But remember -Safety comes first when you travel by train alone. Youd better take something important with you , such as
22、 your ID card and the train ticket.Youll be in trouble if they are lost. Whats more, be sure of the arrival time.That can make you get ready in time before getting off the train so that no luggage can be left on the train. In a word, be careful of safety and youll enjoy a pleasant trip. No words can
23、 describe my excitement when hearing from you. How time flies! We havent seen each other for about one month. Maybe youll eager to know my new life here in Harbin. Well, Im glad to tell you everything goes well so you neednt worry about me. I like my new school, which has a large gym. Students can d
24、o many sports there such as badminton,basketball and volleyball when we are free. As a saying goes,“Health is better than wealth.” You know, I love reading. There is a library that has one hundred thousand books. I always lose myself in the books.The teachers and the classmates here are so friendly
25、that we can get along well with each other. How happy I am when hearing that youll come in winter holiday. Since its your first time riding a train alone,youd better look after yourself.First, dont talk with strangers too much. You shouldnt tell anyone your personal information. Whats more, prepare
26、some books when youre on the train. Traveling by yourself will be boring . Books will make the journey better. I hope these tips can be helpful to you. Im looking forward to your coming. Best wishes Im really excited after receiving your letter. Im fine here. The teachers and the classmates in my ne
27、w school are very friendly and they are easy to get along well with. Also, our school that has a big gym is great. I really love it. As a “book worm”, I am happy because I can lose myself in the 100 thousand books from the library in my school. Im really delighted to know that youll travel to Harbin
28、 by train alone in the winter holiday. To help you have a comfortable and safe trip, the following should be paid attention to. First, make sure of the time. Getting to the train station half an hour earlier is a good choice in case you miss the train. Besides, dont leave anything behind before getting off. Most importantly, dont forget your ticket, your ID card and remember to wear more warm clothes. Looking forward to seeing you in winter vacation!
