1、 欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧 1.Brief as the passage is,it still arouses my endless imagination to the past time.Were I in the past,I would like that I stayed in Britain in the 19th century,where and when the Revolution of Industry was flourishing.With the inspiring atmosphere of the creative
2、times,I would try my utmost to do my favorite scientific experiment,since I have great interest in science.Whats more,the scientific lovers would be invited to join my little club to invent some brand-new inventions and create new designs of our daily lifes products,cooperating to put the theory we
3、learned from books to our practical life.In this way I could get inspiration of wisdom and resourcefulness to bring convenience and improvements to our life.第1页，共28页。2.Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past,I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China w
4、as in a disaster.Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty,I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance.Firstly,I would teach my modern theory and knowledge to the governors,instructing them to fight against the enemies and con
5、struct powerful armies.Secondly,all the citizens would be called on to unite together and resist other countries invasion bravely.Whats more,joining some anti-invaders parties would also be my choice.第2页，共28页。亮点句型写作指导亮点句型写作指导除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作中，增分添彩。中，增分添彩。第3页，共28页。比喻比喻 A i
6、s to B what C is to D.Like the sunshine,kindness can help those in trouble.Kindness is like the lighthouse,which can direct the way for those who are in dim situation.第4页，共28页。排比排比If I could go back to the past and do the above mentioned things,the last thing my grandpa remembered would not be the i
7、ndifference and the back of his beloved grandson.If I could travel back through time,the last memory between him and me would not be his closed eyes and the dead look of half-unconscious suffering.Then now,I would not have to live with this unbearable regret and pain for the rest of my life.If only
8、I could!第5页，共28页。倒装（赢在写作倒装（赢在写作 P37-38）Simple as the story is,Here goes the saying that _.Only when _ can we _.Only in this way,can we Only by doing-,can we_.Only after doing sth,can we On the west of the school lies a pond,where many fish are swimming.Under no circumstance should we-类似的用法：类似的用法：Nev
9、er/By no means/on no account/in no way/at no time should I.Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room when it began to rain.(no sooner，than)第6页，共28页。Had it not been for her sticking to being on time,she wouldnt have earned herself a well-paid job and more importantly built up an image of reliability an
10、d integrity.倒装倒装 Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past,I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster.Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty,I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being b
11、ullied without resistance.第7页，共28页。亮点写作的注意事项亮点写作的注意事项 1.过多的亮点，显得堆砌过多的亮点，显得堆砌 对策：亮点分布，尽量首句对策：亮点分布，尽量首句 2.亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻 对策：最好总对策：最好总排比排比-总的结构。照顾段总的结构。照顾段落的完整性。落的完整性。3.华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内容容 对策：先想内容，再想修辞手法对策：先想内容，再想修辞手法 4.过多注重运用亮点，没有注意谋篇，顾过多注重运用亮点，没有注意谋篇，顾此失彼此失彼 对策：谋好篇，定好
12、每点行数，才能下笔对策：谋好篇，定好每点行数，才能下笔第8页，共28页。亮点句型写作训练亮点句型写作训练 练习：练习：1.说明挫折的意义说明挫折的意义 2.你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。3.说说你对母爱的理解说说你对母爱的理解 4.谈谈决心对人的影响谈谈决心对人的影响第9页，共28页。使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：1.确定到底要不要确定到底要不要“虚虚”？2.确定到底使用哪个时态的确定到底使用哪个时态的“虚虚”？3.所谓所谓“一虚到底一虚到底”，其实是指在该假设情境中的，其实是指在该假设情境中的虚拟的时态的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虚拟虚拟
13、的时态的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虚拟！一切要看情况进行选用。！一切要看情况进行选用。第10页，共28页。说说挫折的意义说说挫折的意义 1.Hard and painful as frustration is,it is of significance in our life.As the old saying goes,“storm makes trees take deeper roots”,without frustration,never could we grow up as a strong-willed person.Were we surrounded by over-pra
14、ise and immersed in the pride and happiness,frustration would be a timely alarm,urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit.Were we confronted with obstacles,frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）（魔法石）,with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to
15、great opportunities to become strongerIn a word,life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.第11页，共28页。说说挫折的意义说说挫折的意义 2.Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much.Without setback,our life would be a rose lacking fragrance.Without setback,our
16、 life would be a voyage lacking direction.It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner heart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.第12页，共28页。老师对学生的影响老师对学生的影响 1.Suppose that teachers were absent in our life,students li
17、fe would be a picture with intense darkness.Without teachers,the laborious engineers of our soul,students personalities and characters would not be shaped.Without teachers,the ladder with selfless devotion,our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature.Without teachers,the sparkli
18、ng lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge,never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future.第13页，共28页。老师对学生的影响老师对学生的影响 2.Without the patient and careful teachers,never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult.Without the selfless
19、and affectionate preaching of teachers,never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future.Without the knowledgeable teachers,never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.第14页，共28页。母爱的理解母爱的理解 1.W
20、ithout maternal affection,we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care.Without this ever-lasting emotion,never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness.第15页，共28页。母爱的理解母爱的理解 2.Maternal love is like
21、 a circle.It has no beginning and no ending.But for motherhood,we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the mistaken track.But for motherhood,never can we be enveloped in warmth and merriment by a patch of sunlight.But for motherhood,we could be overwhelmed by endless darkness and the world
22、would fade from colorful and wonderful to dim and cold.第16页，共28页。决心的影响决心的影响 1.Determination is the fuel of ships,without which,never could we arrive at the shore of success.Determination is the walking stick of the climbers,without which,never could we reach the peak of life.Determination is the ver
23、y condition,without which,never could we get rid of the dark depth of depression.第17页，共28页。决心的影响决心的影响 2.Without the firm determination,never could individuals grow into strong trees struggling in the wind and rain.Without the steadfast mind,never could teams unite together to create miracle.Without
24、the unswerving resolution,never could countries unite and fight for the flourishing and bright future as well as a harmonious world.第18页，共28页。第19页，共28页。说说挫折的意义说说挫折的意义 1.Hard and painful as frustration is,（倒装）（倒装）it is of significance in our life.As the old saying goes,“storm makes trees take deeper
25、roots”,（名言）（名言）without frustration,never could we grow up as a strong-willed person.（虚拟）（虚拟）Were we surrounded by over-praise and immersed in the pride and happiness,frustration would be a timely alarm,urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit.Were we confronted w
26、ith obstacles,frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）（魔法石）,with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to great opportunities to become stronger.(虚拟虚拟+排比排比+非限制性定从非限制性定从)In a word,life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.(总结总结部分可以用现在时部分可以用
27、现在时)第20页，共28页。说说挫折的意义说说挫折的意义 2.Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much.(倒装倒装)Without setback,our life would be a rose lacking fragrance.Without setback,our life would be a voyage lacking direction.It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and sel
28、f-development in my inner heart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.（虚拟反说（虚拟反说+比喻比喻+排比）排比）第21页，共28页。老师对学生的影响老师对学生的影响 1.Suppose that teachers were absent in our life,students life would be a picture with intense darkness.Without teachers,the laborious engineers of our soul,studen
29、ts personalities and characters would not be shaped.Without teachers,the ladder with selfless devotion,our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature.Without teachers,the sparkling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge,never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the
30、 future.（虚拟反说（虚拟反说+排比）排比）第22页，共28页。老师对学生的影响老师对学生的影响 2.Without the patient and careful teachers,never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult.Without the selfless and affectionate preaching of teachers,never could students step onto a path with a br
31、ight and promising future.Without the knowledgeable teachers,never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.（虚（虚拟反说拟反说+排比）排比）第23页，共28页。母爱的理解母爱的理解 1.Without maternal affection,we would change from fragrant flowers into
32、weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care.Without this ever-lasting emotion,never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness.（虚拟反说（虚拟反说+排比）排比）第24页，共28页。母爱的理解母爱的理解 2.Maternal love is like a circle.It has no beginning and no ending.（比喻，多一句进
33、（比喻，多一句进行补充说明，使得比喻更具体形象）行补充说明，使得比喻更具体形象）But for motherhood,we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the mistaken track.But for motherhood,never can we be enveloped in warmth and merriment by a patch of sunlight.But for motherhood,we could be overwhelmed by endless darkness and the world woul
34、d fade from colorful and wonderful to dim and cold.（虚（虚拟拟+比喻比喻+排比）排比）第25页，共28页。决心的影响决心的影响 1.Determination is the fuel of ships,without which,never could we arrive at the shore of success.Determination is the walking stick of the climbers,without which,never could we reach the peak of life.Determinat
35、ion is the very condition,without which,never could we get rid of the dark depth of depression.（先总说比（先总说比喻决心像喻决心像，再用非限制性定从，再用非限制性定从+虚拟反说进虚拟反说进行论证，还采用了排比的手法）行论证，还采用了排比的手法）第26页，共28页。决心的影响决心的影响 2.Without the firm determination,never could individuals grow into strong trees struggling in the wind and rain.Without the steadfast mind,never could teams unite together to create miracle.Without the unswerving resolution,never could countries unite and fight for the flourishing and bright future as well as a harmonious world.(虚拟排比递进：个人虚拟排比递进：个人团队团队-国家国家)第27页，共28页。祝您成功！第28页，共28页。
