1、应用文写作讲评：关于“校园书画展”的告知信讲义假如你是李华，你跟新西兰学生一起参加了“长松长歌”书画展。他们已经回国了，请你给他们写一封邮件。内容包括：1.回忆参展过程；2.分享个人感受；3.希望保持联系。这道应用文题的情境设置在展后，新西兰学生参展后回国，李华写信问候，同时要求回忆参展的过程，类似于写新闻报道，分享个人感受，类似于写个人日记，这道题是两种文体的结合，但主体在于李华要告知对方一些信息。这篇应用文比较好地完成了写作任务，主要表现在要点齐全，对于主体段落要求的个人感受描写得比较到位，虽然个中也有一些表述不完善的地位，但是整体是值得肯定的。首段学生用how is it going寒暄
2、问候对方，紧接着就是learning that you have arrived home, Im writing to share my feelings.类似于这种套话，Sir一直以来都不是很支持学生去写，主要是因为在启承下一段时，这样的句子其实是可有可无的。在写作中，真正好的文章是多一句不多少一句不少，首段的“我写信来是为了分享感受”难免显得生硬。学生对参展过程和个人感受的描写还是很出彩的。他们是这样写的：We appreciated many masterpieces of calligraphy, paintings and seals by.theexhibition offere
3、d us a precious opportunity to approach the beauty of art. 描写感受：Through the exhibition, I gained a deeper insight into art and was impressedby.对于希望保持联系，学生用了keep continuing touch.很显然他们受到了中文“保持不断的联系”的影响，事实上这个continuing用的并不地道，保持联系可以说keep in touch or stay in touch等。范文Dear friends from New Zealand,How is
4、 it going? It has been a long time since we visited the exhibition in our school last month. Miss you so much!I still remember what a marvellous the event was and it provided us a platform to promote our mutual understanding. During the exhibition, we appreciated plenty of masterpieces created by Yi
5、yuan, the first principal of Chunhui. Whats more, with the interpretation from the volunteers, we were offered a precious opportunity to get close to the real art. Personally speaking, I gained a deeper insight into the personality through the artistic works such as ink wash paintings and calligraphy.I really wish you enjoy the journey and our friendship could last forever. Stay in touch.Yours,Lihua
