1、应用文写作讲评：关于“校园书画展”的公告讲义假如你是李华，你校将在体育馆举办“长松长歌”书画展，以纪念首任校长经亨颐诞辰145周年。请为校英文报写则公告，内容包括：1.活动简介；2.展览内容；3.注意事项。好的应用文题目应该是用尽可能少的文字描述清楚题干，而余出的内容有给予学生充分的想象空间，和艺术中的留白类似。考虑到“长松长歌”特殊的背景指向，本次书画展主要用以纪念经亨颐校长，其名又曰“颐渊”，因而在事先和学生讲授主题翻译，An Ode to Yiyuan，ode意为颂歌，有缅怀之意。学生的作品中可以看到对于事件的整体介绍，包括展品内容、布展亮点、时间和地点等信息，文字中充满了对本次展览的赞
2、赏，由此引发期待，并最终呼吁大家一同前往观展，整个脉络非常清晰。然而，我们也可以看到该学生作品中存在的一些问题：1. 语言错误，包含了搭配和时态等。amount of后接不可数名词，自然不能与masterpieces连用，traditional paintings后接is出现了主谓不一致的问题等；2. 人称混乱。补丁处的particular impressed me用到了第一人称，但通告一般为官方告知，不宜添加个人经历和感受。同理，最后的I strongly recommend that也多用于推荐信而非公告；3. 信息缺失。作为官方通告，除了重要的时间和地点信息外，还应补充一些额外的细节。比
3、如文中只提到日期，而没有具体的起止开关展时间，还有观展需要注意的事项也未有补充；4. 风格匹配。作为一次端庄典雅的传统书画展，用语应体现严肃和正式性，而开始的good news并未有这一特点，读来感觉突兀。范文“An Ode to Yiyuan”Calligraphy and Painting ExhibitionChunhui is to present a new exhibition,“An Ode to Yiyuan”, in order to mark the 145thanniversary of the birth of the first principle Jing Heng
4、yi, who is an outstanding educator and artistwith the nickname of Yiyuan. During this weekend, from march 24-26, we will be holding a series of activities to commemorate his birth anniversary, including this exhibition.From paintings to calligraphy works, and sculptures to historical issues in relat
5、ion to our school, our goal is to display Mr. Jings artistic genius and deeply cherish the memory of him and his outstanding contribution to foundation of Chunhui Senior High School.The highlight of this exhibition isYiyuansseveral paintings. One of his greatest works Three Friends in Cold Weather s
6、howing bamboos, plum blossom andchrysanthemum, was made with extraordinary skill. Most of hispaintings present Mr. Jings noble personality. To show respect to his great contribution and selfless devotion, many modern artists created art works displayed in this exhibition. This is just a small taste
7、of what is in store for you. We guarantee that“An Ode to Yiyuan”will make you understand more about our school history and the unique charm of this great principle.The exhibition will run from March 25-26, lasting two days.Opening hours are from 8:00 a.m to 6:00 p.m. No one will be admitted into the gym after 5:30 p.m. No photos or food and drink are allowed in the gym. Free for all.
