1、原文一致原则原文一致原则正能量原则正能量原则曲折性原则曲折性原则1.内容要前后衔接，上下连贯；2.语言表达风格一致。故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。Continuation writing读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架增加细节，开始写作增加细节，开始写作修改润色，整洁誊写修改润色，整洁誊写两段首句+正能量结尾所见所想所为所感大意主题主要人物事件结合评价标准修正润色Continuation writingContentMain idea:It is a story which
2、happened in a school between _ and _.a teachera studentMr.RowepatientcaringkindStevenunhappypassivehate everythinghappypositiveopen his heartI:wrote down what he/she saw into the story.Patience and understanding can create miracles.Tips:Find the theme from the reading material.Mr.Rowes colleague;adm
3、ire Mr.Rowe;What I saw/thought and how I felt.LogicPara.1:Time passed quickly that year,and before we all knew it,it was the last day of school.1.What did“the last day”mean?2.How would Steven feel and what would he do?3.How would Mr.Rowe feel and what would he do?4.How would the author feel and what
4、 would he think?Para.2 Many years later,Mr.Rowe and I were surprised when a handsome young man walked into our classroom,dressed in the army uniform.1.What did Steven come back for?2.How did he express his gratitude?3.How about Mr.Rowes response?一段内容：Steven和Mr.Rowe对于离别的所感所为所言及作者的所感所思。二段内容：Steven返校向M
5、r.Rowe表达谢意及作者的所感所思。Steven would leave Mr.Rowe.Para.7:with Mr.Rowe,his days of the fourth grade promised wonderful.action?words?facial expression?climaxStevenMr.Rowe met Steven in his classroom.Mr.Rowe cared Steven and taught him tricks on kickball.Steven would leave Mr.Rowe.beginningdevelopmentclima
6、xsad;heart-brokenhappy;positive;love Mr.Roweunhappy;passiveendingThe better Steven came back to thank Mr.Rowe._ plot line_Stevens feeling lineThemePatience and understanding can create miracles!excited;gratefulLanguage I have been in the teaching profession for more than thirty years,and one of the
7、best teachers I have ever known is Mr.Rowe.I was lucky enough to teach fourth grade together with him.Mr.Rowe had endless patience and understanding and I learned so much from watching him.He could perform miracles,like the one he performed with Steven,one of the unhappiest kids I had ever seen.Stev
8、en couldnt stand school.He didnt like being picked last for kickball.He didnt like the kids who raised their hands and knew all the answers,and most importantly,he didnt like himself.The first day he walked into Mr.Rowes classroom,he ignored the other students,looking angry and annoyed,and slid into
9、 his chair,knocking a couple of textbooks onto the floor.Mr.Rowe walked over to him and touched Stevens shoulder,but Steven pulled away.Nevertheless,Mr.Rowe welcomed him:Hi,Steven.Im happy you are in my class.We are going to have a great year.Steven looked around the room as if Mr.Rowe must be mista
10、ken.No teacher in his right mind would want Steven to be part of his classroom.V.+Ving and V.+VingV.+Ving and V.+VingAttributive Attributive clauseclause定语从句定语从句parallelismparallelism 排比排比parallelismparallelism 排比排比 So,while Mr.Rowe seemed cheerful and relaxed that day of school,it seemed like Steve
11、n was angry and confused.That day after classes,Mr.Rowe chose Steven to pitch(投球)the kickball at rest.Hey,Steven,Mr.Rowe commented,You are good at pitching.Let me show you my secret trick.Mr.Rowe taught Steven one of the tricks that not a single kid could perform.Steven learned fast and did quite we
12、ll!Everyone cheered for him!After the kickball,Steven sat as close to Mr.Rowe in classes as he could.When a question was asked,Steven lit up;when he knew the answer,he raised his hand;when he answered the question,his voice shook.However,he got the answer right!He said,with Mr.Rowe,his days of the f
13、ourth grade promised wonderful.That is not to say that every day went smoothly,but it was obvious that Steven grew to love Mr.Rowe more and more with each passing day.Adverbial clause of timeAdverbial clause of time时间状从时间状从with+N.with+N.Attributive Attributive clauseclause定语从句定语从句Language1.1.内容一致内容一
14、致故事大意一致，写作意图一致故事大意一致，写作意图一致2.2.语句连贯语句连贯 衔接词的准确使用衔接词的准确使用3.3.语言连贯语言连贯 语言风格一致语言风格一致4.4.结构连贯结构连贯 前后呼应前后呼应andand most importantlythe first daybutsoafterhowever1.Adverbial 1.Adverbial clause of timeclause of time时间状时间状从从2.Attributive 2.Attributive clauseclause定语从句定语从句3.parallelism3.parallelism 排比排比4.V.+V
15、ing and V4.V.+Ving and V.+.+VingVing5.with5.with+N+N.评分标准评分标准1.能准确写出故事大致发展方向，字数够，可给1515基准分。空两行以上，扣扣3 3分分；语法错误多，酌情扣扣1-21-2分分。6.有原文好句型进行合理改编，加加1 1分分。(用用标识标识出来出来)7.有进行主题升华，加加1 1分分。8.卷面无涂改，加加1 1分分。卷面好看，加加1 1分分。最高分23分Task 1 按照评分标准给 Composition 1 打分Task 2 按照评分评分标准标准 修正润色修正润色 Paragraph1Paragraph1 of Compos
16、ition 1Write your score down on the paper and show me the score when the time is up.Polish the first paragraph of the composition and choose one representative to show your work.Time passed quickly that year,and before we all knew it,it was the last day of school.The school yard was crowded with stu
17、dents eager to be back to freedom,each waiting,with controlled excitement,to board the school bus that parked in front of the school gate.We teachers filled the sidewalk,waving goodbye to the kids as the bus pulled out with their horns honking.But just at that moment,I saw a tiny figure running back
18、 towards us!It was Steven in floods of tears!He threw himself into Mr.Rowes arms,murmuring in a choked voice,“II dont want to leave you!”With red-rimmed eyes,Mr.Rowe hugged and comforted him,“I will miss you,too,you are such a great boy!”Many years later,Mr.Rowe and I were surprised when a handsome
19、young man walked into our classroom,dressed in the army uniform.The young man stood tall and proud,grinning like a child.It was Steven!Mr.Rowe and I couldnt believe our eyes.He saluted and hugged Mr.Rowe tightly!“I have come back to school today just to say thanks to you!”his voice trembling.I saw s
20、omething shining in Mr.Rowes eyes.It was such a wonderful moment that I was even moved to tears.Yes,Mr.Rowe did work wonders,so he deserved simple thanks from his former students like Steven.He also deserved thanks from me,because he was always there guiding me to be a better teacher.SummaryTips:1.F
21、ind the theme from the reading material.2.Apply the linking words from the reading material to writing.3.Immitate the language from the material.Assignment1.Polish your composition based on the assessment and hand it to the group leader before the school is over tonight.2.Group leaders are supposed
22、to hand in the compositions before the morning class this Friday.标题文字4.4.结构连贯：结构连贯：前后呼应，内容衔接前后呼应，内容衔接1.1.关注段落内部关注段落内部句与句句与句之间的衔接；之间的衔接；2.2.关注与续写关注与续写段落首句段落首句之间的衔接；之间的衔接；3.3.关注两个续写关注两个续写段落之间段落之间的衔接；的衔接；4.4.关注上下文间的关注上下文间的前后呼应前后呼应。He was so moved to tears that he held Mr.Rowes hands tightly with tears rolling down his face.So moved to tears was he that he held Mr.Rowes hands tightly with tears rolling down his face.(inversion回扣原文回扣原文
