1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习奶奶的人生大智慧：出门外出带上水桶，采撷生活中的美好1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文The Summer I Learned to Really SeeIt was a muggy(闷热)end-of-summer dog day in Missouri.I was preparing to go after the mailabout a miles distance,through fields and forests,across a river,from our farmhouse,in which three gene
2、rations of my family lived.“Take the bucket with you,”my grandmother said,handing me the very familiar bucket.“What for?”I asked,petulantly(使小性子).The berries had been picked,and it was too early for wild grapes,too late for roasting ears(穗).4续写原文“Youll find something to fill it with,”she said,her bl
3、ue eyes sparkling with anticipation.I didnt want to take the bucket.It would be a burden to me.Twice a day Id carried a bucket for milking.With it Id carried feed to the chickens,salt to the cows,sugar to the neighbors.Id had enough with carrying with the bucket!Nevertheless,I took the bucket.Halfwa
4、y to the mailbox,I set it down beneath a pokeberry bush(胡桃树).I neednt carry it the whole way,I reasoned.There was no mail.When I got back to the bucket,I saw that a few ripe pokeberries had fallen into it.With childish ill humor,I picked off enough clusters(花串)to fill the bucket,even though I though
5、t they were good for nothing.5续写原文“Arent they just lovely!”Grandma exclaimed admiringly when I set them on the kitchen table.She squeezed out the juice of the berries and we used the lovely red ink to paint rings on our fingers and pen letters to distant cousins.When I went to mail the letters the n
6、ext day,Grandma again told me to take the bucket along.This time I carried the bucket a little farther than the previous day before setting it down.There was only a sale catalogue in the mail.When I got back to the bucket,I dropped it in.But I felt vaguely uncomfortable,remembering the pokeberries.I
7、 caught sight of a bunch of peppermint(薄荷)growing close to the path.Funny,I had passed it every day and never noticed it before.Peppermint just doesnt spring up overnight.I picked a bucketful,its fragrance seeming to cool the day.Grandma was pleased with the peppermint.She liked to chew it and make
8、tea with it.6段首句Para 1：The daily routine to take the bucket along was repeated for weeks,and I began to see more.Para 2：One day when I went home,I didnt have anything in the bucket.7Part 2题目分析8续写原文分析9本文以每次外出，奶奶都要求我带上桶为线索展开，讲述了作者最初不理解奶奶为什么要她外出时带上桶。刚开始，她只是随手捡一些花串，但奶奶很高兴，并且将她用桶带回的东西都能有效利用。后来，她看到好的东西就能随
9、手放到桶里。即使有时什么也没有带回，因为她忙于观察路边的美景。其实奶奶的目的就是让她用眼睛去发现生活中的美。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点10续写思路分析 Para 1:The daily routine to take the bucket along was repeated for weeks,and I began to see more.由第一段首句内容“连续几周，我出去的时候都带着桶，我开始
10、看的更多。”可知，第一段可描写作者慢慢地学会了观察沿路的风景。11续写思路分析 Para 2：One day when I went home,I didnt have anything in the bucket.由第二段首句内容“有一天，我回家的时候，桶里什么也没有装。”可知，第二段可描写作者向家人解说桶里没有东西的原因。12续写素材 续写素材 带桶外出学会观察将装满东西的桶带回家有效利用将空桶带回家解说原因感悟13续写素材 续写素材 行为类 装满：be full of/be filled with.欢迎：welcome/be greeted with.描绘：describe/accoun
11、t 情绪类.高兴：with joy/with excitement.惊喜：to my surprise/feel surprised14续写素材 续写素材【高分句型1.Whatever I brought home with the bucket,I was greeted with Grandmas chuckles and great admiration.（由Whatever引导的让步状语从句）高分句型2.I saw the blue mist that gathered on our hillsides in late summer.（由that引导定语从句）15Part 3范文呈现1
12、6范文呈现The daily routine to take the bucket along was repeated for weeks,and I began to see more.I saw the blue mist that gathered on our hillsides in late summer.I saw brilliantly red blossoms on a tree,shaped like a big,open umbrella waiting for autumn rain.I even saw the newly-hatched chicks snuggl
13、ing tight with the mother bird.The father I went,the more I saw.Each day found a happy girl going back home with a bucket,either full with wild flowers or berries.Whatever I brought home with the bucket,I was greeted with Grandmas chuckles and great admiration.17范文呈现One day when I went home,I didnt
14、have anything in the bucket.“I forgot about it when I saw the monarch butterfly migration.”Then I described to Grandma the amazing scene of thousands of beautiful butterflies drifting over to get where they wanted to go.My face radiated with joy and eyes glittered with excitement.Then I said sadly,“
15、Sorry,Grandma,I didnt bring you anything.”To my surprise,Grandma hugged me and said in a soft tone.“Sweetheart,you dont need to fill in the bucket anymore when you learn to really see with your eyes.”18范文译文带着水桶的日常生活重复了几周，我开始看到更多。我看到夏末聚集在我们山坡上的蓝色薄雾。我看到一棵树上开着鲜红的花朵，形状像一把敞开的大伞，等待秋雨。我甚至看到刚孵出的小鸡和母鸟紧紧地依偎在一
16、起。我去的父亲，我看到的越多。每天都有一个快乐的女孩带着一个装满野花或浆果的桶回家。无论我用水桶带回家什么，都会受到奶奶的笑声和极大的钦佩。有一天，当我回家时，桶里什么都没有。“当我看到帝王蝶迁徙时，我忘了这件事。”然后我向婆婆描述了成千上万只美丽的蝴蝶漂流到它们想去的地方的惊人场景。我的脸上洋溢着喜悦，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。然后我悲伤地说：“对不起，婆婆，我什么都没给你带。”令我惊讶的是，婆婆拥抱了我，用温柔的语气说。“亲爱的，当你学会真正用眼睛看东西时，你就不需要再往桶里倒了。”19Part 4努力方向20高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语21定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）22Thank you!
