1、Unit 5 First Aid Period 5 Using Language ()写作培优课写作培优课 写作素养提升 急救急救(First aid) 【写作指导写作指导】 【话题阐释话题阐释】 本单元中心话题是“急救”本单元中心话题是“急救”, 旨在通过教学旨在通过教学, 使学生了解相关的急救知识使学生了解相关的急救知识, 树立树立 安全意识安全意识, 并能在别人遇到危难时并能在别人遇到危难时, 及时、正确地给予急救。及时、正确地给予急救。 文体概述文体概述 这是一篇英文稿件这是一篇英文稿件, 从文体上来说应该属于应用文。从文体上来说应该属于应用文。 【框架构建框架构建】 (开篇开篇: 陈
2、述急救的重要性陈述急救的重要性) Knowing how to respond properly can make a big difference. (主体主体: 如何对伤者施救如何对伤者施救)Firstly. . . Next. . . Besides. . . Finally. . . (结尾结尾: 希望能对大家有所帮助希望能对大家有所帮助)I sincerely hope that. . . 【典题示例典题示例】 假设你是李华假设你是李华, 你们学校的英语网站正面向全校学生征集有关急救常识的你们学校的英语网站正面向全校学生征集有关急救常识的 英文稿件。请你给该网站投稿英文稿件。请你给该
3、网站投稿, 介绍交通事故方面的急救常识。介绍交通事故方面的急救常识。 内容包括内容包括: 1. 首先保持镇静首先保持镇静; 2. 检查伤者呼吸情况检查伤者呼吸情况, 呼吸困难时要实施人工呼吸呼吸困难时要实施人工呼吸; 3. 如果伤者有出血情况要用布按压止血如果伤者有出血情况要用布按压止血, 然后等候救护车及警察的帮助。然后等候救护车及警察的帮助。 Step 1 谋篇立意谋篇立意 体裁体裁: 应用文应用文 Tips 重要性重要性: make a great difference 施救步骤施救步骤: Firstly. . . Next. . . Besides. . . Finally. . .
4、希望有所帮助希望有所帮助: I do hope 时态时态: 一般现在时一般现在时 人称人称: 第二人称第二人称 Step 2 语言支架语言支架 1. 知道如何正确应对可以产生很大的影响。知道如何正确应对可以产生很大的影响。 _ 正确地正确地, 恰当地恰当地 _ 产生很大的影响产生很大的影响 用用-ing形式作主语翻译句子形式作主语翻译句子: _ 2. 首先首先, 保持冷静保持冷静, 并报警和叫救护车。并报警和叫救护车。 _ 保持冷静保持冷静 call the police and an ambulance 报警和叫救护车报警和叫救护车 properly make a big differenc
5、e Knowing how to respond properly can make a big difference. keep calm 连词成句连词成句: _ 3. 然后然后, 注意他的呼吸注意他的呼吸, 尤其是看他是否呼吸困难。尤其是看他是否呼吸困难。 _注意注意 _做某事有困难做某事有困难 连词成句连词成句: _ _ Firstly, you must keep calm and call the police and an ambulance. pay attention to have trouble (in) doing sth. Next, pay attention to
6、the persons breathing, especially if he is having trouble getting his breath. 4. 另外另外, 如果受伤的人流血的话如果受伤的人流血的话, 把一块干净的毛巾或布按压在他的伤口上。把一块干净的毛巾或布按压在他的伤口上。 _ 另外另外 _ 受伤的人受伤的人 连词成句连词成句: _ _ 5. 最后最后, 和伤者待在一起并安抚他和伤者待在一起并安抚他, 直到警察和救护车到达。直到警察和救护车到达。 _ 和某人待在一起和某人待在一起 _ 安慰安慰, 安抚安抚 in addition/besides the injured pe
7、rson Besides, if the injured person is bleeding, press a clean towel or cloth onto his wound. stay with sb. comfort 连词成句连词成句: _ _ 6. 我希望我所说的能对你有所帮助。我希望我所说的能对你有所帮助。 _ 我所说的我所说的 _对某人有所帮助对某人有所帮助 连词成句连词成句: _ Finally, stay with the injured person and comfort him until the arrival of the police and the amb
8、ulance. what I said be beneficial to sb. I do hope that what I said will be beneficial to you. Step 3 润色成篇润色成篇 First aid for accidents If you happen to witness an accident, what should you do to save other peoples lives? Knowing how to respond properly can make a big difference. Here are some rules
9、that you can follow. Firstly, you must keep calm and call the police and an ambulance. Speak to the person to find out as much as you can about his injuries. Next, pay attention to the persons breathing, especially if he is having trouble getting his breath. If necessary, use the mouth-to-mouth tech
10、nique to give immediate assistance. Besides, if the injured person is bleeding, press a clean towel or cloth onto his wound. Finally, stay with the injured person and comfort him until the arrival of the police and the ambulance. I do hope that what I said will be beneficial to you. 【善积累善积累获新知获新知】 话
11、题词汇识记话题词汇识记 烧伤烧伤 burn 晒伤晒伤 sunburn 扭伤扭伤sprain 窒息窒息choke 溺水溺水drowning stroke中风中风 sunstroke 中暑中暑 wound刀伤刀伤, 枪伤枪伤 heart attack心脏病心脏病 cut砍伤砍伤 electric shock 电击电击 needle注射针注射针 IV needle 静脉注射静脉注射 bandage绷带绷带 scissors剪刀剪刀 tweezers 镊子镊子, 小钳子小钳子splint 夹板夹板 ointment软膏软膏, 药膏药膏 gauze纱布纱布 ambulance 救护车救护车 mouth-
12、to-mouth resuscitation口对口人工呼吸口对口人工呼吸 Heimlich manoeuvre海姆立克氏急救法海姆立克氏急救法 first responder第一线急救人员第一线急救人员 first-aid dressing急救包急救包 first-aid case急救箱急救箱 first-aid kit急救药箱急救药箱 first-aid appliance 急救用品急救用品 first-aid station 急救站急救站 first-aid personnel 急救人员急救人员 话题好句背诵话题好句背诵 1. If pesticide gets in the eyes,
13、first-aid instructions on the label should be followed. 如果农药溅入眼中如果农药溅入眼中, 要按说明书进行急救。要按说明书进行急救。 2. The surgical team consists of a senior surgeon, an anesthetist and a theatre sister with complete emergency equipment. 这个外科医疗队由一名高级外科医师这个外科医疗队由一名高级外科医师, 一名麻醉师以及手术室护士组成一名麻醉师以及手术室护士组成, 并带并带 有整套急救设备。有整套急救设
14、备。 3. When a person stops breathing, open his/her mouth and see if there is food in his/her mouth. 当有人停止呼吸时当有人停止呼吸时, 张开他张开他/她的嘴巴看看嘴里是不是有食物。她的嘴巴看看嘴里是不是有食物。 4. If a person cannot breathe, do your best to start his/her breathing at once, using a mouth-to-mouth way. 如果一个人不能呼吸如果一个人不能呼吸, 一定要尽力用口对口的急救方式让他一
15、定要尽力用口对口的急救方式让他/她开始呼吸。她开始呼吸。 5. If a person is hurt badly, try at once to stop the bleeding. Then take him/her to a doctor. 如果一个人受伤严重如果一个人受伤严重, 马上止血马上止血, 然后送医。然后送医。 6. When a person is bitten by an animal, wash the wound with cold running water before he/she is taken to see a doctor 如果一个人被动物咬伤如果一个人被
16、动物咬伤, 在送医之前用冷的、流动的水清洗伤口。在送医之前用冷的、流动的水清洗伤口。 写作点拨写作点拨 为了让庞杂的内容变得富有逻辑性和层次感。既要做到段落间的起承转为了让庞杂的内容变得富有逻辑性和层次感。既要做到段落间的起承转 合合, 使文章有整体性、连贯性使文章有整体性、连贯性, 又要做到句与句内在衔接。因此又要做到句与句内在衔接。因此, 会正确使用连会正确使用连 接词、衔接句接词、衔接句, 能为写作助一臂之力。能为写作助一臂之力。 连接性词语归纳如下连接性词语归纳如下: 1. 起始关系起始关系: to begin with, first of all, as we all know, a
17、s is known, as is shown in. . . , according to 等。等。 As we all know, good learning habits contribute to efficient study. 2. 时间顺序时间顺序: at the beginning, then, later, finally, at last, in the end, afterwards, since then, after that, immediately, meanwhile等。等。 At the beginning, I collected all the thing
18、s scattered in the rooms and put them in place. Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture. After that, I mopped the floor. 3. 条件关系条件关系: if, unless, in case(of), as/so long as, on condition that, provided(that)等。等。 I would be very grateful if you could meet my uncle at the airport. 4. 转折关系转折关系: but
19、, yet, however, while, otherwise, on the contrary, nevertheless 等。等。 However, not until the match was over did we realize that we lost it. 5. 因果关系因果关系: because, as, since, for, thanks to, due to, as a result of, so, therefore, as a result/consequence等。等。 Therefore, there is no reason for us to look
20、down upon ordinary jobs. 6. 并列关系并列关系: and, or, as well as, not only. . . but also. . . , either. . . or. . . , not. . . but. . . , neither. . . nor. . . 等。等。 We will have a good time there and I will send you some photos taken there. 7. 递进关系递进关系: besides, whats more, moreover, furthermore, whats wor
21、se, still less, to make matters worse, worse still, more importantly等。等。 Many of them can hardly look after themselves, still less manage their own lives. 8. 列举事实列举事实: such as, for example/instance, take. . . for example, that is to say, as follows, in other words, on the one hand. . . , on the othe
22、r hand. . . , for one thing. . . for another. . . 等。等。 On the one hand, I can earn some money by doing it to help my parents; on the other hand, I can gain some experience from it, which will do good to my future life. 9. 表示观点表示观点: in my opinion, in my view, from my point of view, as far as I am con
23、cerned, as for me, personally等。等。 As far as I am concerned, they stand for love, friendship and unity. 10. 总结总结: in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a word, to sum up, all in all, on the whole, in general, generally speaking等。等。 All in all, traveling is the best choice for us to enrich our lives and get ready for the new challenges.
