1、2020 学年第一学期五校联考学年第一学期五校联考续写续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。September is most beautiful in Strathroy,where people wholeheartedly enjoy the simple pleasures of life and nature.Roland was no exception.He was a magnificent German Shepherd（德国牧羊犬）,a little l azy and overweight though.He loved to doze in
2、the backyard.He yawned and stretched his body as he heard the slowly approaching footsteps of Mrs.Proudfoot.“Come have your lunch dear!”said Mrs.Proudfoot with her usual fondness for him and he wagged his tail affectionately in return.Roland was licking the last piece of meat in his plate when the d
3、oorbell burst into music.Mrs.Proudfoot hurried to answer the door.Roland stood alert by her side.“Good noon Mrs.Proudfoot”.It was Sam,her teenage neighbor.“My!My!You look pale!What happened?”asked Mrs.Proudfoot with genuine worry.She immediately waved him in and closed the door behind.Mrs.Proudfoot
4、was a lonely widow,but was well loved in her neighborhood especially by kids,though she had no kids to call her own.Once encouraged,Sam disclosed his dilemma.“My friend Barry lost a rare book of school library.It costs 150 dollars,but he has only 55 dollars and his poor parents cant afford to pay th
5、e rest.Barry is working part time but thats far from enough.”With a dramatic sigh he continued,“If he didnt refund the loss before the end of term,he will be dismissed from final exams.That will ruin his future!I have to help him,whatever it takes.He is my b est friend.”“Dont worry,Sammy.You want me
6、 to pay”but Mrs.Proudfoot was interrupted.“No,No,Mrs.Proudfoot.This is not what I came here for.Ill work for you.Would you favor me to walk your dog please?For 2 dollars a day.”He looked up with begging eyes.Mrs.Proudfoot clapped her hands in agreement,“That cant be better!Ive been worried about Rol
7、and lately.He does need some exercise!Its nice of you to make such an offer.”Sam thanked her over and over,“I will start tomorrow morning.”注意：注意：所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：Sam arrived very early the next morning.Paragraph 2：A mont
8、h later,Mrs.Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic.Reading：Analyze the story1.Read for main characters(who)Roland a magnificent German ShepherdSam a teenager;Mrs.Proudfoots neighborMrs.Proudfoota lonely widow(寡妇寡妇)2.Read for time and place(when and where)Time:SeptemberPlace：Strathr
9、oy3.Read for plotRoland,the shepherd,was having his lunch.Sam came to Mrs.Proudfoot,his face pale.Mrs.Proudfoot waved him in and encouraged him to tell what happened.Sam disclosed his dilemma:his friend Barry lost a rare book of school library costing$150 but had only$55.Mrs.Proudfoot offered to giv
10、e him the money.Sam interrupted and begged to walk the dog for Mrs.Proudfoot and get paid for$2 a day.Mrs.Proudfoot agreed,saying her dog needed some exercise.Sam was grateful and promised to start the next day.4.Read for personalities of the characters and important details Roland：*He was a magnifi
11、cent German Shepherd,a little lazy and overweight though loved to doze in the backyardyawned and stretched his body he wagged his tail affectionately in return.*Mrs.Proudfoot hurried to answer the door.Roland stood alert by her side.a devoted dog;is obedient to Mrs.Proudfoot Will it be easy for Sam
12、to walk the dog？lazy,doze,yawn,stretchneeds exerciseoverweightHow will Sam make Roland obey his instructions?but Mrs.Proudfoot：*“Come have your lunch dear!”said Mrs.Proudfoot with her usual fondness for him.*“My!My!You look pale!What happened?”asked Mrs.Proudfoot with genuine worry.She immediately w
13、aved him in.*Mrs.Proudfoot was a lonely widow,but was well loved in her neighborhood especially by kids,though she had no kids to call her own.*Once encouraged,Sam disclosed his dilemma.*“Dont worry,Sammy.You want me to pay”*Mrs.Proudfoot clapped her hands in agreement,“That cant be better!Ive been
14、worried about Roland lately.He does need some exercise!Its nice of you to make such an offer.”animal-friendly;kind-hearted;warm-hearted;considerate;thoughtful;affectionate;trustworthy;reliableShe needs company.Sam:*My friend Barry lost a rare book of school library.It costs 150 dollars,but he has on
15、ly 55 dollars and his poor parents cant afford to pay the rest.Barry is working part time but thats far from enough.”With a dramatic sigh he continued,“If he didnt refund the loss before the end of term,he will be dismissed from final exams.That will ruin his future!I have to help him,whatever it ta
16、kes.He is my b est friend.*“Dont worry,Sammy.You want me to pay”but Mrs.Proudfoot was interrupted.“No,No,Mrs.Proudfoot.This is not what I came here for.Ill work for you.Would you favor me to walk your dog please?For 2 dollars a day.”He looked up with begging eyes.a devoted/loyal/faithful friend;cons
17、iderate;a person of self-esteem and independence5.Read for theme(本文的主题可以从多个角度提炼，本文的主题可以从多个角度提炼，但是不管从哪个角度提炼，但是不管从哪个角度提炼，无论无论前面前面情节情感情节情感是是怎怎样的样的变化变化，最终的主题，最终的主题都都应该应该是积极是积极的的正面的。正面的。)1).Helping others is helping yourself.2).A kind person will never be lonely.3).Sometimes only a little kindness can ig
18、nite something shining.4).Roses given,fragrance in hand.Continue writing：1.先先把最后一句写好，即：主题句把最后一句写好，即：主题句Paragraph 2：A month later,Mrs.Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic.At the end of the storyRoland:Sam:Mrs.Proudfoot:fit and energetic,liked exercise got enough money for his frie
19、nd Barry to pay for the lost book so that Barrys future wont be ruineddelighted to find Roland fit and energetic;got visited every by Sam,not lonely any more.was thankful to Mrs.Proudfoot and offered to continue walking the dog,but for free.possible developmentTip1：根据对已给故事的分析根据对已给故事的分析,结合结合第二段第二段所所给
20、段落首句给段落首句,确定确定主题主题,写好主题句，然后写好主题句，然后再围绕主题来展开前面两段情节的再围绕主题来展开前面两段情节的发展。发展。The last sentence:Sometimes only a little kindness can ignite something shining,making the world more beautiful and harmonious.2.把把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句Paragraph 1：Sam arrived very early the next morning.Paragraph 2：A mo
21、nth later,Mrs.Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic.Possible sentence:With the temptation of the delicious meat,Roland followed Sam eagerly.Day by day,it gradually became a routine for both of them./Delightedly,Sam found Roland had gradually become willing and eager to have a walk
22、 outside.3.紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感或反应Paragraph 1：Sam arrived very early the next morning.Possible sentence:Seeing Roland lazily bathed in mild sunshine with eyes narrowed into a line,Sam darted towards him,arms widely opened,trying to tempt Roland to stand up and follow him out.Sam Rolandmain interactionPa
23、ragraph 2：A month later,Mrs.Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic.Possible sentence:Satisfied with Sams work,she gave him some extra money,saying,“Life is marvelous.Thanks to your help,a fat lazy dog has become strong and energetic!”/Wagging his tail merrily,Roland bounced beside
24、Mrs.Proudfoot,as if ecstatic over her praise./Enjoying the pleasure to roam along the country road with Roland,Sam also harvested a lot from the relaxing time.Sam Mrs.Proudfoot Rolandmain interaction4.把每段的中间补充完整把每段的中间补充完整(以ActionResponse的方法推动中间情节发展，即角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的反应)下面以第一段为例：Paragraph 1:Sam
25、 arrived very early the next morning.Seeing Roland lazily bathed in mild sunshine with eyes narrowed into a line,Sam darted towards him,arms widely opened,trying to tempt Roland to stand up and follow him out.Giving him a lazy glimpse,Roland politely wagged his tail and then turned his head away,fal
26、ling sound asleep again.(Roland Sam-Roland)Tip2：一定要一定要反复研读揣摩所提供的段落以及所提供的两个首句反复研读揣摩所提供的段落以及所提供的两个首句，注重对重要细节的理解，分析人物性格，注重对重要细节的理解，分析人物性格，领会领会故事故事发展方向和主题发展方向和主题。A possible version Paragraph 1:Sam arrived very early the next morning.Seeing Roland lazily bathed in mild sunshine with eyes narrowed into a
27、line,Sam darted towards him,arms widely opened.Giving him a lazy glimpse,Roland politely wagged his tail and then turned his head away,falling sound asleep again.Desperately brainstorming,Sam got a piece of delicious bone from Mrs.Proudfoot.Lured by the tasty smell,Roland swiftly bounced up and jump
28、ed at the bone,following Sam out.In this way,the first day was smoothly finished.Day by day,Sam was delighted to find Roland gradually become willing and eager to have a walk outside.Paragraph 2：A month later,Mrs.Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic.Enjoying the pleasure to roam
29、along the country road with Roland,Sam also harvested a lot from the relaxing time.Eventually one day,Sam was excited to tell Mrs.Proudfoot,“Barry and I have earned enough money.Thank you,Mrs.Proudfoot!But can I continue walking Roland for you?For free!”Radiantly,Mrs.Proudfoot nodded.Receiving a pos
30、itive answer,Sam was wild with joy and Roland,wagging his tail merrily,as if intoxicated.Sometimes only a little kindness can ignite something shining,making the world more beautiful and harmonious.这篇作文第一段的情节设计：Roland一开始不愿意跟Sam走，Sam用骨头饼干引诱Roland，并慢慢地让Roland喜欢上了这个活动的过程，情节设计合理。文中seeing，unwilling，excit
31、edly ruffling,tempted,bouncing 等分词的使用使文中人和动物生动起来,且与第二段首句衔接,是亮点。不足之处在于：little kindness would make the world more brilliant，主题提升合理，但在第二段的情节设计中体现的不够；原文中Sam帮Mrs Proudfoot 遛狗为了帮助朋友Barry 赚钱还清丢失书本的钱，这件事情在第二段里也没有后续提及。总的来说，这位同学的语言基本功还是不错的，也有一定的积累。学生习作1：这篇作文的亮点在于句子能以丰富的语言结构,如：v-ing,with 结构,adj.结构,v-ed等形式开头,使文
32、章读起来生动形象。情节构思合理，逻辑性较强。一、二两段衔接合理。主题提升方向是合理的,但是主题句的表达方式可以改进。比如可以这样表达：Though Mrs Proudfoot was a lonely widow,her heart was brimful of happiness and warmth.“Roses given,fragrance in hand”.She actually fulfilled herself by helping others.总的来说这位同学的语言有较多积累,功底不错。学生习作2：Language appreciation and accumulation
33、:dog:(from the given story)1.He was a magnificent German Shepherd,a little lazy and overweight though.adj.2.He loved to doze in the backyard.He yawned and stretched his body.V.3.he wagged his tail affectionately in return.V./adv.4.Roland was licking the last piece of meat in his plate when the doorb
34、ell burst into music.Mrs.Proudfoot hurried to answer the door.Roland stood alert by her side.V.Language appreciation and accumulation:拓展：sniff嗅，lick舔，trot小跑，dodge躲闪，bark犬吠 leap跳跃，zoom急速移动，rear up后腿站立1.A lean(瘦)brown dog was sniffing around here and there.When aware of people approaching,he swiftly l
35、eaped sideways and fled,ears back up,bony tail clamped protectively.V.一条棕黄色的瘦狗在东嗅嗅西嗅嗅。意识到有人来了，迅速地跳到一边，耳朵后竖，夹着皮包骨头的尾巴跑了。2.Under the hedge(树篱)glided a great dog,whose black and white colour made him a distinct object against the trees-a lion-like creature with long hair and a huge head.Appearance树篱下悄悄地溜出一条大狗，黑白相间的毛色衬着树木，清晰可见一头狮子般的怪物，长长的毛发，硕大无比的头颅。3.A thick-furred yellow shepherd dog came trotting down the road,head low,tongue lolling(头,舌等耷拉,下垂)and dripping.Its tail limply(柔软地,软绵绵地)curled,and it panted(气喘,喘息)loudly.appearance,v.一条厚毛黄色牧羊犬一路小跑而来,低着头,舌头耷拉着,滴着口水.尾巴懒洋洋地卷着,大声地喘着气.Thank you!
