1、2021 苏锡常镇英语一模读后续写：找错的朋友 题目： This particular day began at seven in the morning in Casablanca (卡萨布兰 卡). My Friend Mike and I were going to visit Abdel, a young man wed worked with on a Volunteer project in Kenitra, an industrial city on the Morccan (摩洛 哥) coast. Hed been expecting us to arrive in Casa
2、blanca for a few days now, and since he had no telephone, hed written down his address and name and told us to just show up-his mother and Sisters were always at home. Apparently the address he had written down was hard for foreigners like us to understand. When we got into the neighborhood, our tax
3、i driver started asking directions. Eventually, with the help of a policeman, we were led to a house down a winding road. Our driver went to the door and inquired. He came back saying Abdels sister was in this house visiting friends and would come along to show us where they lived. Soon a girl of ab
4、out sixteen emerged from the house. Surprisingly, she didnt look like Abdel at all. Still, Id seen other families where children didnt look alike, so I didnt give it too much thought. She then brought us to a yard. We waited in the yard while the sister went in and returned accompanied by her mother
5、, sisters and brother-in-law, all of whom greeted us with cautious warmth. We were shown into the living room. The mother told us in broken French that Abdel was out, but would be home soon. We sat on low, cushioned seats, drinking sweet mint tea and eating sugar cookies, while the family members sa
6、t with us and made shy, polite conversation that frequently fell into uncomfortable silence. An hour passed, more family members emerged from inner rooms. I was again struck by the fact that none of them looked a thing like our fiend. After another two hours had passed with no sign of Abdel, the fam
7、ily insisted on serving us a meal in their kitchen next door. “Soon was the only response I got when I inquired as s to what time Abdel might come back. 注意: 续写词数应为 150 左右 Finally we heard thewords we had been waiting for from the mother. Pleases Abel is back in the livingroom I took out the piece of
8、paper Abdel had given me in Kenitra and showed it to the new 写作指导： Clues: Setting: no telephone, Moroccan coast, a winding road, Characters: Abdel ( a volunteer project), a girl of about 16 My puzzle: his sister didnt look like him, nor did other families Emotion: we were greeted with cautious warmt
9、h The mother: tole us in broken French Plot: shy, polite conversation, uncomfortable silence, wait for him 写之前我的想法： 这一家应该比较穷，因为从路很丌好走，偏僻。 场景描写： Para 1: 1.我们的急切心情 2.见面的错愕（丌是朋友） 3.我解释地址错了 Para 2: 1.其他人的反应 2.对方的反应（为了把 sister 放迚去，同时照应这个地方穷，设计他看丌懂） 3.我对他们的感谢 结尾模式：对话+肯定+感悟 对话：提出明天送我去 我的感悟：丌同的 Abdel，相同的热情
10、我的下水文： Paragraph 1: Finally we heard the words we had been waiting for from the mother, “Please, Abdel is back in the living room.” We sprang to our feet and entered the living room eagerly, grouped by exciting family members. A young man greeted us with a confused expression. God! he wasnt Abdel! T
11、he young man hugged me enthusiastically and asked me whether we had met somewhere. Silence fell. Thus, I shared my story with him and told him there must have been something wrong with the address despite the same name. Paragraph 2: I took out the piece of paper Abdel had given me in Kenitra and sho
12、wed it to the new Abdel. At the moment, whispers came from the crowd, which grew into loud chatter. Heshrugged and said he couldnt read. Luckily, his sister exmained my paper and found where the problem was. The very Abdel lived in the neighbouring town. “My noblest guests, it is dark and roads are
13、quite rough. Why not stay here for a night?” said the young man earnestly. I replied with a heartfelt “thank you!”, followed by thundering cheers from the crowd. Yes, he was a different Abdel, but he showered us with as much warmth and kindness. (170 words) 写作感悟： 1. 原文由于对话没有，我揣摩续写是丌是也丌要写多少对话，所以，续写只有
14、一 个对话。 2. 原文丌少句式很复杂： 例如：We waited in the yard while the sister went in and returned accompanied by her mother, sisters and brother-in-law, all of whom greeted us with cautious warmth. We sat on low, cushioned seats, drinking sweet mint tea and eating sugar cookies, while the family members sat with
15、us and made shy, polite conversation that frequently fell into uncomfortable silence. 可见：过去分词作状语，并配上定从；同时还有现在分词作伴随状语等。 因此我在写的时候也写了下面的句子： We sprang to our feet and entered the living room eagerly, grouped by exciting family members. I replied with a heartfelt “thank you!”, followed by thundering chee
16、rs from the crowd. 3.关于照应： 原文有 silence，所以： Silence fell suddenly. 原文有 windy road，所以： it is dark now and roads are quite rough. 至于原文还有丌少次要人物的情绪描写，都在我的写作中渗透了，目的是体现丌 同人物的情感变化。 官方答案： Finally we heard the words we had been waiting for from the mother, “Please, Abdel is back in the living room.” We entere
17、d the lovely living room and a young man came forward with an uncertain expression on his face. “Hello, I am Abdel.” he said cautiously. Immediately I realized there was a mistake. “I Im sorry, Im afraid you are not the Abdel we are looking for,” I giggled nervously. For a split second no one said a
18、nything. Then Abdel exclaimed heartily, “It doesnt matter at all.” After hearing our story, he asked us to show them the address. I took out the piece of paper Abdel had given me back in Kenitra and showed it to the new Abdel. “This is Baalal Abdel!” said the second Abdel. “We went to school togethe
19、r! He lives less than a kilometer from here. I will bring you to his house.” After taking photos and exchanging addresses with the family, we hugged good-bye. Then the new Abdel led us to the home of our friend Abdel. There, I reached out and hugged him. All of us enjoyed what a beautiful surprise and simple kindness had opened to us: warmth, friendship and sincerity.
